I am obsessed with stories that make me cry and "Contest and Consequences" is real thing! Thanx for creating! With love, Nevette in California

I think we should ignore Silvia, she obviously has a problem.

The story was the most beautifully constructed I've read for a long time and it fitted in so well with the previous one.

Please Sarah write some more, similar ones.  D.

This is one of the worst nightmare that a person could have!
Riduculous, disgusting, infame, sickly,etc....
And you have the courage to tell this is sweet?

 A timeless classic and very well written
may your star shine a long time ..peace
good and talented author ... Rone Welles

I agree with some of the other comments - a great story, with all the elements of drama, heartache, humour and others, but the ending was a little abrupt. Nevertheless, great quality and entertainment. Congratulations to Sarah.

Yeah, I agree, this is a great story. But as with previous posts, I feel the ending was rushed. I feel the story could have gone on a lot more.

Dear Sarah.

I've read many of the other Readers comments, and I agree: We need a proper ending to this fantastic Story instead of the rather poor Epilouge.

We all long to know, what happens, when Sarah's Father reads the Article in the Paper? Will Sarah work on in the Boutique? And what about the next School Year? And answers to meny more Questions.

Come on Girl! Write som new chapters. Please, please.

Love Jeanette.

I just wanted to tell you that I loved your story.  This is one of the best I've read.  If you ever get any of you stories published let me know.  Looking forward to seeing more of your work.

Kelly

loved it , wish theres was more,  working in the shop,  telling his/her dad,  the story in the paper how did it change there life
please please more sir, lol

yes that was better then i expect. do he/she work back in the shop with sue? do david find that he not a real girl? then what about his/ her dad? what do he do after he finds out about his son.  

Dear Sarah/Steve,
I have reading your story "contest and consequences" over the last days. Would like to thank you for a story I liked very much. Your way of describing Sarah's feelings, here friendship with others, the relationship with Liz and Anita. The friendship with Sue and Lucy. The job in the shop. I loved it all. Also the end of the story was existing. I couldn't stop reading. I would like to have the world you are writting about.

Thank you Sarah and many Greetings from Vienna.
Beatrice

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I have just finished the whole story, one of the longest I have read but totally enthralling at every moment.If I fail my college course it's your fault for distracting me from my thesis with your wonderful story.

I first read this in 2004 and really enjoyed it. I have just read the whole story through again. It really is one of the best TG stories I've seen. A classic that can be read and re-read. Thank you so much. Love, Louisa.

Sarah,
 I only now found your story and read it through at a sitting. I loved it.
 You hit the plot points perfectly, and while there were surprises in the story, nothing ever lacked foundation. Of the characters, I particularly liked Steve/Sarah, Liz, and oddly perhaps, Steve's mother. I thought they were all well defined to the extent necessary and quite realistic. I also thought Sue was, for a fairly minor character, a good one.
 I had some trouble reading some of the chapters because of the tears in my eyes. I seldom read anything that makes me cry, but your story did, several times; I cried for both the pain and the happiness of some of the characters.
 One thing I thought was a little odd was the inclusion of the magic, psychic, whatever bracelet. I wouldn't be surprised to find that it wasn't so mystical at all, but rather a device, sort of a placebo, to help focus a person's own best instincts. Psychologically, this would not be unreasonable.
 While I don't understand what the confusion about the epilogue is because I thought it was quite clear that none of the three mommies in the scene was married to either of the others, its shortcoming is it is little more than a teaser. How did all this come about? To whom IS Sarah married? Did Sarah work again at the dress shop? Although based on Sarah's actions in front of the news people, I assume he and Liz were a couple again, but what then? Oh well, I won't keep asking questions, but just say that I hope you continue the series.
 I've not read better.

LoriAnn

Dear Sara,
Have had a great time reading your story. Kept my interest all the way through.It kept me up for many a long night.I could feel that I could really relate to Sarah in the way she came to struggle with her own acceptance of a very integral part of herself and her eventual acceptance of who she was. Glad I found your story after you had finished it or I would have been pulling my hair out in anticipation for the next chapter. I don't think I could have waited for the next instalment.
Love the way you write.
Hope there are more stories on the way.

Sara

Dear Sarah
Thank you so much for all your hard work in writing this wonderful story.
I am already starting to miss Steve / Sarah and all your other beautifully crafted characters.  For all that I miss the characters, I really wonder if it would be sensible to to extend this story.  There are plot lines that are unfinished in the final installment but one can imagine a reasonable conclusion.  It might be better simply to re-visit the finale and make more of Sarah's strength of character, which in the end saves Liz from a difficult situation and puts greater emphasis on Sarah finishing as the true heroine of the story.
I do appreciate how difficult it is to craft different characters and to keep them all realistic and consistent and at the same time think up challenging situations for the characters to keep the reader interested.  You deal brilliantly with these difficulties.
Best wishes with your future work.

Hugs Annabel

Congratulations on a great story Sarah. While I was a bit disappointed that it ended so abruptly, I do thank you for your efforts. It is one of the best TG stories I have read.

I reread your epilogue and now understand it. While I would like to know what happened, and hope you will at sopme point fill in the gaps, it is not a terrible thing to leave it to the reader's imagination.

Thanks again Sarah, you are one of the best authors.

Jami

Hi Sarah,

Good to hear from you. Thanks for explaining the Epilogue. I read, and re-read it, and still couldn't work out what was going on! I'm pleased to hear that you may one day return to the story. I'd like to know what happens next - whether Steve works at the shop, how he ends up with Anita, and if there are any operations on the horizon.  You certainly deserve a break from the story, having entertained us all since last November. Thanks for your hard work, and I look forwards to one day reading more of this story! (Looks like I can keep your Author page bookmarked after all!)

Thanks,

Kate

Hi Everybody

Just a short note to say thank you to all of you for your support. I am so happy that people enjoyed this story, which I really wrote for very selfish reasons. I think somebody already has pointed out that the series took nine months to finish - so thank you to all my midwives out there. Sarah's story isn't necessarily finished, but I do need a rest after the labour.

So many questions too. How much really happened? Well, the contest did, and most of the characters really took part more or less as described. I suppose the first seven chapters are more or less accurate if not verbatim accounts, and some of the contest scenes, but the rest is my warped imagination I'm afraid.

I think people are misinterpreting the epilogue, although I could have made things clearer. "My Natasha to her son..........." is supposed to indicate that Anita is not Natasha's mother, and Sarah is not Ian's father. Although written in exhaustion, it's supposed to provide a Z after the A,B,C. One day I'll write the missing letters.

Love and best wishes


Sarah

I liked the ending - I'm told that every book should end just as one story is ending, and the next story is beginning, and I think you did this well. There's a myriad of possibilities for "what happens next", but Sarah facing the cameras is obviously the end of one chapter and the start of the next.

I do agree, though, that the Epilogue felt a little weak. Better to have skipped it, I think. Personally I found the various "rape" scenes unpleasantly graphic - I'd have preferred the dramatic points to have been made by more traditional bullying/etc. Still, I suppose an author cannot feel pity for hir creations.

