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Come Here Jim
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Comment by Maryjan on 08/28/18
I'v read all of your stories that I could find and find them all in good taste and very enjoyable . The best written of all. Comment by Silvia. on 06/15/10 Jemma was deceived by her mother and sister. They told to her father without she know. Comment by juliej on 01/02/09 sweet story very pleasent to read Comment by CATHY ANGELA DAVIS on 07/20/08 GOOD STORY BUT THE SPICE GIRLS REALLY THEY STINK, WHY NOT THE GO, GOS, AT LEAST THEY COULD SING. Comment by Rone welles on 01/04/08 This is a fun and lovely story ... genteel and loving family .. Comment by Pauline Brendon on 11/11/07 I agree with Wilma R. as far as the grammar and punctuation are concerned. I try very hard myself to have all this as perfect as possible when I am writing, but I occasionally get myself all mixed up and have to go over it again and again. Frustrating! Comment by julie j on 02/26/05 a sweet story but of two bossy sisters who were kind in their way it was not long enough but wellwritten &explained i would be intrested if you could do another part to this story Comment by graystone on 05/26/04 Please rewrite the story and fill it out. The end with the boy, James, came too quick. There needs to be more story in between. Comment by Wilma R on 05/01/03 That's a sweet story. Thank you. However, you need to brush up on the rules for writing dialog. If a character makes a statement, the words within the quotation marks must end with a comma and the next word begins with an lowercase letter unless it is a name. Near the beginning of your story you wrote: "Just ask, saying no is easy." He replied coldly. This should have been: "Just ask. Saying no is easy," he replied coldly. Or you could have written: "...Saying no is easy," Jim replied coldly. The main exception to this occurs right at the beginning of your story. If the quoted words are a question, you puctuate with a question mark before the closing quotation mark, as you did, but the next word still begins with a small letter unless it is a name. So you should have written: "And what's the magic word?" he replied. Comment by Rob on 07/06/02 Enjoyed your story, thanks. Comment by emmie dee on 03/05/01 I always enjoy the warm, friendly feeling tone of Amanda's stories. This one makes me sad that I was an only child--I would like to have had Jim's (Jemma's)sisters! Comment by Nellie D on 03/02/01 A neat little story of a brother helping his sisters. The story almost seemed to push the ending too fast, it needed something more. |
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