An effective and enjoyable fantasy. Well written overall. Thankyou.

zP1xWp Muchos Gracias for your article post.Thanks Again. Awesome.

Ah yes, nicely put, evryeone.

great story,some details were lacking but more than made up for in tne results.the description of the cabin girl servicing her captain was so erotic.i had to change my panties.thank you.

an interesting story a lesson learnt the hard way well done

----- Well done, especially for a first story, and I enjoyed reading it. You took a different tack with the setting, which was especially nice to sea. I agree that the ending didn't have a punch, but considering what would obviously 'aft to follow, and the mental state of the protagonist, it worked for me.
Next time out, I think I would try a little more physical detail for mood, and to get the reader "into" the story. A few more little details about the boat, the day, the sea, the guys, etc. could be amast without adding too much length to the tale.
I hope you keep writing. I'll look forward to your next story.

Thanks,
RJMcD

Ahoy Matey!  Your story really 'shivered my timbers'.

This was a wonderful first effort.  At least, first for this site.

I loved Luke and was pleased to see how you managed to get Lukewarm.

The use of the drug to transform him was something I usually don't appreciate.  However, you made it seem quite natural.  It came across a little like the judicious use of alcohol to find a 'beautiful' companion in a bar after last call.

The premise was sound.  You might have spent a little more time developing background so that we could buy into the story right at the gangplank.

The probable 'computer files' explanation would have been more believable had "Rick" 'dis-clothesed' why he was so sure Luke would be their plaything.

Personally I got a little confused by the mandates, (Although I love the use of that particular word in the context you used it.)  It would have been more pleasing had Rick given similar 'mandates' that Luke embellished upon in his stupor.

It would have been pleasing to see the future somewhat laid out.  Although the ending was okay... it did just sort of peter out.  (You're not the only one that can pun around.)

I would give the plot a B and the craftsmanship (another pun!) a B-.  Not bad Swabbie!

Love to you for the effort.

Jill

loved your story. as for me i am a crossdresser & dress up as a woman 24/7. i love dressing up as a woman with my toenails painted red & my fingernails painted red along with me having on my mini dress & having my lips painted a bright red. dressing up sexy is my goal & to be able to meet a man of my dreams & be able to please him as a woman