Though the bracelet scene and the dreamed trial in #14/15 marked a change of pace - less realistic, more dreamy and magical - I think you carried this off well. It was just enough to hint at a moral/spiritual underpinning, without letting it overwhelm the main thread.

Thanks.

After15

What a GREAT series, though I was sorry to see it end so abruptly and weakly with so many unanswered questions.  (What happened to Liz?... and ... How does Anita become the husband/dad after saying, "After all we're both girls."? ... for examples.)  

However I do agree with Kelly Ann that ...

<<"But wearing a skirt always gets me into trouble!" I said, nearly shouting in frustration.

Sue looked at me for a while, and then shrugged. "So wear a dress."  >>

... is one of the best lines to appear in Tg fiction in a long time!

I still think you and Maddy Bell should get Sarah and Gaby together,  at a cheerleading convention perhaps.

I cannot believe that you ended it in the way that you did!  Each and every chapter was waited for and looked for daily.  I seriously hope you will reconsider and continue with it as the current ending is very disappointing to say the least.

After such well spun story, the end seemed anticlimactic especially the epilogue. It feels almost as if sarah (the author) got tired of the tale, which I felt had a potential to run for some time. I'm sorry to see it end, but thanks for all the enjoyment it brought. I hope you spin us another yarn sometime.
Best wishes,
Angharad

I  just finish read your wonderful story. I like everyone else cannot believe you are done with the story. I for one did not understand the EPILOGUE, I do not want it to end like that. I guessing that Sarah/Steve and Anita became a couple(?).

Like one of your fans said there is the next generation????????


Cassie

I don't know that I can add a great deal more praise than the others have said. I think the story is wonderful and surely a classic. I don't know if there is such a thing as a perfect story but this one has to be close. It certainly held my interest. And as some of the others said I looked most every day for additional chapters. Hope you continue with others or additions to this one.

A great story throughout, but a somewhat disappointing ending after 8 months of following the tale. Perhaps there will be an alternate ending on the DVD...  

Part Fourteen

Sarah, all good things get better with each step. Your story is a good thing that has gotten better with each episode. This is destined to be a classic in every sence of the word!

Huggles
Angel

All good things must come to an end.  Thank God for sequels, prequels and next generations, though, huh?  Looking forward to whatever you decide to write next.  Thanks for the hours of enjoyment!

Wow Sarah! You have a classic developed and posted; and it is still fresh from conception. You have wonderfully told the tale. Clean in form.  Interesting in characters, and suitable in action.
It seems straightforward, but you kept putting in the subtle(?) twists that kept the reader yearning for the next piece of the tale to discover how our heroine extricates herself from her problems. An excellent job.
Since you CLAIM this one is over, I will humbly await your next presentation.

Well, even the longest river winds somewhere safe to sea. This is
a genuine classic, the kind other similar stories are going to be
measured against for years to come. The only problem I had was
that, with the installments coming along one at a time, I had
trouble remembering who was who, especially among Steve/Sarah's
numerous girl friends. But now, perhaps, I can sit down & read the
whole thing at leisure.
.
Didn't much care for the Epilogue, however. But that was just me.
.
--Pervette

I felt that the ending was a little weak.  And the epilogue was a repeat seen way too often in other stories.  A great story, but I wonder if you had found yourself up against the same wall that writers often face?  How to end the bloody thing :-).

Sarah,  

OMIGOD!  It's over.  

This was a brilliant series.  I came to Storysite each day hoping to find a new chapter, and when I did I devoured it like a woman who hadn't eaten in a week.  

This was, of course, a simple sex role reversal story, but delightful and wonderful and endearing nonetheless.

Young Sarah has earned her place among the pantheon of (sometimes totally clueless) TG heroines we will  forever hold close to our hearts (because, lord knows, they need our protection), and you, my dear, have found your place among the pantheon of our most beloved authors (because, lord knows, you earned it).  

And at the end you have left us not only with a most delightful story with a cast of wonderful characters, but also with one of the all time great lines in TG fiction history -        

"But wearing a skirt always gets me into trouble!" I said, nearly shouting in frustration.

Sue looked at me for a while, and then shrugged. "So wear a dress."

Brilliant!  Of course!  What could be more obvious?  Wear a dress! The solution to all our problems!  Lets see, what do I have in my closet.  

Brava darlin'. We love you.

that's the end?

NOOOOOOOOO

bummer

oh well

I loved the story, I hope the epilogue leaves enough room for a sequel

I have greatly enjoyed the series of delightful scrapes that you have put poor Sarah in. I felt bad when I encountered the epilogue at the end of the story. Maybe you could start another section to fill in the blanks up to the marriage. We readers are never satisfied!

Lynn

After 14
Sarah, back in the 70's there was a sitcom called "All that Glitters"  created by Norman Leer.  It was a normal soap opera except that all the rolls were reversed.  There was no crossdressing, but all the men talked, acted like, and played the roles normally done by women and vice versa.  Your story is as good as Norman Leer's with crossdressing added in.  And it just keeps getting better and better.  You and Maddy Bell really should get together.  Sarah and Gaby:  What a team !!

I have no anger toward Liz.  Liz is, for all intents and purposes a boy, acted like one, and seems genuinely sorry.  If Steve is smart enough - and it seems as if he might be by his statement at the end - to BE Sarah, she should be able to have Liz  jumping through hoops now just to get back in her good graces.  He certainly is smart to be cautious with that conceited bitch Anita - in my opinion, the real villian of the piece.

I loved the mother/"daughter" bracelet scene!

As I've said before, get that girl some decent breast forms !! Maybe Sarah can get Liz to come up with the big bucks for the best silicon money can buy now that she's got her over the guilt barrell  :-)  

Dear Sarah:

   This work has become a classic already. The latest conflict, doubt, and trial of being Sarah still does not seem to be able to allow Steve to come to the fore. There is too much of Sarah in him.  Hope to goodness he doesn't take up with Anita, she is not one to trust.

  Your use of conflict and resolution is continuous and unsurpassed in my experience. I guess eventually Steve will settle down and be at peace as Sarah. But until that time, I and many others will continue to relish in new and exciting episodes.

   So now Mum is accepting of Sarah as well? This could lead to many changes at a very rapid pace. I wonder if Dad will become involved too? Probably only if he can have Liz as his 'son-in-law'. So much up in the air at all times, you really do keep us guessing.

   Thank you for a wonderful story that is powerful and evocative as well. A really spot on tale.

   Hugs,

   Kristi

part 14 is a great addition to the story

Steve finally gets what he wanted (Anita wanting to date him) and realizes it may not be what he wants

and Liz, she's acting like a total 'boy' yeesh

I loved it, I'm going to reread the entire story tonight

Hi Sarah,
Just letting you know, that i'm still hooked on your story.  :)
Hugs, Fran

Here's a loose end in Ch. 11: Lucy (or Lawrence, as Sarah insists on using) claimed to be dressing at school for breast cancer research, for £22.50 raised per day.

