i stopped stopped reading where donna slapped josh cause she was treating him like trash!! they were playing for over 3 months & no sex? she could have been out with every guy in town with her making josh eat her out which could have been full of some other guys semen!! they had no commitment hence no infedility?? always live by the golden rule- money or not!!!

an intreststin well described story very much a bondage &domination saga and also getting paid for it what wa way to go

A very good start, and an interesting tale.  However, I feel that this is an incomplete story; you should have explained how the hero/ine came to be in the cafe.  What happened after the end of Josh's contract ? Is s/he still Donna's slave, or is she now a dom herself ?

A good second section for this novel would be to switch the POV to the classmate, and examine her life.  Is she content in her marriage ?  Having recognised Josh (or whatever she is called now) will she work it out ?  Perhaps an obsession to find out, involving following Josh and learning about the alternate lifestyle she lives.

It's a good long story but I couldnt help feeling our young stud accepts his new feminine role in life a little too easily. There were a few times when I thought he would freak out but he didnt and that sort of spoiled it for me. He just took it in his stride. This is body changing hormone treatment we are talking about. Up until that point I really enjoyed it with good dialogue and narration.

Wow. What a great first story. 'Lots of detail and great characters, inventive sex and short-story length to boot. I can't wait to see more of your work.

It definitely left me with wet panties. Brava.