Just looking around.  Hi Topsy Turvy, love your name too.
Thanks for the feed back in both the story and the name.
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Elizabeth, Never, Liz, Lizzy or Beth, or worse Betty.
Cathryn, Never Cathy, or worse Ryny.
Mystery, To very, very special people, Misty or Missy.
You are correct I have not included my family name.
Bye. Miss you Ann.

Wow.  I have often come back to this stroy over the years to see if there has been an update but never left a comment.  Seeing the response from Elizabeth has prompted me to leave some feed back.  I too miss you Ann and whish you well.

I had a read the story again from what Elizabeth said regarding the two girls and have noted these findings from the story:-

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"Basically a person to share a life with. Nancy wants the same thing, and I once said to her, 'If he's really the kind of guy we want, we can share him “ whether it's legal or not.' If I seem to be rushing things, Alan, it's because we don't want to lose you."

"He is a nice boy," remarked Cathy, "and should make Nikki, and/or Nancy, a good husband."

"You'll have us and a lot more," returned Nancy.

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So it does seem both girls want him.

As to the surprise, a family grave yard or even a mausoleum could be the answer or bronze statues of Charity and Chastity.

I did giggle as to your fun reference to Brigadoon.

Elizabeth I love your name and I suspect you have not used your family name.

Hi Ann.  It’s a shame you stopped publishing.  There must be a good reason for it and I hope that you are in good health.  I too found the beginning just a tad, not quite on track.  As has been raised the legal document was produced far to quickly for his mother to sign.  However, if Cathy was a very good legal person she could have produced it quite quickly.  If this was the case, it should have been mentioned and thus understood.  That said, it did not detract from the story.  I just glossed over it.
Yes I would like to know what they saw in the garden.  More of that later.
If this had continued, I would say we would have seen them at the dinner as waitresses, at the town founders celebration, the dance and possible what Eve’s Mother’s reaction to seeing her son undertaking some of his tasks.  I do feel his mother should have been phoned everyday as she would be on her own and missing Eve very much.  Eve was with a lot of persons but she would have missed his mother so he too should have called more often and realised she would be missing him.
In several years time it would be interesting if Nikki and Alan did get together and I feel from reading between the lines that Nancy got involved in their relationship as well and that Nikki shared Alan with Nancy.  There was a subtle remark made by Nancy over this.
As to what they saw from the garden it may be a grave yard of the founding sisters and relatives, a part of the original town or Brigadoon.  If Brigadoon, they all walked into the town and are not seen for another 100 years.
More please, if possible?

so many of your stories are spellbinding especially the longer ones.you have had a lonely old man in tears with the sensativity of your writing.please finish this one,you have left so many promises of more fun for the three girls.its not the crossdressing that matters,its the love and beauty of the relationship.i see beauty in all things,male female,nature,a sunset or a cloud.it is something to be treasured,and i do.

I have to agree with Stephen,i'm also a straight male and non CD.But i just loved this story,i could not believe when i got to the end,what a cliffhanger.Surely there has to be more,what was the surprise ?.Anyway,well done,great story

  Hey!!!!!!   this  story is far too good to abandon !!!  I laughed,I cried,and I was glued to every page . There are typos and  a few words left out ........but  it  did not distract from the beautiful tapestry that  you have  woven with your  golden words !!!
  You  have to finish  this  one !!! What is the hold up ??? How can we contribute to the cause ???

  I am a straight ,non CD who very much like (ok  love  ) your  writings , I realize that  I am a bit  "sensitive " and have  never really explored my feminine side . I am quite surprised  that  I am so drawn to your stories ,I would not mind falling "victim " to women such as described in your  stories , wise ,caring ,sensitive and above all loving (with out sex being rushed into )
 

I've really enjoyed your stories, especially this one, I hope there will be another installment soon, Love and hugs Jaqui :-*

What was the "big surprise"?  Come on, what about part 11 (and 12, 13 and so on).  It's been nearly 5 years since the last part!

Would plzs go with the story. I think it is great story . they needs to be some twiest to it like he gets a spanking ,or gose back to babyhood for a day.