Who is the sponsor? Can this sponsor complicate things for Sarah? Getting sponsorship is a wonderful idea!

Liz has humiliated Sarah. It will be very interesting to see how she makes it up.

Excellent story, please keep at it.

rg

The story grows darker and I feel concern for Sarah/Steve and also that all the dominant characters are female, especially the nasty ones. I am aware that Sarah is ultimately safe in this capable author's hands, but occasionally I feel concern for the main characters. It is very compelling and generally well written and I look forward to the next chapter. Thanks once again to Ms Bayen.

Well, Sarah, you've done it again. Another great chapter in the life of Steve/Sarah.

A very interesting twist, just when we thought Liz really cared for him, she humiliates him. I wonder what whomever wanted to bitch slap Anita in an earlier post wants to do to Liz. Anita, at least, seems to understand what she did to hurt him and tried to patch up their friendship.

Keep up the good work Sarah, your audience awaits you.

I read the latest installment 4 hours ago and I'm still thinking about the scenario and the way Steve / Sarah reacted SO like a girl - and the way Liz acted like a boy.  The writing is brilliant - I can really imagine it.  I would have loved to have been in Steve's situation - faced with with all those decisions, uncertainties and, especially, opportunities.  I can't wait to read the next chapter.

This story just keeps getting better.  I love the way the tension in the characters inter-relationships is developing.

another great installment, the heart just breaks when you read about people in love taking misstep after misstep

I can't wait for the next chapter

seriously, I can't wait...HURRRY

LOL

just kidding, you do excellent work, it's worth the wait

Sarah, not only are you an exceptional writer but your readers are so right on with their comments about your talent and creativeness.  Like so many others I am obsessed with this story and am so looking forward to the continuation.  It is wonderful the strengths and weaknesses of every character.
It appears that Crystal has taken a well deserved rest but that creates a real problem in knowing what is happening in the story.
If there is any way to email me the lastest chapters (past #12) i would really appreciate it.

Thanks so much for sharing your story.

   Dear Sarah:

   Excellent writing makes this story easy to read and hard to wait for.  I actually was a little put off at how Womanless Beauty Contest started with Steve being led around by the nose. I am glad I continued on for I find Contest and Consequence to be riveting. The quality of writing and your perceptiveness into young people's minds and emotions is so clearly and irrevocably real. This could happen and does, not in all these particulars but in a general sense.

   I find it fascinating that everyone seems to know Steve is really Sarah. He is the last to find out. Except of course his Dad, at least that is the 'press release' from his Mum. My only wish is that more episodes would come faster.

   All of your hard work is appreciated but the many who love this story are so involved in Steve's journey that we have a burning desire to know what happens next, good or bad.  You have created an epic here that needs to go on for many, many more episodes.The detailing is perfect for so much of the joy of reading comes in your beautifully detailed descriptions. Please keep it up and we will keep up our part as your fans.

   Hugs,

   Kristi

Wow!  Your Steve should get together with Maddy Bell's Drew because they both have the same problems, especially now that Steve is also being taken for a girl when in full guy mode. (I loved the baby scene!) And Sarah should meet Gaby because when they both forget who else they are they have fun.  And they both live in the UK - How far is Warsop from where Sarah lives?

I only found this story when the latest installment was published a couple of days ago.  Since then I have read all (26?) parts.
I think the story is brilliant, beautifully written, good plot, realistic scenarios, excellent characterisation and well developed.
It is a bit of a saga, certainly, but full marks for consistency and hard work.  I am really looking forward to reading more of this story.

Hi again Sarah :)

You still have me reading your story.  :)

So keep it going!

Hugs, Fran

Wonderful story from start to finish. Hope your future stories are done was well as this tale was. Keep writing stories in future.

Don't listen to Annaliese.  I have seen TG stories that went on far longer than yours, and those stories went down a path to where they weren't even TG stories any longer.  Yours is staying true and I always look to see if there is another chapter when I log onto Crystal's site.

I agree with Fregen

take your time to do the story, it's one of the best I've read

(I can only think of one truly comparable, but it's a very different style)

Sarah,

After Part 11

End the best series around?!?  Bite your tongue!!!  This story is a fine wine - it keeps getting better and better with age.  I fully expect the story to last at least until Christmas (in the story line) when Sarah's obligation to work ends.  And I for one will eagerly anticipate each episode.  Though a bit more frequently wouldn't be amiss (hint, hint). :)

What I really love about this story is that it requires almost no "suspension of disbelief."  No magic rings or lockets, no external mind control or alien devices, no instanteous epiphany of "Yes, this is me!" once he dressed in girl's clothes.  No the real beauty of this story is the gradual, reluctant but rather ordinary and normal sequence of events that lead Steve to Sarah.

Would a boy hopelessly infatuated with a cute girl agree to let her dress him for a contest?  Sure.  Would he allow her to gently coerce him into practicing?  Sure.  Would he be smitten when another, popular girl starts paying attention to him because he is dressed?  Sure.  The slope starts out so gradually, almost imperceptibly but gradually steepens to a point where he's jealous of Lawrence's boobs!

And then there is his blossoming as Sarah.  She evinces a certain feistiness and sense of purpose that would be totally out of character for Steve.  *She* stands up to bullies.  *She* is in control when ambulance is needed.  *She* is a conscience for her friends.

But everyone is still human. The foibles and flaws are all there.  Sarah is torn between her attraction for two girls at the same time.  Mum still makes her cook dinner.  Her friends can be both catty and nice.  The descriptions of ordinary life really *make* the story.

So Sarah, please take all the time you need to keep the sense of realness.  It is an absolutely superb story!

Fregen

I'm sorry, but I have to throw in the towel and I hate to do it because you write so well.  No matter. This story is going on so ridiculously long that it's become utterly boring and repetitive.  It's like a horror movie: THE TG STORY THAT WON'T/CAN'T END.

Why don't you wrap this up and try something shorter?  

Sarah,
After reading Chapter 10 it explains, alot and nothing at all. This story reads more like a sweet who-done-it, then a stuck in girls cloths story! I Like it!! Can I have Anita's address I want to bitch slap her soo much!! What is with Steve's Mother does she see the real girl in Steve that he doesn't see yet? Is there going to be a part 11? I'll stay tuned to this same Bat channel at this same Bat time for ( I Hope ) another episode of Steve/Sarah!
One more thing! Are you goning to croke Sylvia? Just like a soap they aways kill off the drunk trouble makers.
Thank You,
Chris W  

Having posted 14 parts between november and december 2003, we have had only 10 parts in the last 5 months. How long will the wait till the next part be?

Ann Patient

Still the best story posted anywhere. Keep it going! I love to lose myself in your storytelling. I eagerly await the next installment!

After Part 10;

Wonderful writing Sarah, especially now that Steve's mother is now getting involved. This last, promises to make your story rounded out and even a bit more realistic.

Great job and looking for more.

