Belinda,

It has been a very long time since you've shared any stories with us and I, for one, miss them.

As others have noted this story appears to be your first effort. Unfortunately even though it is well written and a wonderful story, so far, it is way too short. You've left us all hanging to hear the rest. Really all we have so far is they just meet, she discovers and shockingly relieves his hidden erect maleness, then takes him/her home with her and that's it!!!

We need more, even though it's been 12 years, PLEASE!!

B.B. I read The Special Neighbour and have to know you with your stories? Please continue writing.Ernie

Not good, not bad!

A nice story but I agree with the other readers that your story could have been a bit longer. Thanks.

I don't care what anyone says. Culottes are PANTS masquerading as skirts.  Ladies wear SKIRTS.

a very sweet story i feel that this one you could go further with well done

Very nice story -- the type that dreams are based upon. Please continue. Love & Kisses  Carolyn Renee

a realy lovely story please finish it.

What a nice story.  It is really pleasant to find a well composed and enjoyable piece.  I think the commentors are correct. You may feel as if you have told your story; but, it is obvious to every reader that this is just a beginning.  Of what, only you know for certain, and then, only when you add more to this selightful piece.  The friendship of these two can grow or lead to other adventures.  I was curious as to the interest Jane had in him originally.  Was it because he was so gentle? or what? How is their relationship in the office affected?  Is he so scared, he will yet bolt?
Please keep up the good work and write more.

Darling, the story is just beginning.  As exciting as you made it, I am sure that there is more to come

Hi Belinda,

Great story and I hope that you will continue with another part soon.

oh i do hope you plan on continueing this story as it seems like only the first part of a long  story like what happens at janes and whether jane was looking for someone like jay(kym) and hope it continues into the work place too.  maybe a little more about kyms home life and why the parents kicked her out besides only that jay dresses.  also is there a real bar like that in canberra? it would be nice to know of all these kinds of places in all the world.

Enjoyed the story very much and hope parts 2, etc. are under way.

Hi Belinda,

Great to see another Aussie author on Storysite. Have to agree with the others, needs some more fleshing out, but a great start. Hope you go on to a Part two.

Love Karen.

This the start of something or feels like the first half chapter. It needs to expand and be fleshed out. And continued with more events.

     Good debut on Story Site. I assume you're an Aussie- always like to hear from new talent from Down Under. I know you said this story is complete- but I can see some possibilities for more chapters. I do agree that you need to work more on the setup in future stories -  this one did seem kind of rushed- take your time and spin out a story for your readers.

Leah makes some good points but definitely continue this and maybe move it into the workplace as well.

Dear Belinda!

I'm not sure why Jane was quite so aggressive. That was stimulating (!) but rather off-putting and overall quite unnecessary. She was very fortunate that poor Kym didn't bolt out the door and lose herself in the night.

Aside from that, the whole (little) story holds together quite well. If you don't have Jane and Kym continue their relationship, you might try this approach again while either going into greater detail or extending the story over a length of time.