If you were trying for a Guiness Book of Records award for the most spelling and grammatical errors in the shortest story, you did quite well, the story itself is rubbish. I hope you get the point of your other critics, give up, you are not an author.

I quickly read and scanned this story. I'm in agreement with several other responses.

The, "lost a bet with my Wife," line has, indeed, been used in many stories and in real-life, too.

I guess the writer doesn't use spell-check and didn't do well in his or her English Classes in Grammar and High School. I think I saw a little, "text-talk," spelling, too.

I know, that this is a fiction site but there seems to be no problem with everyone always having excess money.

I AM my Mistress/Wife's Housemaid/husband. I have my Housemaid's Uniforms for my housework. I also hold down two, part-time jobs.

While I do all my chores in my high heel Mary Janes, they're only 3.25 inches high, when measured correctly. Housemaids need, "working shoes;" not, "sittin' shoes."

It could have been a nice story, although trite.

Perhaps, English is a second-language for this writer.

I just wanted a short story to read before my bed-time. My alarm sounds at 2:00 A.M. and it's now 8:24 P.M.

I'll visit this story site again.

"Missy," Susan Pauline
Housemaid/husband

Regardless of the quality of the actual plot,(unbelievable) the spelling and grammar as bad is found in this story renders the whole thing unreadable. However, at least you are writing something! It can only get better. Good Luck!
Catherine

I didn't read the story because it is very, very bad!
I'm sorry for you!
Silvia.

Too fast too slick too unreal too bad   but..I still got a hardon and milked myself thinking of the situation....thanks

You have annoyed a few people, hope you don't take it to heart. Perhaps let them eat their words by posting a fabulous story next time.

i understand the bet but the aftermouth was a bit bit drastic &a huge betrayel good story though well done

I can understand a bet to try to see what a woman goes through, but not the "I will become a woman".  No guy in his right mind would do that.  Also, why would the girlfriend put him through this for more than a week or two?  The idea was to teach him what it is like on the other side, not drag him through the door, and shut it afterwards.  She then elects to force surgery on him.  No doctor would perform ANY surgery without the consent of the patient, unless it was necessary to save that person's life!  The doctor, the hospital, and the girlfriend would all be guilty of criminal actions.  This would not only mean a huge civil suit, but jail time for both the girlfriend and the doctor, and quite possibly the doctor's license too.  Lets see what we have here:  a girlfriend goes overboard and destoys her boyfrind ( a lot of love and compassion in this relationship); an illegal surgery that maims a person is performed, and the girlfriend and the doctor will lose everything they own, and do serious jail time.  The spelling, and grammar are the least of the problems.  The plot has serious problems.  The best stories are believable.  This story could not happen.  Please think out the consequences of actions.  Also, if this could happen, don't you think he would track her down, and get serious revenge - like mutilating her ( cut out the tongue, burn off finger and toe prints, probably cut off her clitoris also), and then sell her into a 3rd world country brothel?

the plot is good story is not long enough the sizz of the breasts unfair as well as his girfreind leaving him what a unfair person his girl was still one point is do not make bets that are liable to leave you worse of than you were more could be added to this story but good writing

short story the plot is interesting but needs more work i think that you have a good writing start but it needs more work in time you will have a good future ahead a bit more pratice good start

I was turned off before I read even one paragraph. If there's a point to this story, I missed it because I couldn't tolerate the syntax and spelling errors, much less the "u" instead of "you." Write for your readers! Why waste your time writing a story that no one will ever read?

The beginning of the story is old hat and has been used several times before, usually better, by other authors. Then we get the ‘bet’, wow wasn’t that quick, and the conditions! What can I say?
Where did all those clothes come from, or do we assume that both parties are the same size, and, as if by magic, breast forms.
Sorry, but by the time I got to the point where he went to the hospital, I decided that I had enough and didn’t want to read this anymore.
There are so many spelling, style, writing and factual mistakes that I had to check the date (no it isn’t April the first). At face value, the author has made no attempt at getting the story right. Anyone who reads it would think it is an amateurism first attempt (I’m an amateur, so I should know), but I’ve read ERC’s comment and there’s merit in what she says.
I can think of three reasons for the story to have been written:

1 – to poke fun, maybe even spite, at us.
2 – as a bet, to try and write a very short story covering as many keywords as possible.
3 – as an attempt to get readers so riled up that they will get off their arses and comment about a story.

I leave it to you to decide.

Just a look at the Keywords should tip us off - so many!

This offering is NOT the amateurish attempt that it appears to be on the surface. It is a MAJOR put down , kick in the arse at all T girl stories and their writers!

Kelli-j has concocted a contemptuous piece that includes so very many elements of what many would like to see in in a story, but presented them as a poorly masked ridicule.

She is NOT the unskilled writer she would like us to believe, but one who has the skills to slap all of us in the face and laugh her ass off because she thinks she got away with it!

Nice try! Better luck with your next attempt!

I had a real problem trying to wade through this piece looking for some sort of plot.  Unfortunately, nothing was developed and the writing style needs significant improvement.

Your premise would have made a nice story if you'd taken the time to develop both the characters and the situation.  I really look forward to your next story with the hope that you slow down a bit, give us more to digest, and split your story into paragraphs.

I am the normally the last one to be negative but as people pointed to me at time there are some spelling mistakes.  Also there is a recover time after any type of major operation. One wouldn't be let out of the hospital the next day. I believe one post op told me she spent 8 days in the hospital for her operation and recovery.

I hate to be so negative, but as spirited as this is, the writing needs a lot more work.  "You" is the right term, not "u."  This seems to have been written hastily, and it doesn't do anything but rehash a lot of ideas that have been better done elsewhere.  I would hope you would rewrite this and make it more coherent.  As it is, it is not even publishable.  Take this as constructive criticism.