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Babe In The Woods
by Jennifer White

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Comment by Kitty on 04/04/11
Daisy is Delusional, boy or girl that was a typical childlike reaction -shakes head-

Comment by JT on 09/29/03
What a sad and disturbing story.

Bummer.

Comment by John on 09/28/03
I agree that the villain was too cruel to Andre.  I got shivers from reading the ending.  He tried to save what he thought was a little girl (it wasn't like she had pointy ears or there were any clues she wasn't human) and was punished for it.  I'd hate to run into such an evil fairy/elf/whatever in the forest.

Comment by Mary on 09/28/03
I thought the story was very good untell the end where Andre is killed off for acting like a child. Isn't that what Daisy made him for the last 2 years? So because s/he got excited and trampeled a small patch of flowers Daisy kills him.

I'm like to beleave in Karma so I like to think at some point Daisy will find hirself as a very large man living a lonly life far from her beloved flowers.

Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 09/28/03
Poor Andre.  Power corrupts, and it certainly had, over centuries, corrupted the villain of this story,  Daisy.  Andre was a nice guy, trying to do the right thing, protect who he perceived to be a child, and she completely disregarded that.  I can see Daisy's point, about the way adults treat children, and I can even see her reasoning behind Andre's punishment .  But that is certainly what it was to Andre, punishment*, and for Daisy then to renege on her promise to turn him back, just because he flattened the flowers again was really a cruel abuse of her power.  He really did learn the lesson about treatment of children, but because "Andrea" didn't live in the woods, he forgot about the flowers.  Not only did Daisy not cut him some slack for that, she, in the author's own words, murdered him:   << Each passing signpost on the road to womanhood would kill him off a bit more. And as Andrea moved from being a girl into being a woman, he would be completely forgotten. >>  More proof that no good deed goes unpunished.

* - Personally, I think femininity is a great gift, and I would have hoped that Andre would have enjoyed his time as Andrea, but the fact that he didn't shouldn't be held against him, and, in fact, it was not given as one of the reasons for Daisy's action.




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