Fucking disgusting story.

Pure abuse.

Both of this boys parents should be dropped into a wood-chipper.

xzNsah Thank you ever so for you article.Much thanks again. Much obliged.

Very good I hope you write more.Very good indeed.thank you. Ernie

SiPnGI Great article post.Really thank you! Really Great.

What a lovely , warm, story with a difference.Thank you so much.

WOW Peay! You're a great, great, great, great..................writer!
I loved your story very much. Keep writing.
Kisses.
Silvia.

I enjoyed the story very much.  It was a little different from a lot of the other stories, and better than I expected.  Please write more with the same quality.

Kelly

Many thanks for a very unusual story. Not the one I thought I was going to get from the opening paragraphs but all the better for that.

I thought that the storyline up until the 'accident' lacked a little in credibility, but after that, Whow! The sort of detail that the writer goes into suggests a very personal knowledge, which if true, is frightening, even f the story is transposed from a differing theme. If it is not then that just adds to the talent of this author.
Personally, it seems to me to have the authority of someone who has been here, and I would love to know the original circumstances and events that generated this story.

This story was so refreshingly different from the norm. It had a ring of reality about it which I found quite gripping. The rigid unacceptance of Doug seemed much more likely in a 'forced' scenario than the usual reluctance but inevitable acceptance of being feminised against the will. The final happiness seems to come from his acceptance of his condition. A short and racy tale but nevertheless a tale grounded in plausibility.

Thankyou,
  Chantelle

This is an excellent story that I almost missed, the description does not do it justice while this is one of the better stories here, good job!

I thought the beginning of this story was so full of child abuse, and it was just another call me master story. But as I got into it, I saw it was just another man being his usualmacho self, and if you're not much of a boy you might as well be a girl. Well, I was really blown away when Bethany Lynn met her foster parents, and I saw ready acceptance, and go at your own pace, and even though there was conflict in this story, that conflict didn't come from the foster parents and they even accepted their foster daughter's lesbianism...but wait a sec here. I thought that families like this didn't exist. At least that what everybody who reads my stories say...hmmm, is this a double standard?

From the time Doug/Emily was taken to the sanitarium, through meeting nice friends, to being accepted by her foster parents, I enjoyed the story. And as for the conflict with the boys at school, Doug/Bethany was able to easily overcome it. Oh that is so right, stories like this are so unrealistic that it just doesn't happen like this.

Well I am here to say it does happen like this, and I for one while not violent, did have my backers. Yes there are transgendered that are accepted by friends, and family. I liked the whole story, because it showed that tragedy can be overcome with will power and strength of mind. Thank you for sharing.

Love & hugs,
Barbara

intersting hard paced fast but good story welldone

Lovely Story, Peay.   I very much enjoyed it.
Thank you.

Sarah Lynn Morgan

Excellent story which doesn't keep going over the same old ground - oh dear, an accident; should have been a girl, now I'm happy.  As at least one other person said, if someone had done this to me, I would be really pissed.  Very real ring to it.  (Now for my prejudices, need more clothes descriptions!)  The emotions and feelings were very real to me.

 Well done .....   good story   well worth the time to read it...

it shows the extent of things that can happen ...
         beutiful ending   loved it ....

***** 5 star rating  
                          :)  rone

I found the story compelling, but dry or sterile and lacking any emotional attachment to the character... I was drawn along by my desire to see the ending so I kept reading... At time it took an effort not to skip ahead.

It was better than I could ever write... but as a reader I can say you would benefit from a re-edit to help the reader forge a bond with Dougie.

A very enjoyable story.  

One though I had was why Doug didn't describe himself as a girl suffering from gender dysphoria?  He seems to be very intelligent and likely to have come to that conclusion if he had done much research.  It seems to fit him perfectly, a boy's mind with a girl's body (after the surgery).

Thank you and please keep writing.

it a very good story. i hope make more of this good story.
this could being this artist back to storysite.

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It is about time that a story is written where the victim is a bit more realistic about the transformation. His struggle with overcoming his anger was absolutely wonderful. If this had happened to me, I too would have wanted revenge.
This was a very well-written story. Keep up the great work!

it was a good story. It didnt seem dull anywhere. I do think he forgave his mother too easy. She helped the father and she shouldn't have. It was her responsibility to protect her child. instead of protecting him she did what she knew was wrong and aided her husband in harming her child. Thats unforgivable. she clearly knew better

On the whole this as very well written.  I was lost for the first screenful or so as I know nothing about baseball.  (Over here we call it rounders and only young girls play it :o))

As hinted at bu Suna I would have preferred a little more dialogue in places but overall the balance is about right.

Bits I loved -

the discussion with the judo instructor

the references to the three bears whilst shopping

the confusion the foster parents had over violence.

Reading your take on the forced-plot I noticed a couple things i've not seen before, dad showing up with all the necessary paperwork and the off-screen work to get revenge for the way the System flushed the case.

I found parts a little 'dry', perhaps not enough speaking between characters with a lot of 'this happened' sort of lines.

You chose an excellent way to exit the tale, leaving the actual scene for the imagination.

Overall, I enjoyed your mind's eye view of the story.

Excellent story. Justice was indeed served to Dougie's parents. Since Dougie/Beth was still mentally male, although physically female, it's no surprise that he/she was still attracted to girls. This is a really fascinating story, because the transformation was not wanted,and your hero/heroine really had to decide how he/she was going to adjust/evolve.  Although the extreme circumstances you describe are perhaps not entirely "realistic," once the situation is set up, everything flows logically.Is this the first story you've ever written? Are you planning to do more? Are you involved professionally with writing work? I'm a free lance music journalist, but have never tried fiction. Free free to write me at the "hippiecheer" e-mail address.
Peace-- hippie cheerleader.