Very good! I liked!
Kisses.
Silvia.

My imagination may be slow today, but I do not understand the sentence that comprises paragraph one.

Paragraph two: Why would you name your house “Paul?” (At least that seems to be the way the sentence reads.)  This is a long paragraph setting the stage for action (and background for many errors): If all of Carl’s gang are at least six inches tall, I don’t see the nature of the problem. Who is Larie? I’m pretty sure he isn’t Carl’s girl friend, but a member of the gang usually answering to the name Larry. If Larie is in fact a girl, we understand why she is able to teach Carl about putting on pantyhose. If Larie is actually Larry, then we have to wonder (inquiring minds, ya know) where he picked us this exotic capability. .........

This big paragraph should be even longer, then subdivided into its own parts (paragraphs).

I haven’t finished reading (I will and just as soon as I ship out these remarks), but this story calls for an old, old refrain heard here so much: Shane needs to enlist someone to edit this effort. It might turn out pretty good (but I have my hesitations about a good ending with master thief known world wide, who lets himself get snookered into a situation like this). “Haste makes waste,” someone said, and I fear it applies here.

And just to prove I’m not all that slow, I know who Carla is, but where in tarnation did Paul come from? Do, do seek some advice and help on this, Shane. You’ve gone to some trouble writing the story; it deserves a reworking (and maybe a new title inasmuch as “A Crime Turned to Love” (I still haven’t read past Paragraph 3) pretty much, I suspect, gives away the idea of the main action.