KpveUU There is apparently a bundle to realize about this.  I suppose you made certain good points in features also.

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IbzKFP I value the article. Much obliged.

CfjHJi I really liked your article.Really looking forward to read more. Cool.

What a fantastic story, will this be continued ever?

I guess you do not like to communicate with those who comment on your writing? Oh well, anyway Are you the 7K diaper boy? I mean two episodes both 7k in length.

Try bumping it up at least 3 more K's ok?

Now this is almost just like the first part only the alian spe;;ing out his future and the actual events repeated them selves.

Is this the end or can I look forward to some more episodes?

Huggles
Angel

Nice beginning and with leaving the 'draw in' for the next chapter as wide open as you could.

The only thing I can give you as advice at the time is this; you have to keep a rule in mind and that is length of the chapters. One rule I found that is right on the money is to keep each chapter at least 10K in size. 10 to 15 K is preferable because a lot of readers will not even bother reading something shorter than 10K unless the title strikes their fancy. Giggle, your name caught mine! Giggle, giggle.

Have you read my short story called "How It All Began?"

Huggles and keep up the good work!
Angel