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Deeper
by Jennifer White

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Comment by Puzzled on 02/06/05
The name says it all. In reading this little story, I became highly puzzled. The man's name was never mentioned and when he had sex with Courtney, what happened to his body???? All of a sudden, he/she was alone on the bed experiencing a huge orgasm. No mention of his body leaving th ehouse, bedroom or even the bed. Mr. Ram mentioned that it had a dream like quality to it but even in a dream I have never had anything like this happen. No outcry about his disappearance was in the story, where in reality, she would have been suspect in his disappearance. This may have been fiction but sometimes reality has to have a toehold on a story to help bite back the bitter pill of momentous occurances such as this.

Jerrie

Comment by Paula on 09/09/03
a wonderful story. A blissful ending

Comment by Eric on 09/09/03
I agree with Mr Ram it has a dream like quality to it. I enjoyed it. Still it would have been nice to know did, as I suspect she become him?

Comment by Janie on 09/09/03
I'm sorry, but I didn't understand what was going on. A bunch of things happened, but it is never explained why or how.

Comment by Mr. Ram on 09/09/03
A good short one. There was a dreamlike quality to this story. I thought that the detailed description of Courtney's apartment was unnecessary and the story could have been even tighter with less detail given to the apartment.

I would have liked a little background about why this happened, but that's just me.

Thanks,

Mr. Ram



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