Parts 2 & 3 appear to have disappeared.  Please can we have them back?

Desiree,

Fun story, though there are a number of misspellings and dropped letters. You definitely have to do some proof reading, before submitting the stories.

The dialog is inconsistant, some of it is very wooden and formal and some is informal, keep it informal, it sounds more natural.

The sex is a little over the top, he stays hard much longer than is physically possible. There should be a 10 to 30 minute recovery period between his orgasms, before he can get hard again, he could pleasure her in between so that the pace doesn't slow. The sex scenes can be realistic and still be hot.
Also, her having oral sex with him after he's had anal sex with her is  gross, not to mention dangerous, just wiping it off is not good enough!

OK, things I liked, I like the way the sections overlap, the last paragraph of the preceeding chapter being the first paragraph of the next chapter, it helps keep the reader focused. I like the playful tone of the story, and the multiple changes.

Thanks for the stories!

Mr. Ram

I do think the story was well written ,however I definitly do feel it was written to much from a male self centered prospective on the sex part ,lacking validity .Anal sex has been known to be pleasurable but still is initial pain involved then pleasure takes over.You appear to almost give impression that all women would instantly like it ,and all fears and reasons for not liking are unfounded and thats just not true.
kimmie

Great story, looking forward to the sequal

I need more. Don't just end it like this.

good start the characters are well done