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Careful Wishes
by Jennifer White

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Comment by k mixon on 06/17/08
Good story. If that is punishment,I want to be bad,and be Laura.

Comment by Tiffany on 04/24/07
wow i really liked it that boy got what he i mean she deserved!

Comment by Derrick Maclode on 08/27/04
I enjoyed Careful Wish.  Thank you!  I'd be thrilled to read a second part if you ever do it.  I'd like to see Laura smoke in the sequel.
Thanks

Comment by Tanya Lynn on 07/17/03
I think too many people are worried about little things and missing the point that it is a great moral fable.  More stories with the fairy godmother would be nice.  

Comment by Night Wolf on 07/06/03
I agree with two people First I agree with leah that a little research should have been preformed because I know there are to many females in general that stero type every single guy into the all they want is sex stero type if they been hurt by a guy who was actually fitting of that stero type!  I'm sorry but were all not like that!  The second person that I agree with NQs I enjoyed the story reguardless it stero type all us guys into just sex wanting crazed boys and think that there should be another one like this or a continuation of the first one!

Comment by leah on 06/28/03
While I did indeed like the twist that you REALLY have to be careful with the content of your wishes (does moral value count?), the opening of this story leaves a lot to be desired.

Allan whines about not getting to "first base" with girls, but a date is in and of itself that goal. Only then does he blow it from lack of self-control. Allan does characterize girls nicely as I remember the sophomore year of high school and going on that first date.

Was I thinking of sex? Well of course, I was thinking of it, but that didn't mean that I was expecting it or intending to push my luck to the point of alienating my young lady. (I did THAT when I was in college.)

Jennifer states: "To a young boy, a relationship is about sex." That's a pretty narrow view of relationships, and most boys are at least more mature than that. Even relationships with girls usually have a little more breadth than that (although, unfortunately....).

JW goes on: "If all the other elements are there, the sex will come in time. But Allan didn't understand this yet. He just wanted to get into their pants." This could have used some exploration. In fact, where did this desire to be in complete control come from? This is possibly one of the most critical subjects of mutual interest to gg and tg girls.

JW finishes the opening with: "(The girls) didn't want to be pawed and kissed on a first date. They were sexually curious too of course, but the physical closeness and intimacy had to come on *their* terms. Not the boy's." Well, yeah! But even the budding shoots in a developing healthy/productive relationship are based on compromise. Allan then comes across practically as a genuine mental defective who has no regard for the personhood of anyone else. And in the end, the old Laura is busy showing that she really isn't any better.

     leah

Comment by Allie on 06/28/03
I liked how his wishs came true just not the way he thought they would. An interesting twist at the end. Did he get his first wish after all?

Allie

Comment by NQs on 06/28/03
I really like this story, either continue it with a sequel or try to have someone else encounter the same fairy godmother and wish wrongly.

Comment by Paula on 06/28/03
I felt sorry for the guy at the end. To Bad Laura couldn't find a wish loophole after she taught him a lesson to either switch back or at least made him switch with a girl who really wish to be a guy.

Comment by Paula Jutras on 06/28/03
Truely a wonderful story for us body swap fans. Love how you described the character waking up and find out about the swap and the whole control over the body wish deal was refreshingly original. Hope for more wonderful tales likes this in the future. Haven't decided if it would make a good sequal or not.

Comment by Boom! on 06/28/03
This was a good story that magic fans will enjoy. I felt the ending came too soon though, and the resolution was not to my enjoyment. It seemed rushed. I wish we would have had more time with him learning about being a girl, instead he loses everything, and becomes a slave.

Still a good story, I just wish it ended different.

Comment by Bobbi on 06/28/03
I hope you continue this story, I felt it ended to soon after the second wish.  It is a good story and a good setup for a follow up story of his/her life now.



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