Huggles
Angel

Sarah, I love this story sooo much! Especially dreaming of being in the story myself. And judging from the long list of reader comments, it has just the right mix of ingredients to keep us coming back for more.
Gina

Well writen story you have going here. I love it. Ilove to read it. the It keeps your attention throughout the whole chapter, you do not want to stop. Keep it up.


Cassandra

Sarah,
        Awesome tale.  You fill it out so perfectly.  It seems as if it has all actually happened.  Hmmmn?  Sarah?

Gabby

Great series of stories and I am looking forward to the next installment.

You've created a rich world for Sarah and her freinds.   I enjoyed the 'girls' chat between Sarah and Lucy about Lucy's relationship with Max and the way Sarah comes to see better in her mind that Liz is someone very special.   The part were the three girls prepare for their cheerleading and it is the younger Lucy that has all her gear was a nice touch too!   But the killer moment was when Lucy pulled out her breast forms and it was added to being a great moment when after practice she put on a girl's uniform for the rest of the day.   This lead me to wonder if Liz might be buying a gift for her Sarah so she looks more natural.  

I look forward to seeing what happens next and if Janet and Veronica end up dating (wonder if Janet will provide forms for her or the other girls will.

-J-

Oh dear Steve is getting more and more into it.Mind you he doing ok with the girl's If I was him I would roll  with  THIS WONDER TIME .But then in my case when GOD was handing out masulinty I was in the Toilet reading the Paper.An old girlfriend said that to  me and its true as well. I just love this story its great.More please keep on going with it. I wonder what the school going to make of Lucy Max's housewife in a few years time by the lok of it.I bet and she/he will love it Lucy the the little wife Max well!!!.

after Part 10
Wow, a TG Archie/Betty/Veronica triangle with Sarah apparantly as fickle as Archie!  And Janet as Big ethyl.  Then there's the femme continium of reluctant Peter, confused Steve/Sarah/Sarah/Steve, and enthusiastic lucy.  The rollercoaster continues.  Keep it up, Sarah!  (or down, or sideways, or corkscrewed :-)

I echo the sentiments expressed previously. This is one of the best series I have read. I check daily for the next episode and I hope you will continue the series for some time to come.

I respectfully disagree with Jezzi regarding Steve's telling Liz about his having slept with Anita. This was really their first date and I don't think he was under any such obligation.

I am happy he did get to sleep with Anita, though the aftermath was painful for him. That is a life lesson we all have to learn. Anita had made it plain to him she was seeing John and had not indicated in any way that would end. Though she was had been insensitive (leaving him at Nikki's, scheduling a date with John the night of the contest), remember that she is only 15, and at that age, selfishness and insensitiviy are not uncommon.

Well, enough of my ramblings. Once again, Sarah, keep up the great work. you have many fans waiting for each chapter in your (what hopefully will be) a long running story.

Sarah,
Along with Louisa-Jane and many others, I too have followed this excellent series from the start. Having been an avid 'Storysite' reader, and occasional contributor, for some years, I have to say that this is the best series I have ever read. I hope the adventures of Sarah Sweetheart continue for some time to come, and let the rest of us keep dreaming of her wonderful adventures in her feminine world.
Keep it up Sarah.
love Annalise

Simply excellent. I have read the whole story of dear Sarah in just two sittings. I was hooked from episode 1! Well written, with many twists and turns. Can't wait for the next instalment.

Thank you for a wonderful story - a classic.

Louisa-Jane

I second Jezzi Stewart's comments and hope the story continues for a long time. You always manage to keep the story fresh, throwing in suprises, steady character development and never loosing sight of what makes the story so good in the first place! Keep up the fantastic work, and thanks for giving me more reason to log in every day!

Kate x

I completely disagree with Evelynne.  What a rollercoaster ride! I can't wait for part 10!

 Poor Sarah; it will be very hard for her to come back as the confident corageous happy girl she was with Steve feeling as he does now.  She will be back, as she has the cheerleading, but she now will be burdened with enourmous guilt and a slag (Brit for slut?) self-image, somewhat deserved as she was making it with Anita while still planning on seeing Liz. The same thing, actually, that Anita was doing with her and John.  I still think Anita deserved what happened, though.  I wonder if Steve and/or Anita will realize that what Sarah did to Anita is the kind of thing almost any teen girl would do in a disgreement with another teen girl over a boy?  

My best case scenario would have Sarah's actions making Anita aware of what a bitch she's been and how she really provoked sarah's reaction.  Maybe John doing something even more scuzball than usual on their date would help with this.  Anita dumps him and apologizes to Steve and/or Sarah.  Probably won't happen though.

Finally, I wish Steve had had the courage to confess to Liz, as not doing so will, I fear, come back to haunt both him and Sarah.

Sarah, I've read these sections from the start and I have to say I think it's starting to bog down somewhat.  Just because a story runs many,many parts does not guarantee quality.  I personally am beginning to find it boring, and I wish you'd find some way to wrap it up neatly and move on to something else.  Your writing, dear, is tremendous, but this for me anyway is starting to (excuse the expression) drag.

  I was able to read this last installment last night, along
with all the comments again.  I thought about it all day before
making a comment of my own.  It is this:

  I just want to follow this story wherever Sarah will lead.  

  I can say this, however, I can not wait until Anita's parents
see the article in the paper - Complete with pictures!  

                                           CoffeyC

 

Once I started reading this storie, I neve quit until I have read all that is posted. It really caught my interest and hope you continue on.

  Thank you

Sarah, your story began to resonate slowly with me and now I'm beginning to see that we would probably respond to a Rohrschach test  similarly.  I like the way your brain works! Your way of exposing Sarah's (the protagonist) emotional development seems natural to me.  I have been reading Jezzi Stewart's comments also and can second them enthusiastically.  It makes me feel good to read a story where the transgender phenomenon is used as part of human emotional growth.

Jezzi once again has given you wonderful and very thoughtful comments.

I have a question that is really nagging at me.

Why the hell did Janet do such a stupid thing like she did at the disco? She went from being the insecure ugly duckling to what?

"She took his arm and draped it over her shoulder like a shawl." Seems contadictory to her personality.

Then, when Pete went off with another girl, instead of thinking him the asshole she blames the one person that helped her when no one else would! GEEZ!

I would think that a better way for a twist of fate to happen at the disco would have been to bring in the bad ass characters from the contest. Leave Janet to figure out that Sarah was her true friend and ally all along.

Of course that is my newbie writers opinion and I suspect you are going somewhere deaper and more involved with this set up?

Giggle, giggle. I LOVE THIS STORY!

Huggles
Angel

I hope Anita remembered Sarah was Steve enough to have some condoms handy.

Get that bo...girl some decent breast forms!!

Another fantastic episode; keep 'em coming!

Sarah/steve seems so calm and mature, 15 going on 35, would he really be that worried about the size of his bum? I accept that this is a contrivance to demonstrate his transgenderism, but this neurosis seems a bit out of place with his otherwise seeming unperturbability. But this minor criticism is all I would make, otherwise it is a very well crafted tale with with more twists and turns than a Cornish lane. Keep up the excellent work. Thanks Sarah, once more you have made me impatient for your next installment.
Best Wishes,
Angharad.

