Any male who wanted to be female and spit gum on that witches sidewalk would probably have been made into a 6'5" 350 pound linebacker type male who would never ever be able to pass as a female let alone become one.  If she had been a witch bent on  teaching a lesson instead of a sadistic one bent on revenge and her own pleasure at killing a person, (identity death IS death), she would have changed Cheryl back to Rob and given him the opportunity to prove he'd learned his lesson. Heck, maybe after a time back as a boy, when he was able to compare the two lives fairly, he might even have asked the witch to change him back to Cheryl.

I agree with many of the comments from your previous commentators but I would love to find that old ladies house and spit gum on the pavement in front of her house. Heaven. Well done.

What cruel woman, how wicked and sadistic. All I could feel is growing frustration at poor Rob's plight.

What in the freaking world? The woman was kind my butt! She was a manipulative evil witch! Why did she do that, he learned his lesson? He should have been able to go back, and also, normally I don't write about this to the author, but this whole changing a person's soul thing is a bunch of crap. I've had all kinds of stuff done to me to make me into a man, yet I never was. None of it worked fully, I always knew who I was, regardless of the hell I went through. It's mostly just a personal pet peeve, but i was kind of hoping that the woman would have a soul, and it was obvious she did not. I thought she was a kind hearted old lady, but really she was a vicious manipulating viper. No better than a monster, and for that she needs to die.

a st0ry well done and worth reading over and over. Though I think it would be better if the parents magicialy thought they always had a daughter since they accepted the change too easy.

This was a cute tale. My only beef with it is that it's too short and so Rob's mental transition into Cheryl was just too "quick" in a matter of speaking. If his mind was also magically "adjusted" during the change, okay, but if it wasn't, surely a (non-sissy) boy's male ego wouldn't fold like a cheap camera just because of the novelty of female erotic pleasures. If there's a part II or rewrite, just tweak up this little notion sone!

Hugs!

Dee

the crime would of fit the punishment more if it was for staring at the girl rather than gum. It was a wonderfully done story and different that mother had to be convinced for change instead of thinking she already had a girl.

Dear Jennifer!

I enjoyed Cheryl and thought you wrote a very realistic experience for Rob in his first day as a girl -- especially from the time Andrea dropped by for some help on the math assignment. (As long as we are going to allow a bit of magic in our stories, it seems to me that the lady's spell on Rob could have affected his parents enough to make them receptive to the change.)
In my little corner of the universe, there is a spot reserved for "white magic," and it seems to me that your story would have ended on a really positive note, had you not had this environmentally-disposed witch use her powers for revenge rather than the expansion of good.
Your story would have had to be longer, but just think of the possibilities if the lady had changed Rob back to his old form. After all, he did learn a bunch about girls, boys and himself in his first day as a girl. Can you imagine that Andrea might have benefited greatly from knowing the post-Cheryl Rob in addition to his old somewhat boorish self?

     leah

Sorry the crime dosn't fix the punishment. All it did was make you feel sorry for Rob and hate the old witch.

Not very realistic. These are not the reactions normal parents would have.

liked the story, but maybe a few more twists would have been nice- it was a little ordinary.