Hi I had a lot of fun with your novel :)
you might have over-philosophized at times but overall it was quite ok.
As for whom people will be in a relation, that has little to do with gender I think.
More with whom they are and want to be, and that will also change with, and at, times :)
Keep trucking & fill it up with more please :)

Cheers
yoron.

Are you going to finish this story?  After all, it's been three and a half years since the last episode!

Another excellent story which give one food for thought and tackles some of the questions about society and its thinking.

I think I'm the only one who thinks this, but I was sort of hoping that they would accidentally go too far; and in the process Alan would be lost and a half-formed Eve would be left.

Mostly because while what they are trying to do is admirable, there is always the risk of the person you are trying to "help" being lost or being assimilated into the new personality that was created.

Hello again, I read your story for the first time over a year ago. I so very much enjoy reading it. This time I have left my E-mail address. Please finish it, I love the characters and can't wait to find out what is to come next. Please let me know when you start again. Thank you for sharing this world with me.

I have really enjoyed your story. Please continue I need to know wot happined next Please keep going !!! Please keep going !!!

thank you
harry

Let me know when something happens. Talk about a snail's pace. It also occurs to me that your characters lack any pretense at realism. I know you are attempting not to fall into the "pathetic man + nasty women" trap but it shouldn't be so noticeable.

  you left us hanging again ...great story BUT NOT FINNISHED YET??

how long is the world suppose to wait ? you are a gifted writer..

now finish it ....peace rone :)

I have really enjoyed your story. Please continue:-)

I agree with DeeDee, the story should continue, I love it ^^

You have a great story there. If you don't like it exactly as it turned out, the only thing I could suggest is a rewrite, but don't let it drop! It's too good!

Today is March 8, 2006. It is not fair to put a to be continued on a story, and then drop it. There are to many stories on StorySite that are to be continued and they are older than this one. You have a great story going for you. I also believe that you have written stories since you stopped on this one. For shame.

More!!! Eleven and twelve? Please??

What was it? Please continue this, even though it has been over a year.

This is a Great Story i hope it will be continued.

this story is a good one about petticoat punishment an d intresting thew way alan admitted his fauilt straight away instead of trying to get out of it even though he was caught red handed i would like to have read someabout punishment for silly things or evn attempting to get away instead of full cooperation this was a wellwriten good story well done

After part 10:
Ok, this is making me think too much.  This has to be one of the most confusing stories I've read. (Which is not to say that that's necessarily a bad thing.) These women are playing mind games with Alan/Eve just as the author is with us readers.  I still seems all a setup; their are too many coincidences for Alan to be a random victim but there doesn't seem to have been enough time since he arrived for them to settle on him as the perfect victim.  I still can't believe this is all to get Nikki her perfect (after they finish molding him/her) boyfriend.  And now it seems way too nicey nicey with all the pseudo-psychobabble.  I keep waiting for the other shoe to drop and their REAL plan to be revealed.  Still way too many unanswered questions.  I still would like to see what happens to nicey-nicey if Alan gets fed up and says, "OK, I want out!"  Would the iron fist emerge from the velvet glove, as I suspect, or would they surprise me and say, "OK, here are your guy clothes; change and go home." without any tricks like manipulation by guilt, etc.  Arrrrrgh!  Can't wait for part 11!

Hi Annie!!
 I love the story!!  I hope you continue the characters for a new series!!!
 Keep writing!  I love what you are doing!
  Hugs,
 LisaE

GREAT STORY!!  As Jezzi Stewart implies, it appears to be a setup.  But so what? Well written - good character building - new twists at every turn - suspense - holds your interst anticipating the next cornor - is it to be book length - at their age you have years to go before the wedding.  Having just experienced true euphoria after going out en femme and being accepted as female, I can relate directly to what Eve is experiencing - even being old enough to collect the government's pension.  Keep up your most intriguing saga and I will keep visiting Crystal's wonderful site often. THANK YOU.

