qDhnWn You can definitely see your enthusiasm in the work you write. The world hopes for even more passionate writers like you who are not afraid to say how they believe. Always go after your heart.

7h7t7v Many thanks for sharing this great article. Very interesting ideas! (as always, btw)

1SQBCF Awesome post. Cool.

There is enough unreality in this story to not upset me with injustice. The guy was raped innumerable times which CANNOT be considered just desserts to anyone except a serial rapist. He mentioned a word which was appropo to all the other characters in this story and that is hypocritical. If you don't like how someone is you do yourself a disservice to be like them. All they did was demonstrate that they could be like him.

good storie like to be her more more

wow

this is about the story "Abducted and Transformed into a Human Barbie Doll.
 The store was very good and very detailed descriptions. Hope to read more stories,
Dyan

susan are u from pensacola florida. great story

a good payback for an arogant slob what a set up&to now live with the consequences

I loved your story. I felt myself being drawn into it and wishing it was really possible to be Susan. Keep up the good work.

I loved your story. I felt myself being drawn into it and wishing it was really possible to be Susan. kepp ing a good work.

Erotic sexy story where the husband deserved to be turned into Susan.  I enjoyed it very much and didn't think the flaws were as serious as the other reviewers did.

Keep up the good work.

SS

good story poor ending how could video be used if wife and everyone at work new plus the drugs from tibet  tsk this has miliage if only a few people knew about it good all the same  

I'm sorry hon, I know it's your first story here, but I do want what follows to be taken as constructive.

You have a reasonable idea for a story here, but you have totally rushed through it. At the start the pace was fair enough as you developed the background of the main character. However once the 'action' got going, we are steamrollered through it and in the space of a few hours a chauvinistic heterosexual male becomes a sissy cocksucker who loves a man?  I'm afraid even my fantasies can't let me suspend my belief enough for this.  Too rushed honey.

I'm afraid also that the spelling, grammar and punctuation are extremely poor.  Spelling mistakes are too numerous to mention as are grammatical errors.  And there simply is hardly any punctuation to talk about. Sentences run together without any separation, the dialogue is not punctuated at all.

This is not being pedantic, but if you want readers to enjoy your stories better, you have to make it a pleasure for them to read the story. This was too much like hard work.  

I suggest getting a proofreader/editor to check your work, but realistically you would need to do a lot more work on it yourself before it is even at the stage where a proofreader would take it on.

Please take these comments in the manner they are offered - that is to encourage you to greater and better things.

Love,

Jenny