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Is Claire a witch?

Cute story, but now you need to show how she lives as a new girl

I agree with Shalimar. Too short and needs additional punishment for what was done. Thanks

This is a nice start to a story, but it needs to be finished.  The transformation is interesting, but that's all it is.  Please complete it.

a good first story. Nice transformation sequance and rather sweet story in it own way. You first two story posts shows you have talent and I look forward to reading more from you in the future.

It's not bad, at least, for one of your first offerings.  I felt it could be longer, and fleshed out a lot more.  I enjoy the concept of this, albeit typical, story line.  

Personally, I find transformations, in these sorts of stories, to be much better when you don't leave it to just one paragraph of the usual body parts doing this and that.  It's much more enjoyable to read how it feels for the person undergoing the process both mentally and physically.

Grammatically, it could be better, but that's nothing that can't be fixed.  It's a mere technicality.  Overall, though, it just felt rushed when I felt it had the potential to be more, but it's not a bad start at all.