After part 8:
OK, They sort of sound like a flock of Jane Thompsons; I tentatively and probationally ID them as the good guys ... er, girls. BUT:   If The panty theft was a lucky coincidence, what was the plan to get Alan had that not occured?  What was their contingency plan if Alan had not adapted so easily into their feminine web or if he had not liked it, because I find it pretty unbelievable how, never having had any TG thoughts prior to this, he has so wholeheartedly embraced their ultra-femininity.?  To have made a judgement about Alan liking what they planed just on the basis of seeing him be polite at the realestate agency, they would almost have to be psychic, unless there is something more going on here than we know.   I still wonder what they would have done if he had said, "I want out." There also seem to be a lot of people in on this.  The plan still seems extremely intense and complex to have been set up in only the short time that Alan and Jan had been there.  It seems like they have too much invested that they would  simply let him go if he had asked.  There still seems to be a lot of mystery here, and my "good girl rating is still only tentative.  What a GREAT story to make me think so much!

Annie, honey, you DID read our comments.  Hooray for you (and us by the way).  It's very nice to know that you intend to complete this great story.  I would email you, but my email is still in the toilet due to a line surge triggering a NORTON firewall that I can't get around--Norton is going to be history).  Love your work--thank Goddess that your muse is whispering in your ear so well.  Sharlee

I like the story so far.  The wide eyed, by golly, i did it (and I enjoy this) is comfortable.  I just hope that when the crew gets into a real under attack situation, Alan's learning to take care of himself matches or surpasses the girls training.  It would fit given his quiet presonality.  

Hi Annie O,
          glad to see it just says - will be continued - at the end of this part. Lovely story, hugs and gentleness matter a lot.
Thanks, Hugs, Chris.

Anne, I LOVE IT!!!

I want to see their wedding.  What work is Nikki going to do.  How will Eve welcome her home.  Nikki having a baby and Eve getting to nurture it!

So much to tell us!!!!!

Plenty of interest. What'snext for Eve?

Please continue, don't leave us in suspense this way. The story is very good but I haven't the foggiest where it is headed. Too many details still need to be explained.

Dear Big Sister:

I just love the way you can create a special world with new dimensions and boundaries, make ir so visually compelling, and remain so true to this "alternate universe" but simultaneously keep it so consistent with "normal" life.  You are truly gifted.  I've LOVED all seven installments thus far and very much look forward to the next!  Please keep Allen's transformation going, and keep us in the loop, dear Sister.  I am completely immersed into your world.

Love & Huggs,
Sheryl S.

My dear yes there is my dear these storys are just great

<<   Is there really enough interest in this story to continue?  >>

Well, of course!  There are still unanswered questions regarding motive.  Alan was obviously set up; is it really all for Nikki to get a future submissive "husband"?  With Alan and mom being new to the neighborhood, how did they know he was the one to set up?  Etc.  This could still be a lot more sinister than it appears.  We still don't know for sure whether these ladies are the good gals or the bad gals.  
As far as Allan/Eve, RL experience shows that the almost instant euphoric femininity that Eve is feeling is very likely only an incident away from a massive crash and macho backsliding - what if, for example, mom, while agreeing to all this initially, see's her SON in this ultra-femme euphoria and panics, communicating that panic to Eve; wouldn't that put Allan back in charge in spades?  It's WAY too early in the process to make assumptions about Allan/Eve's future.  

I personally would have liked it if you had left out the last sentence and started chapter 8 with  ALLAN taking Cathy up on her offer and saying "I want out."  Would Cathy & Co. really let him go?  (I know, Cathy didn't really say she'd let him go, only that she'd call his mom, but her choice of words was planned so that he would assume she meant she would let him go.)  

Perfect story! Please DO continue! I just adore the sweetness of the story and the way you "cross the genderline" so nicely!

Hugs from Sissy Baby Paula and Snowball (my toy puppy)

 Ann, I have been a fan of your work for some time, and it makes my day when I see your name in the 'What's new' column at Crystals. Your stories are well written and thought provoking.I just wish I had half of your talent as an authoress. Do I want you to continue with this series? Does a donkey like strawberries? OF COURSE I DO!
   More power to your elbow girl. Elsa_b

"I'm telling on you"! Now you've done it! Then you ask if, you should continue the story? That's low, and sneeky. Part 1 was a good start then two & three got me hooked after that four through six were gravy with some meat, but Part Seven has most of meat on it's bones. But I'm still hungry for more. Will Eve fall in total love to Nancy or to Nikki? Will Alan stay Eve? I don't know! "But I want to", please Ann don't punnish us too long I need to know the future.

