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An Embarrassing Game
by Dick Dunham

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Comment by Silvia. on 08/19/11
DISGUSTING!

Comment by Tiffany Jean on 02/10/07
Great story concept.  I would love to see you do more with the story.  Keep up the great work!!!!

Kisses,
Tiffany Jean
aka the vinyl princess


Comment by Pippa K. on 09/02/04
Interesting idea for a story, but it could have used a little more development.  There's too much of a hurry to get to the payoff, whereas a little delay and tension could have been most delightful.  Why not rewrite this to include some of the interplay between the game players and to at least explain how you win or lose this modified game?  It's all just !Bang! and we're there, but no clue as to how it happened.  The interplay with his ex-girlfriend at the end is competent, so I know you're enough of a writer to do this.



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