You wrote a very bad story!
Anne-Marie betrayed Mike, she's evil and a bad woman. she will don't be a good mother.

I agree with Jezzi S.

What a cruel, selfish bitch Anne-Marie turned out to be.  She deliberately sacrificed her fiance to get the daughter she wanted.  In explanation to Jimmy, you wrote:  "She [Anne-Marie] knew that Mike would follow through on what he considered to be a joke..." but you wrote in the story that he wasn't going to:  "Mike was about to press the "N" key when Anne-Marie reached over and grabbed his hand and stopped him."  She deliberately talked him into pressing the "Y" key even though, as you have her admit at the end, she suspected the transformation would, indeed take place - "The transformation had occurred as she suspected."
Then, she deliberately set out to cover her tracks so the transformed Mike would not know her role in his transformation:  "Anne pulled the computer's plug out of the wall. The screen went dead. Mike would never know the real reason for his transformation."  This shows that she thought Michelle might still mentally be Mike.  She probably expected him to be very very upset and her only concern was that he not find out it was her fault.  
You imply "she" did remember, by writing that she adjusted with "little difficulty" to her "predicament"; there would be no predicament if she didn't remember being Mike.  Why would she adjust so easily; why wasn't "he" very very upset?  He should have been.  There was no background given to indicate Mike may really have wanted to become a little girl, and you, in fact, write about his romantic evening that:  " To Mike, life just didn't get any better than this."  It had to be the Fairy Godmother messing with his mind.  She sounds a lot like the amoral SRU Wizard, and probably got a good chuckle out of the evil perpetrated on Mike by Anne-Marie.


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I throughly enjoyed your story. It was very well written and the subject matter was rather new to all the other stories. I, too, Have always wondered what it would be like if I could live my life over again as a little girl with a mommy as sweet and as loving as you. I sincerely hope that you will post similar stories in the future, such as "how Michelles life will be growing up" and what she does in school and later on in life....BOYS! I'll be waiting on the edge of my seat for the your next story

To Jimmy,


Anne-Marie was as sceptical about the messages as Mike was but
she was realist. She knew that Mike would follow through on what he considered to be a joke but just in case Anne-Marie was not going to lose the opportunity to have her "second" choice.....a daughter and Mike to.  Besides, if Anne-Marie had talked Mike into not following through then there would be no story. Right?

Donna

A truely beautiful storey; warm and touching. Please write more.

I really don't understand the story.  Can you explain some things?

Didn't Anne-Marie love Mike.  Were they not planning on getting married?  Could she not have gotten pregnant from Mike and had children.  If the above is true, why would she want the man that she loved and would have children with to become a six year old girl?  

truely wonderful. Hope to get more stories from the universe like idea.