I did feel that Steve's increasing concern about the size of his backside was a little weak. Doesn't it take years of women's magazines and TV advertising and such to make teenage girls that neurotic?

Sarha is just so in control Steve poor boy is not if he goes the Sarha route she will be a hit and go far Steve will just muddle along .Funny a girly boy telling A real girl how to dress make up and looking more fem than her .Please keep going this story is just great

After Part 7:

<<  Yes," she insisted. "It's much less complicated that way, and in any case, it suits you. You make a much better girl than you ever did a boy."
"I see," I said at last, looking away from her.
"Oh but you do!" she went on. "Do you think Steve would ever have been so nice to Janet for a start? Or would he have been able to take control of things when Sylvia collapsed?"
I thought about this; they were both things I had never really done before. Was she right? WAS IT BEING SARAH THAT ENABLED ME TO DO THIS SORT OF THEING?  >>

I think this is the big question for Steve/Sarah.  Sue, I think, misstates the situation; what she should have said is, "You make a much better PERSON AS A girl than you ever did as a boy."  

The nurturing qualities that Sarah has exhibited in her actions helping others are stereotypically feminine.  In reality, nurturing, caring for others, is a genderless human quality as opposed to the animal nature of much of the macho behavior seen in the male stereotype.  Steve may want to develop the nurturing aspects of his humanity, but his male cultural conditioning tells him that to do that - ie, be feminine - is wrong.  Being Sarah, a young woman, (I think Sarah is exhibiting a maturity beyond her physical years that precludes the use of "girl") allows Steve to exhibit those human characteristics without guilt.  In this case Sarah, the female Steve, may well be a transition phase, as it is for most of Aunt Jane Thompson's Seasons House students, to a better Steve, a better man.  

I see this as the case so far as I don't believe Sarah the author has written Steve with the characteristics or desires of a transsexual

If Steve doesn't realize this, he could be trapped as a forever conflicted Sarah in skirts, as Aunt Jane's Victor almost was as Victoria.  If he does realize this, that he can be the person Sarah is without the dress and makeup, then he can make a true choice:  If he decides he enjoys being Sarah in dresses and heels, he can be her without guilt.  If he decides he really doesn't enjoy being Sarah, he can leave her without guilt.  OR, he can be both, as most of Aunt Janes students, even tall Ken(dra), eventually become.

As I see it, The difference between "Seasons" and "Contest" is that in "Contest", Steve is not a bad boy; there is no necessity for anyone to push him to a British Aunt Jane, so he/she is pulled ,a victim of circumstances, into this voyage of discovery witout an experienced guide.  The women around him who are propelling him into it are no older, wiser, or more mature than him/herself.    He/she is on his/her own.  A lot of credit must go to Steve's parents, as they must have instilled in him the basic human values that have made him so far a better human being rather than a whinning sissy.  

One reason I love this story is that, in a way, Sarah has written my story; I see Bob/Jezzi, although quite a bit older, as very similar to Steve/Sarah.  In fact, my first actual dressup experience was like Steve's, in a contest in high school, the Senior Mens' Fashion Show.  (although things did not turn out the same with that as for Steve/Sarah.)  As I did not come to my epiphany, though, till late in life, already having accumulated adult male resposibilities, I live physically 90% Bob and crossdress to 10% Jezzi.  My scenario for Steve, starting out so much younger, with so much less baggage, is 90% Sarah, crossdressing as 10% Steve just to relax and scratch and belch and down a pint once in awhile :-)

I just found your story a little while ago, now I cannot get enough of it. I just got done reading "Chapter six" of book two. I like the last fan hope you do not stop writing any more.

I think there should be a whole lot of adventure for 'Sarah'. How she will do on her job and her relationship with Liz, Sue, and course with Anita. It also was good to hear from Sarah, too. Well I wish you the best of luck and keep the stories coming.

Cassandra

I have been following this story since November 2003 (something which I never do), and I can now say that it is quite simply the best story I have ever read. Having checked the page literally every day for updates, I will definately be following this story for as long as you keep posting it, be it months (or fingers crossed) years! Great to finally see Sarah post a message here. I wonder, do you have a website or any more works on the net?

Keep up the great work!

Kate

"I dreamed I won the Womanless Beauty Contest in my Maidenform Bra..." Sarah is so natural and comfortable in her role, and there seem to be no end to what's required of her. love this story and dream of being in the contest.

My dear this is such a sweet and loving story.Liz is so much more the boy than Steve/ Sarah he is become a real sweet girl yet she had the guts to stop the fight.Oh I do hope Liz and Sarah become an Item. Steve think he will give it bet Ssrsh wont let him .As a transgender person I know,that feminity is such a powerful draw for those who feel's inside as he/she seem to do. Please keep on with this wonder sweet loving story . He /she could do lot worse than Liz let Anita stay with thug you like as her boyfriend .Liz is far better for Sarah.

after part 6:

I LOVE THIS STORY !!!

 It would be so easy to have Steve not realize at all that he is acting like a girl or, coversely to have him come to an epiphany of total realization, but you have taken the middle ground of having him sort of realize it, but then his ego kicks in and he denies it.  He likes being Sarah, again till his cultural conditioning kicks in and he denies it.  The one constant of girlishness that he never seems to recognize is "My bum's too big."  I can see Sarah finally buying a body shaper on her own because of this.  

The total role reversal of the shopping was priceless, and it was not lost on this reader that while Liz was quite aware that Steve was acting like a girl, she seemed oblivious to the fact that she was for all intents and purposes, a boy.  I liked the scene in the racy lingerie store; Sarah was every inch a young lady, not a CD, in the way that she wanted practical underware (same with the shoes) as opposed to the racy stuff that men - Liz - really buy to give themselves a treat seeing their fantasy woman rather than reality.  I fully expected Sarah to look at what Liz picked and think, quite naturally, "MEN!" - Steve, of course would have been horrified had she done so :-)

I'd still like to see him in a beauty salon - maybe that could be part of the Saturday Girls' Night Out.

I'd like to see more of him also growing in maturity, helping others, as SHE has done in the past.  I'd like to see how necessary Sarah is to that new maturity by seeing if, back in boy mode, Steve acts the same as before Anita asked him to be in the contest, or acts with the same new maturity that Sarah shows.

And PLEASE, have Liz or Mom buy him some decent breast forms!

Another fine chapter Sarah! Steve sure runs into more than his share of controling overbearing women does't he? Giggle, giggle.

You handled his family scene very well, but I know Mother knows more than she is letting on. Mothers notice things, especially the little things, and 'Sarah' sure did slip up a few times even though Steve thought he covered well, he did not, not to a mother anyway.

Liz, what a character she is! I love her to death! Easily read visualy, and easy to make jelous without much provocation. I am also glad she has the money to keep Sarah/Steve in the naughty niceties Liz wants him to wear. Giggle, giggle.

I am eagerly awaiting your next chapter!

