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The Bank Dicks
by Pamela

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Comment by Silvia    (from Brazil) on 01/31/10
I didn't read all the story, because is a very bad story.
Silvia.

Comment by Silvia    (from Brazil) on 01/31/10
I didn't read all the story, because is a very bad!
Silvia.

Comment by Molly on 06/29/08
I didn't very much enjoy this story. The pun contained in the title and brief description give it the character of a "shaggy dog" story, where the joke is on the listener or reader. I think I will provide my own synopsis, so that others may decide for themselves if this is something that they want to read.

Billy is a teller at a bank, who has a huge crush on Samantha, another teller at the bank. He would love to date her, but considers her to be out of his league. He doesn't dare to ask, because rejection would crush his fantasy that she might welcome his advances.

Billy is also a crossdresser, and wears lingerie to work under his work clothes. Near closing time one day, the bank is suddenly invaded by two robbers, who round up all of the employees before any of them can activate the alarm. Samantha is threatened with rape, Billy begins to plot escape, one of the robbers sees Billy's thoughts in his face, and makes Billy strip.

Billy's lingerie is now revealed for everyone to see. The author has all the characters make obvious, inane remarks, designed to maximize Billy's humiliation. Samantha voices her disgust, tells him that she was hoping he would ask for a date, and that she wants nothing to do with him now.

Despite all of this, Billy volunteers to suck "The Bank [robbers'] Dicks" to rescue Samantha from rape. Graphic descriptions of his heroic sacrifice form the bulk of this story. I skipped through (instead of just bailing out), because I was curious to see how it would end. The robbers leave with their loot, no one gets shot, Billy cleans himself up, and the police are called. The bank employees celebrate Billy's heroism, they cover for him so his secret is not revealed to the police, he is welcomed to dress as a woman to work in the future, Samantha now wants a relationship with him, and she offers to take him shopping.

I don't think that suspension of disbelief has any relevance to this story, as I do not see that there was any intention to make it plausible. Whether or not this is a personal fantasy of the author seems impossible to say. My own "take" on it is that this story is a practical joke that the author is playing upon the reader, and I am not very amused.


Comment by debra on 06/22/08
please continue there's a whole lot that can be added.
your story ony started let the girls help her along



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