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Breathe
by Fran Avatar

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Comment by Angie on 10/23/14
You should consider writing in the general suspense/crime thriller mainstream market.  This was a very intense story.
Angie

Comment by Arquebus on 08/08/09
Excellent story. Round characters, horizontal and vertical movement, action/reaction storytelling. One of the best TG stories I've ever read. Thanks for sharing, Fran.

Comment by Danielle on 10/21/07
Way to go Fran,

  I am as always impressed by your writing. It is Soooooo refreshing to see the poor victim win once in a while. There are so many forced fem stories out there that are so unreal. If a guy WANTS, really wants, not drugged into compliance or mentally coerced, to be a womans slave then all the power to them. Any one who forces anyone into something against their will is a vile, reprehensible, non-human that deserves justice to rain down on their heads. Be that male or female.

  Way to go down that less travelled path. I truly hope to see more stories like this. You rock Fran!


              Danielle L. Richards


Comment by Jamie on 10/01/07
Goodniss! Hey im Jamie ,justa reader as of now but a soon to be writer, I hope. I liked or rather I loved your story and was moved literally on edge through out it's entirety as to wether or not if she would eves escape clear enough she did but I was kinda sad she could'nt save Debbie.  The story was not empty feeling not by a long shot, as most of mine are, my pesonel faves are forced feminization schools. but not that you'll ever read this. though i just thought to show my enjoyment and appreciation

Comment by juliej on 06/30/07
a great story of forced fem &the results of an investigation &trial what a way to go and how far to get it sorted out brillinat more please

Comment by suna on 02/06/06
I enjoyed your story. Most of the horror stories stop where the victim gives in letting the protaganist think they have won. Those stories actually stop at the middle of the story. At some point the victim will revolt or go mad sitting and drooling when the mind gives way. I know its not real, my word, I hope there is nothing like that in the world. Your story of continued thought on escape was an excellent view of the attempt to have a 'realistic' ending of the plot.  

Thank you for letting my minds eye see a little of yours.

Suna



Comment by BJP on 05/28/04
WHY CAN'T THERE BE MORE STORIES LIKE THIS? IF YOU KNOW OF ANY EMAIL THE TITLE AN WERE I CAN FIND THEM, GREAT STORY

Comment by Slothrop on 03/31/04
Fantastic read. You were a bit light on the retribution, and there was only a minimum necessary violence but it worked for me. (Just kidding)

The genre needs more strong victims who act like people instead of the standard issue jello submissives so prevalent in many stories.


Comment by Jane Hudson on 12/05/03
Hell of a story my dear.Not the normal sissy this one had teeth.

Comment by Jaycee on 12/05/03
Very intense... and a very good read.  I echo the other views here about fighting back... assuming you're fortunate enough to have a jailer with 5lb handcuffs!

Comment by Jennifer on 12/05/03
Right On Sister!!!

My fantasies have had me in similar situations.  Doing seemingly nasty things to get away from some very nasty people.

Live by the sword.  Die by the sword.


Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 12/04/03
"Freedom's just another word for nothing left to lose."  BRAVO!!!!  Finally, the bad gals get theirs.
 
RE:  Cathy T's pun:  In defense of Ms. Tern, her devious women never (that I am aware of) use physical violence to feminize their men; they don't have to.  I like Vickie's stories, because they make me mad, but they make me equally mad at the devious women and the incredibly stupid men who basically let themselves be manipulated.


Comment by Pervette on 12/04/03
I was afraid that I might post an inadvertent spoiler, but I see
that others have given the ending away. Let me just say that
stories like this are rare & I treasure every one. I kept wondering
whether the ending would be what I hoped it would be...& it was.
The suspense was terrific, & the narrator's actions plausible.
They put me in mind of some of John D. MacDonald's stories: it was
as if Travis McGee was having one of his better days. :-)
Congratulations; this one's a real keeper.
.
(People who liked this story will like "Best Served Cold" by
Valentina Michelle Smith and "One Way Out" by Anne O'Nonymous.)
.
--Pervy

Comment by Annie O on 12/04/03
Gee! This is the kind of story i would have liked to have written. So good, so intense -- it does make me wonder if a lot of "sissies" are brainwashed into thinking they are what they are.
 I do hope this IS just a story, then the violence is not regrettable.

Comment by Cathy_t_ on 12/04/03
VERY well done, Fran!  It's about TIME someone wrote a story in which the "vicious Dommes" get their just desserts!  You did a very good job indeed with the thoughts of the hero(ine) and I was particularly pleased that you didn't cut any corners as far as the violence end of things went.  

My PET peeve about ALL "femdom" stories is the "quick acceptance" of the victims in the face of physical pain and humiliation that makes me cringe every time I find one of these "I'm gonna turn you into a shemale sissy whether YOU want it or not" stories.  It's all well and good IF the "victim" WANTS this, but in the case of someone kidnapped, tortured and changed against his will, it sickens me, even if it's ONLY a story.  Yes, I KNOW that it IS SOME people's "fantasy" to have something like that happen to them, but it ain't MINE!

If you'll pardon a pun, one which I have made once before, I consider this a "Tern(about)" tale and I'm very glad you wrote it and did it so well.  Nice job, Fran.  If Ms. Tern is a friend of yours, I apologise for the pun, but it's the way I feel, and I won't apologise for that.

Cathy_t_ said that



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