Huggles Sweety
Angel

From her reactions to Steve actions in stopping the fights, his helping Laurence to replace the damaged dress and his help and interest in Janet, could it be that Anita is a control freak?  As long as Anita is in control of Steve and is doing the manipulations she is happy.  But when Steve takes control of his actions, she gets upset.  I wonder if Steve will stand up for himself and tell Anita no to the girl's night out.  After all, that would give him the time to spend with Liz.

Hi Sarah  :)
You still have me following the story.  :]
Enjoying the story very much. Thank you.
Hugs, Fran

thank you for writing a story that is plausible, not extreme but with enough twists and turns to keep our attention. As I read each chapter I become immersed in the story and I savour every word and cannot stop reading until the end. It looks like the story could go on for a couple of years. Please continue with all your supprises, we are enterained

Just a brief note to thank everyone for their comments and suggestions. I'd love to post the chapters more quickly, but as well as time, it's quite an emotional strain to keep going through the material - on one level you have to live it as well as write it.
I wouldn't claim that the tale has any deep and meaningful purpose, but Jezzi has more or less pinned down what was in my mind. Realism is important of course, but as we probably all know to our cost, a world where the transgendered normally face anything other than ridicule and hostility is a step or two away from our current universe. In that sense the whole story slips away from the realism goal. In that sense I prefer to strive for general plausibility. The primary aim however is catharsis, and to entertain, and I am extremely glad that I seem to have achieved that for some of you.

Love and best wishes to all.


Sarah

 I find myself hoping that Sarah Bayen has a long holiday coming up that will afford her the time to produce more of this wonderful tale.   I think that it is a testament to the human heart, which we so seldom are able to understand fully for ourselves; and, also to the courage that every person, without the distinction of gender, must draw upon in the struggle to find a way to be whomever he or she must ultimately be.   This is a delightful story, Sarah, and one that I am sure I will carry in a special place inside of me, for many years to come.   Thank you, and well done.

                                                                          Hope to hear from you soon,

                                                                                           CoffeyC

This is a wonderful serial, which gives me great pleasure to read. Thank you Sarah for producing such an enjoyable tale, without recourse to vulgarity and crudity. Call me old fashioned, but it's nice to see someone who can write grammatically as well as entertainingly. Next installment soon, please.
Thanks and best wishes,
Angharad.

    I am transgendered and feel that this is a very lovely story. Sarah's story touches my heart and I have looked forward to reading more. There is more truth in this story then the author may ever realize. For I had four girl friends during my pre teen years who became my sisters. In very short order we became five girls who did everything together. It was a wonderous time. Once again, there is more truth in this story the some may ever realize. Thanks for allowing me to be able to post this.

After part 5

   Is Steve, in his decision making,  too "stupid" to be believable?  I don't think so.  I've delt for 37 years with boys and girls Steve's age.  For a boy or girl that age, there is a great deal of difference between being smart and dealing with the opposite sex.  If being intelligent were all it took to keep life simple there would be a lot fewer teen girls pregnant and a lot fewer teen boys in trouble for rape or sexual harrassment.  We come pre-programed from "the factory" (however you choose to interpret that) for survival leading to reproduction, ie, SEX, and part of that is an automatic and incredibly strong attraction to the opposite sex.  While not impossible to overcome, When those feelings are newest and strongest they are the most difficult to overcome.  Intellect takes a back seat.  Why didn't Steve just ask Anita or later Liz if she was interested in him?  Fear of rejection.  Why does he keep doing what the girls want?  He wants them.  Again, intellect doesn't enter into it a lot.  why is Anita torn between compliant Steve and Asshole John?  Because on a primal level, big muscular John can protect her and her children from the sabretooths.  On an intellectual level, Steve is good to her and does what he's told.  She's trying to have the best of both worlds.

     Actually, what Steve has been manipulated into by primal  animal programing is actually causing him - well her - to mature as a human being.  His stopping the fights, his helping Laurence/Lucy, his standing up for and willingness to help Janet are human acts that his feminine side is allowing him to do. Although not happenbing consciously, I see an almost Aunt Jane outcome possible here.  Being a girl could very well be making  Steve a much better man ... or woman.
 
But then Sarah could decide to take this in a whole new direction.  It is her story, and she is writing it very very well.  I trust her.  Count me in to continue along for the ride!.

WOW THIS STORY IS JUST GREAT.Keep up the good work

I must address the comments made by another author here her name "Kelly Ann Rogers." Kelly has been writing and posting her own type of stories here for a few years now. She to my delight even posted a breakdown of what type of TG stories we like to read based on hit counts. She also used the most popular of the stories to give us her critque on the why we chose a certain type of story over others. This is based on her interpretations of course as was her comments left for Sarah and those others caring to leave a comment and/or read comments left by others.

In her comments she addresses her feeling that Steve being so bright of mind just couldn't in her mind make the 'stupid' decisions he has made. Now I don't want to interpret Kelly's words wrong so I include the pertinent ones quoted here.

" it seems inconsistent that he would be so stupid when it comes to having women manipulate him.  Well, okay, lots of guys are stupid like that.  But he also fails to see the consequences of his actions, so that with each step further into femininity he still thinks he's only a day away from getting out.  

This kind of approach is common to many T* stories, as seen in the utter stupidity of Vickie Tern's otherwise bright men, who seem forever to be accepting deals and offers they don't understand, right along to this story, with its sweet heart and big soul.  

This always creates a somewhat jarring note for me.  Dozens of pages of text (in this case, terrific text) devoted to some outcome that could have been hastened or averted if the protagonist only acted like a real person and said, "What do you mean?" or "What will I really have to do?" etc.

This story is so plausible in so many ways that it seems a shame to let it drift away from that just to make it easier for Sarah to be trapped into her next feminine adventure.  You've already proven you're creative enough to get Sarah where you want her without her being blind, and I know it's hard work to do what I'm asking, but I know you can do it, and if you do, you're story will be even richer and more rewarding to read."

The trouble with all of this is simply that it is a wrong assumption to make. I know it is Kelly's heartfelt opinion, but it certainly is not mine and I am an author and avid reader as well. Giggle, giggle.

I respect Kelly's views and opinions highly, but I really, really disagree with her on this one.

Sarah, this is your story and you have created wonderful characters and very realistic actions and reactions with them as well. When I first began writing and posting stories I accussed some of the commenters of trying to write the rest of my story for me. In a few cases I was correct, but more times than not I was wrong. A few years and even more stories later I can differentiate between the two. My concern is that some of our commenters so wish the story to turn out "THEIR" way and in a style they like, they lose that basic understanding of who's story it is. The person writing the story has a creative mind of their own and they have their own style and direction their story is going to take. To use another auther's style as a tool to critique yours in implication was wrong in my humble opinion.

You just write what you feel is right for this story Sarah and keep your characters as flowing and wonderful as they are. Take what is commented to you with a grain of salt and appreciate every single one of them. They took the time to write a comment because you made them care about your story and style of writing. One word of special advice from one who has a style of their own, your style is that, yours! It makes your stories unique no matter what ever has been written before or after. To adopt anothers style of writing to please others wants or needs is not what we do. We grow and become better writers by writing more and learning from each other.

