It seems mrs Thompson and mrs smith may suffer an acid attack as well along with the fat bitches.

Oh dear I foresee an acid attack on these 2 bitches by Kevin. And well deserved might I add.

I agree with most responders... this story lacks credulity. The boys who are apparently not crossdressers don't kick up a fuss when being crossdressed. Now if the boys during this punishment period act so humble then there was no valid motive necessitating their transformation in the first place. Now... The kid who suggested the bet in the first place may have latent crossdressing tendancies. I don't know if the author intended to insinuate that the boys will not be out of girls clothes after the summer but it is sure there in the conversation with mrs. smith.  They seem to be on a path of betrayal by their mothers. And another problem is the lack of bullies in their school and a detrimental reaction from those bullies to those boys crossdressing. If there is one thing I learned in my school career is that bullies are a constant.

very good story. i wonder what the trainer does

I'm up past my bedtime. My Mistress/Wife is asleep. It is interesting to read a story about two young boys that don't want to be girls rather than young boys who WANT to be girls.

For myself, I opted to be my Wife's Housemaid/husband rather than a trip to the divorce court.

The storyline went okeh for me. In real life, the School would have a major problem with any of their students cross-dressing. In one of our middle schools, the transsexual's parents even took the matter to court, when the school said, "No!" It made the national headlines. Then again, this is fiction, not real life.

It was a cute story. However, I think it would have been a, "prettier," tale if older sisters would have embraced their new, little sisters and told them how much more they loved them as sisters rather than as brothers.

Since this story was written a few years ago, I guess there's no second part. If their Mom's wanted to raise them as girls, there should be some Mother and daughter dialogue with much love and no harassment. It would be a whole, new world for the two, new girls.

Respectfully submitted,

Missy-Susan Pauline
(My Mistress/Wife addresses me as, Missy. She tells me it helps keep me in my proper place. I know all four curties and do them quite well, thank you. Missy.)

good story worth the read hope for the next part soon the end of the begining sounds ominous well done

the story was well-written but I personally did not love it, because there was no reason for doing to the boys what they did over something so small and insignificant.  

There is three points for a teen TG story

(1) The main character/s has a secret desire to be a girl.
(2) The main character is being punished for severe wrongdoings
(3) the main antagonist is some psychotic Female Domme

And I did not get any of those from the story  if you had a good substitute motivation (which you didnt) that would be acceptable

I never liked where the story went.  if the boys got to like it, that would be one thing.  it was ab awkward.  but its still fixable.  come up with a good part 2 to compensate/make it a 11/10 story!

The one thing so many forget is that this type of fiction is a subset of horror fiction. The more horrible the scene is to the reader the better the writer has done. The terrible treatment of the boys especially when condoned by the one adult they must trust is more horrible than any other, evil stepmothers were the device in Grimm's Fairy Tales, but here the birth mother is the agent of evil. That a sister or a classmate would join in is not at all unbelievable, if an adult has condoned abuse a child will follow. For my single self I'd has likely write a horrible end for the sisters and leave the mothers helpless and dependent on Cindy and Mindy for rest of their misery filled lives. But that's just me.

Boys do stupid things.  I conclude there is no reason for the reader to know why the mothers are so quick to create the severe punishment the boys must accept.  Would the mothers have explained it in detail to the boys?  I think not.  And if they did, the level of panic and fear would send the explation flying over their heads.  I, for one, can better identify with the lads when they don't know exactly what is happening to them or why.  The story's development does not need to be laid out 100% logical in a step by step fashion to be enjoyable.   The introduction of the trainer is terrific. Great anticipation has been created for who knows what may develop.  That is a great tease.  One request, if I may:  Don't let the boys accept their feminization in a positive manner.  Luv your work.  keep it up.  

A great start!!!!  I like many of Jezzi's idea's and hope you give us more "meat and potatoes" regarding the secret motivations of everyone as well as the "hidden agendas."  Please continue your story and offer us some explanations in the doing.  I think this could turn out to be a wonderful reading experience--Sharlee

I think this story is just wonderful.  It's fiction folks - and the writing and characterizations are great!!!  Besides - people do things for reasons even they don't understand --- like maybe us?

Yes you had better create a part 2 and get it posted soon. If you don't there is still a lot of summer left for you to be forced to dress as a girl, get a set of nails and a nice girlish hairdo so you look hot when high-school starts in the fall

I enjoyed the story, and certainly would like to see further adventures of C & M, but I always have a problem with stories like these.

1)  I agree with  Eric; the bet itself is beyond suspension of belief for two normal boys, which brings me to:

2)  The boys are not written as sissies or having any femme desires, the panties and bras coming not from desire but from a rather stupid bet that they actually think will raise their macho status with their peers..  So the fact that there is absolutely no resistance to the feminization whatsoever is also BSOB.  Why aren't they even thinking about running away, for example - even if they decided it was impractical, they sould be at least thinking about it or some way of resisting.  

3)  That the Moms never even asked for any kind of explanation from the boys before launching into mega forced femme overkill was also BSOB.  You wrote nothing to indicate that these were bad boys with a history of troublemaking, so this doesn't sound like a straw that broke the camel's back kind of situation, which brings  me to the main thing:

4)  What DO the moms want?  From the way they are treating their sons in part one, I would say they hate  them and are just out to humiliate them because what they are doing seems way beyond teaching them a lesson, yet the hate didn't seem to be present before the revelation.  KC's mom picked them up for a ride because it was raining so hard, a nice gesture, and Mike's greeting to her didn't indicate any fear or anything like that.  If the mom's really love their son's but think they would be better off as daughters, if they want daughters rather than sons and want daughters they can have loving relationships with eventually, what they are doing seems counterproductive.  Even if the boys were inclined to like being feminine, the anger/fear at the way in which the moms and sisters are going about it would I think squash that and replace it with hatred for the moms and sisters and anything girlish.

5)  You've set the stage for Mike/Mindy having a complete nervous breakdown.  I think that would make a neat next story to explore the motivations of the moms, sisters, everyone.  His mom finds "Mindy" huddled comatose, just shaking. in a corner of "her" bedroom after having been forced to redecorate it super girly.   How will she feel?  What will she do?  How will KC feel about what has been done to his friend?  What will he do?  Will he/she do it as KC or as Cindy?  Just a suggestion, but I see a lot of possibilities.  

More Please

Loved your story.  Anxious for part 2

Competently written.  An awkward start, though -- can't think of any plausible reason the boys would make that particular bet. It seems clear (we know KC/Cindy's POV from the narrative, and Mindy has spent too much time in tears over the consequences) that we're not in the standard we-did-this-because-we-secretly-wanted-to-be-girls scenario, however much they may end up liking the idea in later episodes.  Obviously as boys they had no qualms about teasing or embarrassing other people, but why would they want to embarrass each other?  (Since that's the only way either of them would win the bet.)  To be fair, there's a suggestion in the story that they'd get some form of adulation from their friends if they went a long time in girls' underwear without anybody catching on, but that seems even weirder and more inexplicable than the bet itself.

Anyway, I apologize if I'm barking up this tree for too long; most people here are probably more interested in where this is going than how it got there.

Eric