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Education
by Jennifer White

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Comment by Christin Dresser on 04/23/12
I thought that what was happening to Conner was a bit corny as he put on each of Brianna's cloths. Then the story got a bit more interesting when Brianna showed up along with Sophia and Madeline.
Brianna waved her hand and Alexis became a slut. When she returned from doing half of the boys in the dorm, Briana gave Conner his mind back.
However, Conner couldn't prove otherwise that he is Alexis Anne O'Malley a girl and has always been a girl and will always be a girl.
I would have liked to hear his attempt to prove who he really was by making a call back home to his family.
Could the conversation go something like this?
Conner: “Hello Mom.”
Mom: “Oh Alexis. Hi honey how are you?”
Connor: “No Mom it’s me Connor.”
Mom: “Connor?”
Connor: “Yes Mom, Connor.”
Mom: “Alexis dear are you alright?”
Connor: “No Mom I’m not. This girl at my dorm waved her hand and changed everything in my room and turned me into a slut.”
Mom: “I don’t know what you’re saying honey. Here talk to Daddy; I’ll put him on the phone.”
Daddy: “Alexis, Mom says you’re hysterical, that you’re not making a sense.”
Connor: “I’m trying to explain Dad.”
Daddy: “Explain what Alexis? Did somebody hurt you?”
Connor: “Yes, err no.”
Daddy: “Mom says that some boy called you a slut. Did this boy take advantage of my little Girl?”
Connor: “No, err yes. One boy ripped my panties when he pulled them off.”
Daddy: “I’ll kill the SOB!”
Connor: “Dad!”
Daddy: “Alexis, stay right there. Daddy’s getting in the car.”
Connor: “Dad!”
Daddy: “I’m coming to get you princess. Daddy’s going to bring his baby girl right home!”
CLICK
Delicious!

Comment by Ruvell on 12/13/11
People nrmoally pay me for this and you are giving it away!

Comment by Early June on 08/03/06
This was a cleverly contrived story.  I particularly liked the seductions.  By that means, he was doing all the conversions to himself through his innate weaknesses.  I wonder if that girl could travel from campus to campus, or to wherever there is trouble that could use her talents.
Gigglz--- I could picture her converting a complete destroyer crew Leaving the boat in the capable hands of its all female crew.  Boy, would next shore leave be exciting.
 Well done, as we have come to expect from you. This was light hearted and fun to read.  Thank you for sharing this with us.

Comment by Krissy L on 07/18/06
Loved the way you developed your story .. familiar elements yet suspencefully developed with new twists. Cool! :)



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