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Domestication of a Parisian Bourgeois
by Monica Graz

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Comment by Judith Weaver on 08/29/12
Wonderful story - no sexual overtones, just the transformation of a male into a plain, common, lowly chairwoman who wouldn't warrant a second glance from anyone. As (s)he goes about her daily chores.  I especially love the very public exposure working at the airport.  I personally doubt that he would be able - or even want to return to his previous lifestyle.
I wish it could happen to me, it is something I dream of!
Judith.

Comment by Maid Lisa on 12/07/05
This is one of the best stories on this site. Great story, great buildup, and I was lost in the story from start to finish.

Please continue the story as this is leading upto an amazing climax..

Comment by CHRIS on 11/03/05
As Robin wrote, I found the 'la blouse de nylon' (blousenylon org) site, but I couldn't find the stories?
anyone know the full eight stories, please let us know , plz, plz

Comment by robin on 09/28/05
The full story was published over a period of time on the forum of the website 'la blouse de nylon' (blousenylon org) and has another 8 chapters. The ones published on his storysite are part of the english translation

Comment by maid stephany on 02/20/05
Very hot story Miss Monica. I was lost in it and regretted coming to the end. Unlike a previous comment, I thought that the wife would come back to her property looking dominant and as beautiful as ever, discover her ex husband more feminized than ever by Violetta, questions him as a Mistress would do a maid (as if she had expected him to be one) and with no explanantion as to why she is there, bounce Violetta out of her apartment in front of 'Maria' and reclaim it.

Just before the much feminized Maria who is now corseted and in full uniform can show her relief at her wife's return and thinks he is going to reclaim his original place with her once again; the wife orders him to stay dressed as a maid 'for now', as there are a few things to do, starting with bringing her bags up to apartment. Before 'she' rushes to do her bidding and shows how pleased she is to be with her once again, the wife asks 'Maria' if she receives discipline from Violetta. The conversation was electric.

The wife had changed into a more businesslike Mistress and has him behave exactly like Violetta's Marie, like any maid who will have to work and gives 'her' a proposistion with papers, a contract and a new identity that is impossible for him to escape from in his femme state...will he sign, was it all a setup?

Just as 'she' is reeling from what has taken place and wondering about where it is all going to take 'her', there's a ring at the door. 'Answer that Marie and invite him into the lounge, we have an important guest!'and do not forget to curtsey.

Just an idea or two!

               Respectfully,

                           maid stephany.

Comment by Maid Lover on 12/13/04
Absolutley fabulous! The tortured voluntary surrender of status and power is reminiscent of some of JO199's best aristocracy turnabout works. This is a best of genre work! Please keep the degrading sex a heavy component but never lose the sweet tone of social humilaition.

More please!

Comment by Mysti on 11/17/04
    This story works for me on several levels. First, there's the idea of someone with power and money gradually being reduced to the level of powerlessness of an immigrant cleaning lady (hard to beat that for being dommed). Also, this is the best expression I've seen of the idea that the best way to get passable is to be essentially invisible. Face it- "I became a beautiful woman who caused heads to turn" just won't do it. If you  really don't want to be read, then become as nondescript as possible- again, what better way than being a cleaning lady? This brings me to my only real problem with the story. I like the wearing of the shabby  women's clothes and forcing him to speak in broken French with a Portuguese accent,  and the description of turning his long blonde hair into a short brown perm was great. However- all due  respect, Monica- but there must be  something done about his face. I'd like the story to tell us about how makeup is used to complete the transformation-I don't think he's completely passable without it. Please put that into the next installment.

Comment by Ashley on 08/13/04
No more?????? So sad:(

Comment by jothesmois50 on 08/04/04
This is a really well developed story.  I love the pacing and the underreliance upon nasties in favor of true submissive maid stuff.  Good show.  But ... Where is part 3?  Gotta keep this one up.

Comment by DM on 08/04/04
this is one of my all-time favourite stories. Monica, I am glad that you added several paragpahs to the version posted on Bea's site ages ago, but are you planning to write a follow-up? Such a brilliant story simply can't be left unfinished.

Comment by maid_annelies on 07/22/04
Thank you very much for this wonderfull story. I have read it before but I couldn't find it again.

Bye from Holland.

Comment by Cordellian on 07/19/04
Monica,

This is an excellent story - one of the very best I've read on this story site. The attention to detail, hints of conspiracy, and the slow transformation of the main character's life is just about perfect. Very, very good indeed. I'm really looking forward to the enxt installment.

Comment by Ashley on 07/18/04
So hot! I'm aching for the next installment.

Comment by Tammy on 07/18/04
I wish Violetta would be disgraced by her name and decide to sitch names with Jean Marie then disappear only Jean's wife comes back only he looks like Violetta, thus she treats him like Violetta not realizing he is really Jean.

Comment by Mysti on 07/13/04
      This is hot! Voluntary fem is the way to go! Love the way this is being set up,  including the predictions about how he's going to look- especially the hair. Please keep it up.



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