Ann, in my 15 Dec 03 remarks, I asked you to continue your story.  You do not have to ask if there is interest in your work, THERE IS!!!!  My dear, if you have faith in your story, then write it and share with us.  We your fans are always ready to read the results of your muse's whisperings in your ear.  We are always there for you, just PLEASE STOP asking us if your work should be continued.  Continue it or stop it of your own accord --Sharlee

yes ther is!
 ANN ive liked this story from the start and think you shoud .
I want to see where its gooing ,what eve gits into ,what she dose
around tre crouds of people in the situations you just gave.
 So saying keep going.
                     L  Melissa

chaptrs 8 and 9 are part 5, and 10 is part 6.

Still missing ch. 8-9
Parts 5 and 6 are identical

I also would like to know about the missing, Chapters 8 and 9. In chapter 7 part 4, we where left with, Niki saying, that she wanted Alan to enjoy being around girls. In Part 5 it sarts out with Chapter 10 Nacy changing Alan's diaper. So who ate the missing chapters?
Chris W

NEVER and I repeat, never add a question mark after "To Be Continued!"

We will always get the good comments and the bad comments no matter what we write. Make a definate statement "TO BE CONTINUED" period. Giggle, giggle.

You have your best story so far here and if you keep improving with each posting as you have been it just might turn into a classic. That is, with some more editing and a rewrite once you have completed this serial.

Some of the comments left for you are right on the money and some will always be the 'please fulfil my fantasy by including...' Giggle, giggle.


I love your story and please do continue! Write it girl! Your beliefs and philosophy realy add to this story.

Huggles
Angel

Have I missed something? Part 4 was Chapter 7 and Part 5 is Chapters 10 and 11. Do Chapters 8 and 9 exist?

Ann, be a doll and give us the rest of the story.  You have started out well and it is a good tale as far as it goes.  There is lot's of potential here to be one of your best.  I would like (as others seem to indicate) to know MUCH more about Mrs Winters (hidden surveillance cameras--for example, indicate a Master Controller-type personality.  The question for most of us, I believe is,  are Mrs Winters and company nice people or monster's.  There is plenty of appropriate concern for we your fan's.  And please stop asking if you should continue the story.  The answer is yes.  I believe we have adequately demonstrated that to you!

So far Its been a good story but...
I fear that Alan is in mortal danger from these women. Its all to well planed out. As others have stated why is Alan (a new kid in the area with few friends)the only one being punished? And the way they got Alan's mother to sigh over her son to who knows what really bothered me.
 

after part 4
    I'm enjoying this, but it's still confusing.  Again, what they are doing with Alan is way way too organized to be spur of the moment.  They had to have planned ahead of time to snare him; Alan has to have been set up for this, and the other two boys in on it, otherwise why aren't they being dealt with?  Why Alan? How did they know anything about him since was new to the area?   What is the hidden agenda here?  I really can't see Cathy and her daughters as the good guys yet.

Love your stories and this one especially.  Have read other comments and they have expressed my concerns much better than I could.  I would like to see you really focus on explanations of obvious hidden agenda's.  Waiting for the other shoe to drop, has limited appeal after a while.  Please give us more and soon if you would be so kind.  Your avid fan's await your new works.
Huggles,
Sharlee

After part 3.  I don't quite know where or how far this is going but so far there has been no abuse or deep humiliation, which is very good.

I am looking forward to the next part of the story.

after part 3:
    I will just reenforce my comments and questions from after part 2.  This is all way to well organized to have been a chance thing.  Alan had to have been set up.  WHY?   Sure Catherine and the girls are smooth talkers, but is there something more sinister going on?  Some subliminal conditioning as well as the physical changes?  Alan and his mom are accepting the changes and the psychobabble way way too easily.  Inquiring minds want to know.  (This is a good one, Ann, keep it up!  Personally, I would love to see a detailed salon visit, with hair extensions added so the wig wasn't needed.)

I was going to make the same comment as Jezzi. As I was reading I thought, "Why does she have forms all ready for signing?". I get the feeling that these Ladies have done all this before.
Looking forward to seeing where this story goes from here.

