Thanks for a great read,Bob.  This is head and shoulders above the norm. I agree with other posters here that you gave it a Twilight Zone twist at the end.  Nicely done!

Bob, I really enjoyed your story Before My Time. I especially liked the part where Bear becomes Toni and all of his new experiences as a young woman. The ending was a little frustrating, but it fits with what I have seen of your style in your other works posted here.

I began with the intent of reading one chapter a day, starting yesterday, but after I finished reading chapter two this morning and went on to do other things, I found the story had a hold on me and I came back and read the last two chapters. I just finished the story and read some of the other readers' comments before writing these.

I do have one suggestion for you though. You should have someone proofread your stories for you, if you can. If not, put the work aside for at least a couple of days before attempting to proof it yourself. As writers, it is very difficult to proof our own work, immediately after we've written it. Our eyes play tricks on us and correct little errors in our minds so that we let them slip through.

I think you are a very skilled writer with an excellent imagination and a strong voice for telling stories. I look forward to reading more of your work. Stay with it, please.

Now Bob you're very near being quite the dedicated sadist here, you do know that?

You're in fact introducing a closed timeloop wherein Toni is as Toni.
But remembering being Bear, then becoming Bear becoming Toni.
And then being as Toni, Bear becomes Toni 4real remembering being Bear???
And this one will be rerun for time and time eternal, this ah, twoyear loop :)

Awh, what are you doing to my poor head here :::)))
Keep on writing Bob :)

Cheers
Yoron.

I really like the way you write.
I'm starting on chapter four after this :)

I'm sort of disappointed though that you didn't allow the relationship between Bear and Toni to develop on their own terms.
This one should fit very nicely at bigclosetr.us I think.

I like stories wherein the author tries to develop a good plot involving empathy and care.
And you succeeded splendidly even though I rather would have prefered both to live.

Cheers
Yoron.

I truly enjoyed the story.  I got goose bumps over the last couple pages of chapter four.  Imagine your nightmares actually coming true.  I did get a sense early on that Toni was a little clarevoyant.  I would have put in the last diary Toni have written a very detailed description on the dream ending with detailed note to Bear (in Toni's Body) indicating she knew he would be reading it after her death.  That would have been very 'Twilite Zone'.  Anyway it was a very good story that I had a hard time putting it down/

I really enjoyed you story before my time.  You did a wonderful job writing it.  Are you planning on writing more on this story?
Loved it.

Thanks for part 4 of this story.  I enjoyed the first three parts immensely and was concerned that it wasn't finished.  As Rebecca Stewart said, I didn't want to put it down either.
I've no idea just how accurate are your descriptions of recording studios etc but they certainly seemed authentic to me and made the story 'believable'.

Thanks for the 'Outer Limits' ending, Bob. I enjoyed the story greatly.

Have really enjoyed the story so far. (chapters 1-3) Hope chapter four will soon be finished and posted. Thank you. Roberta

    Fantastic..... I'm unsure of what to say, other than I enjoyed the first three parts of "Before My Time".  I am now franticlly searching the "net" for more of this story because like any good book "I don't want to put it down".  Please continue soonest, I know I'm only thinking of my own selfish interests, but that's the kind of self centered bitch that I am.  Keep up the excellent work, and thank you for the pleasure I've received so far.
               Sincerely:Rebecca Anne Stewart.

Rockin' good story, Bob. I look forward to Chap 4.

this is a brilliant writer i look forwards to any other stories by this writer.thank you

Brilliant, well constructed story. Characters are totally believable unlike some stories on this site.  As for the TG element, is it needed?  It is a good solid story. Congratulations Bob, now where's part 3????

A long buildup, but the end of Chapter 2 makes it look as if it's
going to be worth it.  As for where the TG element comes in, I'm
betting that it will arise as a consequence of the events at then
end of Chap. 2.  In the mean time, we have two very will developed
--& interesting--characters & a good supporting cast.  How can you
go wrong?

Pervy

Bob,
    You have me on the edge of myseat!!!!!!  Hurry with the next chapter PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!

A well put together 2 part story. Lookin forward to the next part.

I rather enjoyed this slower development (even without a TG element) and the reasonable-sounding detail about recording etc. Very much looked forward to part 2 and seeing where this is going.
Thankyou for the story so far.

Nice story, good character development, but what has this to do with TG?

Nicely written story and I enjoyed it very much.  The first chapter ended rather abruptly; now, I'm primed and anxiously awaiting the remaining installments.