Hi, good story, But Ashley betrayed her own sister, is not fair.
But anyway, I liked the story, good work.
Keep writing.
Kisses.
Silvia.

Wow - what a great story.  Ashley is a wild and crazy girl (boy) who really shows her/his sister how to have a good time and get what she/he wants - men !!! You must keep writing - this story get's me over the top everytime.  From the dressing, to the car ride, to the party, to teasing and finally sex - this story is totally awesome!!! It is my dream come true - going to a party dressed (and really looking) like a litlle school girl slut. Then teasing with all the guys and finally getting the hottest one there - you're sisters boyfriend. OOPS -SORRY SIS! BUT FACE IT, I'M HOTTER THEN YOU AND PUT OUT A HELL OF ALOT MORE TOO! Just sit back and watch your brother show you how to be the little cock lover.

it's been two years now and still nothing new from you.  Please write more
come on where is the rest

Wow - it's been a year already and still nothing new from you.  Please write more - we need Ashley back and soon!

PLEASE write more to this story !!!!  Ashley has such great potential!!!

crazy wild aston good story well written a shock to his sisterwho did not reconise him way to go all for halloween night

Wow - what a great story.  Ashley is a wild and crazy girl (boy) who really shows her/his sister how to have a good time and get what she/he wants - men !!! You must keep writing - this story get's me over the top everytime.  From the dressing, to the car ride, to the party, to teasing and finally sex - this story is totally awesome!!! It is my dream come true - going to a party dressed (and really looking) like a litlle school girl slut. Then teasing with all the guys and finally getting the hottest one there - you're sisters boyfriend. OOPS -SORRY SIS! BUT FACE IT, I'M HOTTER THEN YOU AND PUT OUT A HELL OF ALOT MORE TOO! Just sit back and watch your brother show you how to be the little cock lover.

------- Very good so far. My personal preference is for the story line to slow down a little, with more detail and a bit more depth in the personalities. You certainly have the skills and knowledge for that type of effort. I'll be watching for more of this story and anything else you write. Thanks.

RJMcD

I definitely agree, continue with the story.

After sending an e-mail message directly to Alex, much of which was in response to Sharlee's comments, I went back to the story and realized that his request for reader feedback wasn't worded to imply (as Sharlee seems to have interpreted it) that he was asking whether he should continue with this story. All he said was to let him know if you liked it. That's the same request that is made many times over at any story site: let the authors know when you like their work. There was nothing in the phrasing of his request for feedback to necessarily indicate any insecurity or uncertainty.

And just for the public record, I think it's a great story beginning, and I'm looking forward to reading future installments.

Sharlee, why don't you just come out and say what you mean?  LOL.

Alex, why are you writing?  That is a question you must ask yourself.  Don't ask others if you should write.  You will get two sets of answers, no and yes.  For whatever reason, write and some will enjoy what you write and others will not.  We can't please everyone, so concentrate on pleasing yourself.

Dear Alex, you write extremely well.  However, you have stumbled upon a pet peeve of mine, which is "SIBC!"  You have (with the beginning of this story) extablished that you are a writer of potential.  If you choose to continue this story with the already established level of prose quality, I shall be glad to read it.  I am always ready to become a fan of a "good" author.  However, if you have to ask your readership that should you continue your work, then I feel that if you are that insecure, you should probably quit and spend the rest of your life bemoaning that you sold your talent short.  Do it my dear, or get off the pot!!!!--Sharlee