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Adrienne's Surprise
by MichelleCD

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Comment by Michael on 02/17/13
I would love o see where this story will lead........

Comment by Tiffany on 05/13/07
can't wait to read more.  Please add more.

Comment by Paula on 08/11/06
love the start of the tale and hope to see more stories like this one come in the future.

Comment by Cassandra on 08/08/06
Dear Michelle,

I've read the start of this tale and I must tell you I love the concept. You have established all the concepts and subplots for a story I really want to keep coming back. I love how Adrienne has emerged and is taking over; how the neighbor is trying to contact Jack's wife about what she's discovered; how Jack's wife and Kellie interact; and the other antics of Jack's wife. I urge you to continue. I love how you seem to balance all these ingredients without being overly intrusive. For me, as an overview, this is really delightful. I must point out, however, "speed bumps" remain. You really should pay more attention to Tense and Spelling (eg. Kellie/Kelly as these do detract. I'll look for part 2 to see how all of the subplots play themselves out.

Fondly,

Cassandra




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