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Daughters of Venus
by Desiree Jones

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Comment by see pron on 04/19/19
sh8WFC Only  a smiling visitor  here to share the love (:, btw  outstanding design.

Comment by chocopie on 04/15/19
E9zEBo Thanks for sharing this fine post. Very interesting ideas! (as always, btw)

Comment by matzcrorkz on 08/04/14
BwDfa1 Very neat article. Fantastic.

Comment by crorkz on 08/03/14
okHDpl I think this is a real great article post.Much thanks again. Really Great.

Comment by only for 5 dollars on 09/13/13
KMk4Tk Thank you ever so for you article.Really thank you! Keep writing.

Comment by link building on 09/08/13
xOaQlh A round of applause for your article.Really looking forward to read more. Really Cool.

Comment by Buy oem Software on 02/11/12
xCHxk3 I read online (computer problems) positive feedback about your resource. Didnt even believe it, and now saw myself. It turned out that I was not fooled!....

Comment by Michelle on 12/16/04
Hey DJ
Long time, i loved the series and shame that i haven't seen much of it lately, hope everything is okay and hope to see some new parts in the future.

Michelle
xox

Comment by Sarah on 03/06/04
Any more updates on the way, loving the series, keep it up DJ!!!!

Sarah xox

Comment by Arice McQueen on 08/23/03
Truly love this story, and i was able to identify with the main character nicely, being a lifeguard myself and having liking for swimming..

I hope you'll continue the story soon, would love to read more of it.

Arice

Comment by Liz on 05/13/03
Hey loving the story so far, any chance of some more parts in the near future, im itching to find out whats going to happen next....

Comment by Blaine Ellis on 03/26/03
Interesting story, and the writing is not bad, but sometimes the dialogue is a little stilted and just a little unrealistic. Perhaps if you were to use a few more contractions the story might flow somewhat smoother.
Good job otherwise, and please keep it coming.
By the way you indicated that there were other heroes in your world are we going to see and hear what think about your ladies. It would be neat to see how well they could work with others who aren't linked with them Telepathicly.

Comment by jjl98b on 09/13/02
im sorry i coundn't get thought chapter 4 of this story the main reason behind was every thing seems slaped togather the story has no depth and the way the charators reacted seems unrelistic

Comment by WhiteKnightZ on 08/12/02
cool, cool, cool, I really, really loved the story, and hope it will continue soon, Actually, I can't wait, send it over, I want it now ;)

Comment by Willis Brown Sr. on 08/09/02
I liked the story very much.  You are a very good writer.
Hope you get to the next part soon, can't wait to see what
happens next.

I wish I could put my stories to words like you.

Willis Brown Sr.

Comment by ChristyLake on 08/04/02
I like it!

The simplistic and in many places unrealistic dialog actually adds to the simple story line.  The bright but shallow character development still provides enough thickness that the characters can move around one another without slipping out of sight.  

I am interested in how you are going to explain Momma Shannon.  She was born 18 years before the otner 8 Daughters born on the same day.  

Please keep this story going and keep the style, it is perfect for the story.

Comment by Rose2 on 08/02/02
   Welcome back!!  Iguess even Super Heroes have trouble battling Writters Block?  Now the ladies have thier Arche Nemissis, please keep up the good fight.

Comment by funmanc on 02/06/02
i love it i cant wait for the next instalment

Comment by Sally Ann Francis on 11/24/01
I love this fantasy. I hope you can find a way for the girls to have real love and happiness without losing there powers. Thank you, Sally.

Comment by Rose2 on 11/15/01
Wow, this can't be your first story?  Jezzi Belle Stewart already said it again, "Looking forward to the next part".  Part #6 Halloween was a little hard to believe.  Part #7 hints at more Truths to be revieled.

Comment by Jezzi Belle Stewart on 11/04/01
This is an interesting story. How come Poppa John doesn't change to a girl?  That would be interesting since, as he obviously would NOT like it, it would introduce conflict and problems into the story.  In fact I'm surprised the two obnoxious boys weren't changed.  Looking forward to the next part.

Comment by Jezzi Belle Stewart on 11/04/01
This is an interesting story. How come Poppa John doesn't change to a girl?  That would be interesting since, as he obviously would NOT like it, it would introduce conflict and problems into the story.  In fact I'm surprised the two obnoxious boys weren't changed.  Looking forward to the next part.

Comment by aine on 11/04/01
I love the story...but you left me hanging :(...what happens next????Are you going to continue it???? Please!!!??
Aine

Comment by Nora-Adrienne Deret on 10/27/01
Desiree,
You have a winner here.. I enjoyed the first two chapters immensely and cant wait to see what happens to Shannon.. Do we ever find out why she changed??? Do we ever find out why "dad" was so freaked out and mom just handed over the bucks..??? Is there something in their past that could be the cause of this?


Comment by Paula Jutras on 10/26/01
I lost a little interest in the SEX GIVE ME STRENGTH line but other than that I enjoyed it. I hope you get to read my original ADVENTURE OF AMERICAN / DREAMWORLD superhero/heroine story sometime.



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