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Brian's Long Walk
by Baby Jennifer

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Comment by Carson Strong on 06/27/22
Brian acted poorly by cheating on both Christine and Maria, but these ladies kidnapped, assaulted, and stole from another human being. They will get what is coming to them, which I am happy for.

Comment by Anonymous on 11/13/14
That was amazing! Definitely one of my favs.

Comment by Janet Marie on 07/26/09
Excellent story!
Brian gets his come-uppance in spades!  
Might want to do a sequel about how he gets back or adapts to his situation from here.


Comment by john on 04/27/09
sweet revenge for sure - a lesson to all those cheating jerks out there - - right? JOHN

Comment by Amy on 02/01/08
A great story, I liked it a lot and I hope to see more.

Amy.


Comment by juliej on 11/10/07
a great story of revenge more please

Comment by juliej on 05/05/07
i agree with my previous comments its brilliant how devious a couple of girfriend can get when they know what he has benn up to what a way to go well done

Comment by juliej on 05/21/06
WHAT A BRILLIANT STORY OF REVENGE AND HUMILIATION its a pity the girls did not keep he as a baby girl thi would have been great their is a lot more to add to this story and i would like to see it continued

Comment by undech on 09/01/05
i really like this story, i actually look forward to more like it.

Comment by Juliette Lima on 07/22/05
Abduction, assault, and battery too
Mean girls have stepped in to the poo
No justice here only vengeful spite
A premise most old and exceedingly trite
Brian calmly explains why the brown stuff flew.


Comment by linzi lovsitt on 07/18/05
yes must agree with J girls of to jail before they can hand out fotos Brian gets a lot of stick but a good criminal injury claim girls who knows  depends on judge

Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 07/16/05
Brian has nothing to lose.  Find a policeman as soon as possible and tell his story.  Their prints are all over him and if the police act quickly enough, officers can be at Christine's place before they get back.  It may take months for the marker to wear off, but the girls will be in prison much longer than that.  Then there's the civil suit. ...

Brian was a shit, but the girls made him the sympathetic victim and themselves the evil bitches by being so much worse.



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