Kelly has her own style and type of stories as do you. Keep it your and unique to you.

This is just said in my humble opinion and I do submitt this with all respect to Kelly and you.

Huggles
Angel

Sarah, good going on this story so far.  The relationship between Liz and Steve is progressing nicely as well.  I shold think though that, as realistic as Steve is, he would have to, eventually, fend off some guys.  It seems only natural for this to happen.  Don't you?  It doesn't have to change things between Liz and Steve it would simply be one more thing for Steve to try and handle in his Sarah guise.  The use of uncomfortable situations is a good thing in a story imho.

Sarah, another great chapter and only one part that gave me pause when reading the entire thing.

"She sat on the driver's 'chair', lent back, and breathing heavily, with her eyes shut."

Now I don't know about the UK all that much, but you did refer to the car and its 'seats' earlier in the chapter. A chair is something I think of as in a home or building. Giggle, giggle.

Such a small thing I know, but you have asked for critique and I am giving you one. I do love your story and your characters come to life in my mind as I read. Well done Sarah! I look forward to the next chapter eagerly.

Huggles
Angel

Sarah, this is a delightful story.  Wonderfully constructed and written with both care and style.  It's just downright fun to read, and how could you not lose your heart to Sarah?  I so look forward to each episode and nearly explode with pleasure when it appears.

There is one thing that is starting to concern me more and more though.  Sarah does lots of thinking, but little talking when she makes decisions.  Her decision to become a cheerleader, which seemed stunningly preciptious considering how long it took her to become Sarah, is based on how she thinks Liz might react, but she never does the obvious and ask Liz what she thinks.  It was the same with Anita.  Steve wondered endlessly whether then next step in feminization will somehow get her closer to Anita, but he never actually asks. Even if she lies to him, he is acting realistically.

Especially for Steve, who is so bright otherwise, it seems inconsistent that he would be so stupid when it comes to having women manipulate him.  Well, okay, lots of guys are stupid like that.  But he also fails to see the consequences of his actions, so that with each step further into femininity he still thinks he's only a day away from getting out.  

This kind of approach is common to many T* stories, as seen in the utter stupidity of Vickie Tern's otherwise bright men, who seem forever to be accepting deals and offers they don't understand, right along to this story, with its sweet heart and big soul.  

This always creates a somewhat jarring note for me.  Dozens of pages of text (in this case, terrific text) devoted to some outcome that could have been hastened or averted if the protagonist only acted like a real person and said, "What do you mean?" or "What will I really have to do?" etc.

This story is so plausible in so many ways that it seems a shame to let it drift away from that just to make it easier for Sarah to be trapped into her next feminine adventure.  You've already proven you're creative enough to get Sarah where you want her without her being blind, and I know it's hard work to do what I'm asking, but I know you can do it, and if you do, you're story will be even richer and more rewarding to read.    

This story is absolutely exquisite! I love reading all about Sarah's adventures, and imagining...

This is the best series I have ever read, the structure and build up keep me in a state of anticipation like no other stories, will Liz lead here further down the road of femininity, will Sylvia or Chrissie do the same, I cant wait to find out. Can we receive stories on a more frequent basis please!!!

 Love Kate

I truly love this series.  Please keep more stories coming.  I love the adventures of Sarah as she/he discovers what he is becoming.  I can't wait to see how he  finally ends up.  This has become my fav series.

Thanks
Amy

after part 4:
     I'm really glad the fickle Anita is getting her just "rewards", and I liked the way Sarah delt with janet, another example of her concern for others.  Steve is growing up and maturing, but it looks like his feminine side is what's making that possible.   Sure looks like Sarah is here to stay.  I'm really looking forward to the confrontation with "her" parents.  I hope they are cool with everything.  I'm also anxious to see what happens when the first anita and now Liz euphoria wears off and Steve comes out of the Sarah fog and REALLY realises what he's committed to do as Sarah.  At least he's admitted to him/her self that he/she likes being Sarah.  And how does Liz REALLY feel about Steve apparantly wanting to be Sarah?  She sure gave "him" enough chances to back out.  Can't wait for episode 5!

yesterday, I followed a link that lead to part 10 of The Contest Beginnings and was hooked - was reading to 4am this morning - couldn't put it down.

Like your other comments here looking to see how Sarah handles her Saturdays shop job and the regular girls nights out, especially the first one with that short red dress.

Not my usual reading matter but you have me hooked - next installment soon please.  

I adore this story.  The pace and development are a delight and a pleasant change from the bare outlines that are so often presented as "stories" in this genre.  I do so hope this story continues on for a very long time, although I hope as well that continuation commences very, very soon. Thankyou,
                          Missy

Instead of posting really long chapters every couple of weeks, could you perhaps post shorter ones more often? The story is great, but the long gaps in between are not. Keep up the great work!

THIS IS A BEAUTIFUL, ALTHOUGH LONG AND DRAWN OUT, STORY. IT IS OBVIOUSLY NOT OVER, THERE ARE TOO MAY LOOSE STRINGS. HOW DOES SARA/STEVE GET HOME? WHO IS STEVES SECRET ADMIRER? WHAT HAPPENS TO SARA/STEVE WHILE HE/SHE IS WORKING AT THE SHOP? DOES HE EVEN GO TO THE SHOP? THE OWNER DOES NOT KNOW STEVE, HE COULD JUST NOT SHOW UP, AND LAST, BUT NOT LEAST, WHEN ARE WE GOING TO READ MORE OF THIS BEAUTIFUL STORY?

Excellent! Does the sweet Sarah "enjoy" the dance with her "escort"? Does it continue after the dance? Does Anita know or care? I'm hoping Sarah realizes the true Anita. Poor Peter! What will Chrissie do now?
Will Lucy Lawrence continue to be the girl he was meant to be? How does Sarah survive at Sylvia's dress shop? Is Nikki in the picture somehow? When and How do Steve's/Sarah's parents find out and how do they accept Sarah? So many questions waiting for the next chapters.

after part nine:
This episode made me proud of Sarah Sweetheart, who in the course of this story and patrticularly in "Consequenses" has gone from being a rather wimpy boy to being a strong independant young lady, displaying in her character all that is noble in the feminine.  It also has reenforced my awe at the writing skill of  Sarah Bayen, who has managed to take a hackneyed TG fiction plot and turn it into one of the best stories I've read.  You go, girls!!!

I smell a rat! Just how is it that Sylvia had a direct replacment dress that did not have to be fitted (modified) to fit Lawrence? I have a sneeky suspition that some how some where not only are the grils, Anita, Nikki, Chrissie with out her knowlage, and Miss Williams. But also Steven's own parents are some how involved!
Just a gut feeling.
But please do keep up this great story.
Thank you, Chris W  

Sarah Bayen,

I just can't wait for every episodes you have added into this website. Just wonder what will happen to Steve/Sarah after the contest? Will Chrissie ever blame Steve for making her losing to Anita and decided to take revenge on him? Will the basque/corset used on Peter is now going to be used on Steve by Chrissie? Will ever Peter explain his journey to become Lady Veronica and how Chrissie trap him into it? And, finally what will happen to Steve on his journey towards working at Sylvia boutique for every weekend?

