A very lovely and touching story.  Granted the mystery portion of it was transparent as from the first time we met Helen it was obvious she was going to end up being the bad woman of the story.  However as you said, the crime was only a plot device to move the main story forward, and that story was the love found between Ed and Veronica.  Truly wonderful and I intend to pass this on to my little sister to have a read.  She and I have some rather odd, if cliche, history that brought out aspects of me once hidden and wonderful stories of love such as this will touch her as it has touched me.

I knew it was Helen because she was a bitch. but good story.

Tigger, I saw who the villian was when she first showed up. Her being a member of the sisterhood was not expected. Turning Ed into Edie was a stroke of genius. Mary's love for Ed is so sweet as is Veronica's . The only possible continuing of this story is the wedding, Helen attempting revenge, or Edie becoming a Sister. Now That I have read all of your stories here, I tackle Brandy De Winter's story. She helped you in writing Jessica's Story and Synaptic Overload. The way she drew Entropy bears a remarkable resemblance to Jessica. I loved it when you let Janet Lynn appear in the story.

I've read this story now a couple of times, and, while I enjoyed the story and thought it was very well written, I have to agree with Marcus that I thought parts of it were a bit contrived.  I don't think that someone like Ed, who was not a committed submissive, could go through the hell that he apparently went through on the island, would agree to voluntarily be feminized again, especially after the lengths he went through to avoid anything like that earlier (the anti-terriosist training, refusing to attend the company Halloween party in drag, even offering to resign from his job to avoid it).  

Having said this, I will be the first to admit that I don't understand the mindset of the D/s lifestyle, especially the corporal aspects of it.  I've never understood how hurting someone (sometimes rather badly) you're supposed to care a great deal for, or about, can be considered loving.  If the corporal aspects weren't present, I could almost get a handle on some the rest of it, such as the transfer of power, teasing and denial, etc., but the pain and humiliation aspects should be a major turn-off.  

I would love to see some other stories by this author in a somewhat lighter vein.    

i LOVE this story!  It is a very good mystery.  Not the usual femdom stuff i come across.
jenny

I wasn't keen on the story at all. I found it too artificial and contrived. It was too obvious that you were struggling to make Veronica appear to be an unselfish, loving person when in reality she was anything but. And Ed, he was totally unbelievable. There's no way that someone like Ed would have submitted the way he did (maybe temporarily, but marriage? come on) unless he were secretly a sissy of the first order and you had built him as something else. It was fairly obvious throughout what you were attempting to do and I'm not saying it was easy but you didn't pull it off because all the characters were too black or white and none of them felt real. The ladies were mainly strong and organised while the men were weak and easily controlled ...... sounds to me like the perfect world for a type 3 feminist.

It was refreshing to read this story.  Fortunately I came upon it after
it was complete and could therefore read it at one setting even though it is hardly a short story.  Great writing and let me congratulate you on writing something without any homosexual aspects!  It seems to be almost impossible to find many stories that deal with 100% hetrosexual crossdressing and bondage.  Bondage can be both loving and strict, that gives pleasure to all involved!

The fact that a male can derive enjoyment from being dressed and also find pleasure with bdsm does not imply that he wants to either be a woman or be involved with a man!  This story handles this quite well.

Again, congratulations on a very good story.

Dear Tigger:

   Well, I must say I am still a little skeptical that someone who keeps saying they can be quite a bitch and very demanding really knows what true love is all about. Still, I can see all the worry and fretting of Veronica as well and what looks like real love for her sub as he struggles with challenge after challenge brought on by her preferences and past hurts. I guess it is a mystery to me why embarrassing someone in public is considered a loving thing to do. Obviously no dominant woman is ever going to get close to me, but I am trying to understand. And of course the submissive gets punished for an act that saved someone's life or at least career.

  Still the story is riveting and does deal well with lots and lots of conflict. Why didn't they get Ed in for professional help though? The more resources the better in healing. And why did they not see that they at least had to try if they were really his friends? Surely Veronica's and Mary's friendship were healing but I think they were very wrong in what they did by not getting a good and healing counselor to see him. He's a submissive after all, he would have gone most likely. well I guess I sure am focused on that.

 Contract Modifications is a powerful and provoking story and I did enjoy it immensely. I was hooked as your main character Ed was a very sympathetic character as usual with your stories and I had to find out what happened. Also there seemed to be more intensity as if you were tapping into the core of your being with this tale. Ed was in real danger emotionally throughout the entire opus and I just had an almost impossible time stopping reading. I did finish it of course. It was really a fantastic story and makes me an even more loyal fan. I love it when an author shows range. Don't' get me wrong I love your Seasons Tales but it is good to see something very different.

