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This is a horrible story!
I can't believe you wrote this!
Bad, bad, bad, bad, bad.........................
Silvia.

The story seemed to drag on  ( no pun intended) much too long before the meat of the story unfolded.  Strangely erotic revenge but it was not tied to scope and circumstances.  How did she get her past 'fuckers' to the point of turning fem? Did she induce hormones at a time they were dating ?  a lot of loose ends..But the 'hot tub scene'  made reading the story worth it.  How many of us have gone to a party or grouup and found another person who has been transformed as we have by our hostess?  My experience was one filled with fear until I suddenly realized that my boss was the lady sitting across from me.  There is a little reality in all fiction. Thanks for the story

this needs more &thorough reading at a later date i have at this time just flicked through i need to read again to fullly understand the wriing then will comement again

After part 2:
    Susan admits that the guys sleeping with her didn't know about each other; that makes them a lot less a group of bastards and her a bit of a slut, I'd say.  Seems like she wants to  avoid taking responsibility for her youthful sluttish ways and blame everyone but herself for her problems.  I hope the guys get together and strike back at both Susan and Kate.
    What I can't decide yet is whether Susan really thinks what she is doing is for the guys own good and really thinks they can all be friends again, in which case she is insane, or whether she is really evil and sadistic and what she says is her being sarcastic.  Probably a mixture of both???

From the summary I thought the plot would be a little better than it was though I still found it a good effort and found areas of the tale that I did enjoy.

I agree with all the others...

1. You did not make this believable that Pete should be turned into a woman...I mean, you did not actually specify the reason.
2. You did not spcifically state what medication makes up the "mixture", and did not specify what they did do to Pete during the week he was "out"?
3. The misspellings, lack of quotation marks and other punctuation made this a very difficult reading...So you are untidy, so what. When you write a story, at least have the decency to write a good one...I agree that this story has promise...but this first part is a bust (no pun intended).

I guess this is another Vicki Ternish tale about  manipulating women and a wimpish man who just keeps giving in.  I like the story because it already has my blood boiling.   I really would like to know if Susan has real grounds to be angry at Pete.  Was it a real bastard break up, or did he do it in a nice way and she just went off the deep end?   Right now I don't know whether Pete is getting what he deserves or is a true victim; I'm assuming the latter, and that makes both women true bitches, one evil, the other insane.   If so, he should stop being so passive.  He obviously has access to sharp implements for the lawn; he should take down Kate and tell susan to go to hell!  I'll keep reading!

Sorry about the 'poor production quality'. I am untidy and apologise for the pressure it causes the reader. Thanks for the comments. I value them!

I felt you had a lot to say, but didn't really have the room to say it all.  If it's a first attempt at writing - fine.  A little too much the victim role for my tastes.  I'm sure others will like it.  You can't please everyone - no writer can.  But keep writing - it gets better.

Another story of disproportionate revenge. {sigh}  And not an easy read, either, due to poor production quality.  Misspellings, inconsistent punctuation, stray words (apparently left over from an incomplete edit session) make for spasmodic reading.

Nevertheless, one aspect of the premise stirs some interest.  Does Susan really want Pete, but only as a woman?  Or is she merely using that hope, in a Vickie Ternish manipulation to prevent him from bolting, as she ratchets up the abuse?

I hope the production quality improves.  As it is, for me, it's not a "keeper".

D.