Interesting with a great twist at the end.

I liked the story, but the end was very hard to accept.
Please, keep writing, you're a great writer, and I like your style.
Kisses.
Silvia.

LOVED THE STORY.VERY EROTIC.DEFINITE TWIST ENDING.MORE.MORE.

I loved this one, the ending was certainly not what I expected.
Please keep writing

While I like a good story that is kind of twisty, the ending sent a shiver up my spine, it was a clever ending that I found original, yet very disturbing.  

Loved this story!  I even enjoyed the twist at the end.  Since I live here in Tampa, it adds a touch of realism to think that it all could be true.
Have you ever been to the web site www.tgcomics.com?  This story seems like a natural for it.  
Keep up the good work!  I have enjoyed your stories very much

Terrific story.  And spooky.  Marcus's motivation isn't clear, but
he obviously has problems!  The story reminded me of one I read as a
teenager, "August Heat," by (I think) a man named Harvey.  I won't
describe it here because (a) it takes too long & (b) it might be a
spoiler, which would be a shame.  All in all, a great story on an
unusual theme.  My contratulations.
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--Pervy

This is a really neat story, Karen's best effort to date.  The idea is imaginative and she pulls it off well, sot the story is fun, sexy, and well paced.  

I didn't have any trouble with the download, as mentioned previously.  Karen's writing is much improved over earlier stories, and although some readers may not love the very short paragraphs Karen uses here, I found they made the reading quite easy.

Keep up the good work Karen.

I'm sorry.  I had to stop reading your story.  There are too many duplicates.  Its like everytime a new paragraph starts with a quoted string.  Part of the text is duplicated?

I hope you'll fix these and resubmit the story as it seems nice.

Dayna.