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Dawn of a New Dave
by Jennifer White

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Comment by Alejandra on 10/02/12
LOVEDD ITTTTTTT!!!!!   I want to see how *Dawn's* parents react when they get home. PLEASE,PLEASE, PLEASE write more!!!!!!!!!!!!


P.S. @ this is me
Get over yourself.  No one pointed a gun at your head and forced you to read this; if you don't like it keep your comments to yourself please.


Comment by this is me on 07/31/12
Exactly, karen could have told the kid she wasn't interested. And that pig sister of his probably knew that michelle didn't like him and she turned him over to her anyway. If estrogen has a tenth the capacity to modify behavior as the authors of these stories indicate he may be experiencing the onset of an overdose of estrogen. Hell those bitches gave him 8 or 10 doses. WHORES!

Comment by julie j on 01/02/05
its an intresting concept of trying to frighten your brother into leaving you &your freinds alone but it back fired it would be interesting to se what his parents reaction would be  when they returned  another part would be better well written

Comment by Jimmy on 12/26/03
I thought the whole idea was for just a girls night.  So why the boys showing up?  If Karen's boyfriend was going to show up he and Karen could have just told Dave that they were in love with each other.

You have to keep the plot together or the whole story will fall apart and seem trite in the end.



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