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Caryn
by Jennifer White

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Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 11/03/03
I really liked this story till about half way through when it seemed to change direction 180o.  I really thought from the build up that Jake was going to fight this transition to the end, and I was really rooting for him.  then, bang "she" becomes the feminine avenger.  It does make psychological sense though.

I blame his mom for the trauma.  If he was destined to turn into a girl at puberty, wouldn't it have made more sense to raise "her" as a girl or even a gentle male rather than just letting him develop as a rowdy macho "normal boy"?


Comment by Bek D Corbin on 11/02/03
Well, it was a rather nice story, but there was one very drastic flaw-Caryn seems determined to 'revenge' her loss of masculinity on every boy that crosses her path. She's messing around with other people's bodies without really understanding what she's doing. This witchling is _dangerous_.

Comment by Annie O on 11/02/03
This is without reading story -- first, all witches are NOT female. Male or female can be a witch.
 Second, males are not warlocks! Waerlocka(sp?) is a term meaning "traitor." It refers to those who turned people over to witch hunters.



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