After part 2:
    Mrs. Winters just happens to have in loco parentis papers handy?  And she and her girls go after Alan like a well oiled machine with all the props handy?  Sounds too well prepared for response to an unanticipated event.  Is it all a setup?  Is Mrs. winters behind John and Bobby getting Alan to do what he did?  That would explain why she's not going after them.  If it's a set up, what's so special about Alan that she would deliberately plan on feminizing him?  What's Mrs. W's motivation?  Looking forward to part 3.

continues to be intriguing, but maybe more fight out of mom?

I like this story.  It looks like the kid has been set up to be turned into a sissy and now a battle will ensue to determine his fate.  I like it so far.

Well, Ann, you really DO have everyone's attention! What will you have your characters do? I hope you already know, so that these messages aren't influencing you.

Just one point: I didn't feel that the meeting between the two women was done as skillfully as was probably desirable. Obviously the hostess was really upset at the boy's coming into her home. Perhaps indeed that is why she acts so brusquely to the boy's mother. Whether her motivation is vengeance or a do-gooder helping to straighten out a feckless youth, this does not seem a productive approach.

What do any of us know? Have at it! We'll be observing -- and enjoying.

     leah

hmmmm. . .

well, this has potential.  Bothers me that the would-be petticoat disciplinarian is going after one of the victims and not the instigators - when she KNOWS who they are.

Hmmm. . . 'Alanna' (with his knowledgeable and full cooperation) as the bait by which she 'captures' the two real villians? hmmmm. . .

Well, Anne, m'dear, you HAVE my attention.  Excellent start, and smooth writing too boot.  Great work.

warm furry hugs!

Tiggs

(I'm writing this before reading the others' comments, especially
Jezzi's, so I won't be unduly influenced one way or the other....)
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Nice beginning, & I think I'm going to enjoy the story. The
intent is, I assume, to put Alan into dresses & have a lot of fun
humiliating him. Fine. But it helps a great deal if the motivation
is plausible, & here it is flimsy: a panty raid is not the same as
grand theft, & Mrs Winters's response is grossly out of proportion
to the offense. I think she has problems we haven't learned about
yet. I find myself hoping Mrs O'Shea will prevail, although it's
clear that she won't. Well...maybe Alan will come to love dresses.
I hope he does, quickly. What a sell for Mrs Winters if she ends
up delighting him instead of tormenting him....
.
--Pervy

The start of the story was simular to many already here but the reaction of the mother was different. I am curious to see what twist Ann has for this story. The level of writing is very good which helps make for smoother reading. Thank you Ann.

I agree with Jezzi "AGAIN." This is getting scary isn't it Jezzi? Giggle, giggle.

GREAT story so far with a twist that many beg for. A parent that fights for her son's right to remain a son! Giggle, giggle.

There are a few ways to go with this and I bet you are going to have the son make the final decision as to what his punishment will be. Yes, he is offered the different choices in court after a lengthy battle or in a settlement to avoid a very costly court battle.

Giving the choices you describe so far one month in dresses if done discretely would be the choice I would make. Military school? No way! Juvi? No freakin way! Dresses for one month? The best of the choices. The way it will be done is what must finaly be worked out between mother and mother. Will it be humiliating and ruin the boy in this community or will it be done profesionaly and with discretion? I hope so! Can't wait to see where this one will lead!

Love it so far!
Huggles
Angel

definitely not the usual story, but i like it that way- i will anxiously await part two and hope for more twists and turns- keep on the road less travelled, please!

I agree with Jimmy;   You go, Janice!!!  Please keep this on the road less traveled.  On the other hand, If Janice wins, there's no TG fiction story.  I wish there was a way for Janice to win but Alan still ends up in skirts.  

Will this story go the way as indicated at the end of the first part?  Or will it go like a lot of others, with the old bitch getting her way.  Lets see, the boy is a juvenile, no previous convictions, really just committing a prank (stealing a pair of panties) would a judge send the boy to jail and turn him into a harden criminal.  I do not think so.

I hope this continues in the right direction.  Or at least the right direction that I would like.