 

Womderful story Sarah - I've been eagerly awaiting each installment. This is one of the best I have read and the plot twists and turns open up endless possibilites. The descriptions of the complex emotions of the central character Steve/Sarah are spot on.
Bravo!
Sandra

i get the feeling that things are about to get really fun. i wonder what's next for sarah sweetheart. when her parents see the pictures in the paper.

Often it seems a serial story like this one gets predictable as it goes along. Not this one. It just keeps pulling you in with interest to see what will happen next. very good! So many questions to be answered. So many directions to go! can't wait to read about them.

Well done!   This story as grown and grown on me from the first opening chapters.    As we end the contest it was tension all the way down the wire.   You've brought to life several amazing characters, both in the real girls and the dressed up boy-girls.   Cindy was a hoot and played to the crowd well, but Lucy and Sarah are the diamonds of the show.   I felt sorry when Lucy's dress was ruined and smiled as Sarah offers her aid to replace it, causing the pair to venture out as they are dressed.   Lucy is someone besides the real girls that I can see drawing Sarah out more and more.    I look forward to the dance as well as seeing how Sarah gets home and if her folks see what she was wearing for the day.   And I'm sure we all want to see those near endless weekends that Sarah must attended to her new job.   Somehow I think this girl is here to stay and will be growing more into her own very, very soon!

Again great job!  

-J-

It s just so good keep on going with it  its great

Another brilliant instalment in a developing story. I love all the twists and turns that leave the reader wanting more.... And you've still got plenty of hooks to build on for future chapters. Keep them coming.

Callie

I love the way you are writing this story! From the first chapter on you grabbed my attention. I was compelled to come back each day looking for the next chapter. It was with further glee that I found that with each chapter your writing got better. I was addicted now to the story and your style of writing. Ms Sarah Bayen I salute you and I am looking forward not only to more of this particular story, but to further stories you have yet to write.

Huggles
Angel

the more i read in this story the more i want to read.

This story is becoming an obsession, to be sure, not a disabling one, but I end up checking this site every day to watch for a new installment.

You are creating an inhabited character, and the situations so far have a good deal of verisimilitude. This story is actually getting better as you go along.

rg

So far so good.  I love the varied scenes (the train most notably).  Keep up the good work.

I will  have to go back to your other story to see if it is as good as this one is truning out to be.

Cheers.

I have been reading the past 16 chapters this story. Can't wait for the next chapter. It has been very entertaining. I can't wait to read what happen next to Sarah until Christmas and also what will happen to Peter if he loose the contest. I am sure Chrisse will punish him....:)  

I just love this story! It's so realistic, and Sarah is so lucky to be having such an adventure.

My dear

I love the story my dear it so much fun .My dear is steve not just the luckest boy . Will he end up full time Its true once a skirt goes on its hard to take them off as the girls told him

after part 2
This is still about the best and most realistic TG serial I have read, however:
1)  The length of time as shop girl and the evilness of sylvia are edging into the unrealistic.
2)   Please DON'T bring sex into it to any greater degree than you have already.
3)  When, oh when is he going to get the backbone to really tell clueless (or apparantly clueless) and fickle Anita off ?  She is really a bitch to be dating John right after the contest and Steve ought to tell her that!

I'm really enjoying this story...  Every day or two I check for additional material..  Your writing style is enjoyable in that it keeps the readers attention, and yet never seems to cross the line into strictly porno type material..  I enjoy that, it is a refreshingly clean style that incorporates a good deal of depth to the characters without revealing to much to fast..  If the story line does eventually turn into something totally sexual in nature, fine that is the logical conclusion to me...and I can't wait to see how this story goes..  Do you others...I'd like to read them as well..  Thank you and I hope your not done with this line..

When will the next part be posted? I've been checking every day for 2 weeks!
Kate x

Hi again Sarah, When is the next chapter comming out. you have us on edge. Thanks you for taking the time to write this for us.
Love & Laughter
Stephy

Tooooo Long but great. When it's going to be finished?

Can't wait until the next episode.  I normally shy away from multi-part stories but this is definitely an exception. I'm waiting to see how Sylvia treats Steve in this "hour of need"...

A hearty well done.  I look forward to the remaining bits and pieces of this tale.

WOW, and BRAVO, Sarah.  I mostly agree with Angel, but I would add that Steve grows up considerably, his concern for others finally overcoming his own embarassment.  I know you wanted a way to work Sylvia back into things, but I really thought Steve would wear the dress (Laurence wearing his)  just as Chrissie had marked it to make a statement that there were cheaters out there.  Chrissie has made no secret of her attitude, so many in the audiernce would add 2 + 2 and come up with her or her cronies as the answer; it would also get back at her for the panties rumor.  And it would, I think, have increased Steve's standing with the boys as well as the girls all would know it was an incredibly brave thing to do.  Can't wait for the next episode!

Sarah, I just want to tell you how much i have enjoyed this story. I wait every day to see when the next chapter arrives so I can read it. Everything in my life stops so I can read on. Keep it up and I look forward to the next chapter. It also makes me so want to be Sarah.
Good Job,
Stephy Maitland

I just love your writing style. You make everything sound so realistic. What a marvelous experience to be part of the Womanless Beauty Contest!

Well, he does have a set of balls after all! Of course it was for Lawrence and not Anita he finally stood up and took charge. Interestingly Lawrence is now headed to the dreaded Sylvia, but alas, all might not be lost!

I guess Anita and Nikki as well as Tania had a screw loose somewhere, even I thought that Chrissie would use one of her henchmen to sabatage the formals if left unattended. The fact that she actually got the wrong dress was a nice twist!

Poor Steve/Sarah no boys clothes to wear home. Now that is something isn't it? All of a sudden that does not bother him much? Hm...

Now here we find Steve and Lawrence dressed in schoolgirl outfits taking the train to Sylvia's costume shop. Just the two of them! What are you setting us up for?

With this chapter I just finished reading anything can happen now.

Sylvia lets Lawrence have a gown, but Steve has to wear the pink one she wanted to have him wear in the first place. But then what about shoes and the accessories? Will she have those as well? What will Steve have to promise Sylvia? He is between a rock and a hard place now. I bet Sylvia raises the stakes!

Just a few things that "MIGHT" happen and I am not trying to write your story at all. Just my musings! Giggle, giggle.

I do love your story and will wait for your next instalment.

Huggles
Angel

Wow!  I'm speechless but also upset that I have to wait even longer for more parts to this magical story.  Anyways I don't have alot to say honestly, I just really love this story and hope to see more of it soon.  I don't know how I will manage until the next part appears, feel free to e-mail it to me if you like. hehe! :)