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Boy to Princess - The Beginning
by Jennifer Allison

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Comment by sweetangel harsha on 08/20/11
jennifer ur stories are so great , and ur story "boy became princess"influnced me very much . i luv the stories very much . hun if u give permission i wanna continue ur story "boy became princess". hun i promise u if u give a chance i will write as sweet and nice in a way that all will like it . i wont get any bad name for u r story . i promise u plz allow me to continue ur story i didnt find any way to contact u so i am posting it as a comment . plz give me reply to me . thank you

Comment by Akiko on 09/28/10
WOW I just love this story so much! Do please let me know of a up date of this story. It reminds me of a Amine called Ranma 1/2.
Do keeps up the great work.
Sweet dreams
Akiko

Comment by Rena on 08/30/07
I guess she has moved on I hope she allowed another Author to continue her stories and they would inform us.

Comment by Rena on 02/19/07
I hope your still around I don't want to seem rude I know that your prepared for something else but could you please tell me if you found someone who can and will be able to finish your stories for you.  Thanks a lot either way.

Comment by Jade on 12/17/06
Hey Jen I get that you been busy or you haven't found an editor or the long waits with other summit stories and how long they take.  This is a very good story and I hope that you fine what you need in order to continue it.  It has been to long since you summited anything in.  Please get this going again I found you to be a very good author, and I still hold that opinion about you.  I am not sure if or where you will find another good editor but I do wish you to get some of your unfinish stories started again and have the chance to finish them.

Comment by joanne on 03/16/06
Please continue the story.Don't worry about every detail (other comments)because of closed-minded persons.It is still a good theme.

Comment by Katherine on 11/05/04
I'm really enjoying reading this story.  If you keep writing, we'll keep reading.


Comment by Simon Rudy on 10/28/04
Part 4 is a different story and doesn't relate to "Boy to Princess"
It repeats another story on the same update!

Comment by Pippa K. on 10/17/04
Still hoping you can write yourself out of the box you put yourself in.  The last time this happened was 1000 years ago?  Okay, the PM might not be absolutely sure how this all works.  Maybe the nightly changes actually stop at some point, or become monthly changes?  (Just think, PMS, Pre-Mutation Syndrome!)  Changing at midnight everynight sucks, especially if you're going to bed earlier.  What to wear?

Comment by Paula on 10/15/04
had to re-read part 1 to remember the story but good work. Keep writing the story.

Comment by Old Freind on 09/30/04
Lovely work!  Keep it Up!

Comment by Pippa K. on 09/09/04
Normally, in a monarchy, it doesn't matter how old the new ruler is.  In absolute monarchies, where the king or queen actually ruled and set all the laws, a minor would be either given advisors or a Regent would be appointed to rule on his/her behalf.  In a parliamentary monarchy (which yours clearly is), where the monarch is but a figurehead, it wouldn't make a teensy bit of difference if the monarch was 21 or 16.  They would assume their royal duties.  There are several examples of this from the 20th century.  Typically, a monarchy can't tolerate not having a monarch for even a month.  You handled that situation well, but then you impose a 5-year period with no acting monarch.  There are dangers in creating an overly-complicated plot.  Strongly suggest you simplify it and find some way to give the people their queen before they abolish the whole thing or plunge into the very civil war you warn against.
Also, unless you are a really, really great author, it's almost impossible to tell a story that spans years and years and still keep the characters and story working.  Also, the nightly sex-change gimmick is going to be a problem, especially as you've opted for it to be "Mother Nature's" work and to involve a massive amount of energy and radiation.  Assuming that She would do it once is enough of a stretch.  Now you want to make Her do it 1800+ more times!?  The radiation alone will wipe out the kingdom!

Comment by Paula on 09/08/04
great start hope he choose to be a woman when the time comes. Hope to read more of this story.

Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 09/07/04
If the girl Dean has become is a princess, isn't Dean himself now a prince during his 24 hours?

If the whole "Dean is the heir" thing is to be kept secret, it will be difficult since over 100 people already know.  What about the tabloid reporters/photographers that usually follow high government officials?
 
How will it be explained why Dean only attends school every other day - or "Deanna", for that matter?  I would think it would be dificult to actually learn anything aboput being a girl if the lessons are canceled out be a return to testosterone every 24 hours?  How can either he or she develop any kind of normal relations with peers, let alone possible marriage partners with this 24 hour change thing?
 
How much power does the monarch have?  Since there is a parliament and PM, and the citizenry doesn't seem afraid to question the government, my guess is not a lot; why then civil war if Dean becomes ineligable?  Won't there be an evil agent of a foeign power or domestic terrorist group trying to get Dean to lose his/her virginity?
 
Does Dean actually have a choice?  If HE decided to find the nearest prostitute, would the government let him?

Congrats on a story that's not just same old same old.  I'm looking forward to part 2.



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