a good start to what so far seems to be the making of a good story
more please

please continue this story please

This story is a little rough around the edges, but the crime caper aspect lifts it above the run of the mill. I enjoyed part one, and look forward to future installements.

One small nit... The criminal brother and his sister appear to be fairly young people (the story age rating suggests their early twenties). It's simply not credible that the sister would already have reached the rank of Superintendent in the police. She'd have to be over eighteen to enter the police, do basic training and spend two years as a probationary Constable before becoming eligable for promotion to Sergeant. Then she'd have to shoot through Sergeant, Inspector and Chief Inspector to reach Superintendent.

Nice idea for a caper.  The language and presentation could use a little work, but so what?  Keep going!  It's definitely an interesting read.  If you're trying for realism, I just have one little gripe.  Other authors here have done this, too, so you're not alone.  Here it is:  Identical twins are always the same sex.  Any other twins are just sharing the same space and the same birthday, not the same genes.  Brother/sister twins don't usually look any more alike than any other ordinary brother and sister.