 I liked your Tigger reference:


>Grinning, Mary followed. "Watching slaves work is one of the things I do best."<


The Tiggers says "bouncing  (etc.) is what Tiggers do best" reference. That was cute.

 I very highly recommend this story because it is excellent and because it informs about loving and responsible dominance.  It's Great! Oh yeah that is Tony The Tiger.

  Thank you so much Tigger for hours of hard work and for sharing with us. I think you have a generous heart.

Hugs,

Kristi

Bravo..............WOW
Trendous efffort
wonderful characters
great imagination, nice plot
Tremendous effort
very good diction and vocabulary
Very little monday morning quarterbacking needed.
Accolades Accolades Accolades...........

This story was not at all what I expected, given the way most of the dozens of other stories I've read on this site (thus far) were written. As one of the other commentors noted, this story has been edited quite well, with only a few mistakes. In fact, there are fewer mistakes in the entire 11 episodes than in the first page of many of the other stories.

Additionally, it seems to me that this story was not written with the primary purpose of causing the reader to achieve some level of immediate sexual gratifaction. Given a different venue and (admittedly major) changes in the plot details, the writing has literary merit, something the other stories I've read do not.

Thanks for putting so much time and effort into your story. I will now have to look for more stories authored by you.

took awhile to read but what a great story !! wondering if there might be a part 2

Thoroughly enjoyable. Well written, and with characterization and plot for a change! Bravo. So how do I meet La Marquesa?

Contract Modifications was another very intriguing story. Sometimes I wish we'd get the whole story at once, but on the other hand that would cause me to lose a lot of sleep, as I would probably stay up all night to finish it.  Although I sort of know what is coming next, the story is so well written that it is hard to have to wait.  But better for me, I'm sure.  The characters are believable, and I feel I can relate to them.  I will be looking forward to your next one, Tigger, even if it is another Aunt Jane epoch.  I liked those, too.

Eve

To date I have only got as far as Part 4 but the story is compelling, well written and the characters believable. That's great but to have a subject that is of interest as well adds the icing to the cake. Oh, to be this focused in my poor efforts!

Paula

The storys are great domination yes but loving too. I think you are once of the best TG writers around .I look forward to the rest of the storys.

I very much enjoyed the story, even though my preference if for stories that "HER" would have a BIG problem with.  Tigger has a flair for a good plot, a sense of suspense, and well-developed characters.  I am especially impressed with the "Sister" philosophy and the doctor comparison.  That was very well conceived and I find it defines some of my own philosophies well.

The only two criticisms I have are that I found a few typos, and perhaps a little more misdirection in the mystery aspect could be good.  My first guess of who the bad guys were turned out to be correct.  I'm no mystery expert, but perhaps a few more "likely" suspects would help.

Of course, I'm speaking as "Editor Ami" and not "Author Ami".  "Author Ami", I am sad to admit is far from perfect as can be seen from my own writings.  I have a hard time being critical of my own writings since I know what it is I was trying to say.  I often find errors when I read my own stuff months later and it is too late to correct.

Tigger, keep writing.  You are a great story teller.  You just might want to think about finding a better editor (if you have one - if not, then WOW! Great job self-editing!  I suck at that...).

-Ami

Ok - so I cheated and went over to FictionMania to read the whole story all at once. (I think the editing is better here)

Thanks - I very much enjoyed it.

The emotions conveyed were gripping and quite enlightening.

And by the way, IMHO, you shouldn't worry about not writing short stories. You MUST continue telling your stories in your way, it works!

sincerely,

HER

I second that emotion.

I'm truly enjoying the story and find myself checking the site several times each day hoping for the next chapter.  I had debated waiting until all ten parts were done before starting to read it so I could get to the end, but my own uncontrolled anticipation apparently got the best of me.

Bravo!

Well!

Well! ummmmm

Well! errrrrrrrr

I ummmmmmm don't - I mean - I usually don't like domination stories. I feel VERY VERY strongly about caring and loving - and pain DOES NOT - BIG - CAPITALIZED - NOT - enter into it. But I like this story. I mean I REALLY like this story. I can't wait for the end. (another little pet peeve - I prefer to know in advance how long a story is before I get so deeply into it that the author has me totally at his/her mercy - as you do now - GRRRRRR)

- Well thought out
- Well crafted characters
- Well written
- Well - GET ON WITH IT - I would like wery much to read the rest of the story before another year passes us by (hee hee hee)

sincerely,

HER