I saw some nice heart here. I agree, the english is very rough. My sugestion would be to find a good editor. Many TG fiction chatrooms have good writers who would be happy to help make a heartfelt writing into a wonderful story. I might also suggest going to the nearest University or College's book store and ask what books are used for introductory writing courses - they often are very readable and very helpful (I've kept mine from college). Keep trying, and one day, your stories will shine as brightly as you do!

A bit hard to read but the redemption of Mark by turning into Jane is a heart warming short essay. My thoughts to Jane; don't let the detractors get you down and try to learn as you go.

Jane dear I can look beyond any rough spots and see the love and the care that you put into your stories.  They have the beauty of a primitive painting.  

This is very wonderful, though my favorite however was the one called "New Life." I thought that was wonderful, who the husband and boss was happier being his wife's secretary after his problems became too much. I enjoyed the way the wife's life went on and she found a new husband. Somehow I had hoped that would be for Jane, that she would have met maybe a worker at the plant or a foreman who loved her in spite of her full figure (some men prefer a heavier woman). It would have been sweet if Janefell in love and the ex-wife could have become the maid of honor for Jane.

If you ever do a new life part 2 that would be so very nice. And of course Jane is still just the office-manager and secretary and happy.

Good luck dear.

I must answer Kanda
Yes my writing is not the best .When it come to the Technical side of writing yes I am not very good.I am not an educated person I left school just about able to write my name and address managed to pick up some spelling when I was at sea. The little I have learned I have picked up myself.Now I know you will say go to night school just what I am trying to do as soon as a place in I go.I write what I feel yes it is not top of the range English but lets be fair I am out in real world so have walked the walk as well as talked the talk so I feel I have some thing to say  .People the bods who write are just that bod s not English teachers.So you have to bear that in mind when reading this stuff. I also find some of the very nasty comments some people give Paul a little unfair the person seem to have a good soul and to be kind that goes along way .I know I mixed with real scum .So good ones are not thick on the ground my dear. Well that all take care love Jane

Isn't it interesting that Paula, the worst fiction writer on any site is the one who praises you. Jane it's nice you're over your problems now please learn to write coherently. What you post has a lot of heart but it's so sloppy as to be embarrassing.  Sorry to be blunt but someone had to say it. Why are you so indifferent to those who try to point  you the right direction?

a short story that gets right to the point and tells it as it is in a most lovely way.