not easy to read not my scene sorry

     Sorry, but this was just too hard a read. Endlessly repetitive words, phrases, and sentences. About 12 K in, I started saying to myself  "Get to the point, George!" I get the feeling that George is trying to imitate the style of some other author whom he admires (I have my suspicions, but won't name mames). My advice: Be yourself! This is  a potentially good story, but get a no-nonsense editor who won't hesitate to pare the story down by (my estimate) two thirds, to produce something much more readable.

Very detached yet intriguing, almost spellbinding writing - promising if somewhat muddled technique.  My major disappointment, you never returned us to get a taste of what now was inside Scorpio's head.

Please don't be discouraged as we are all works-in-progress here. (HUG).  Next time, give us a narrator with a more empathetic voice so we can relate better.  Most budding authors find it difficult to create distance.  You have thatg part down, now give us something to get close to, by contrast, please.

Love & Huggs,
Sheryl S.

I try not to judge a book by the cover. When I saw the title of this story I had a bad feeling and was right that it wasn't my type of story as I prefer mostly sweet tales.  Mainly my taste in what I like to read I guess. Hopefully your next story will be more to my interest. Keep up writing.

I am sorry I thought this would be a nice story but for being a pagan /wiccan myself and read over and over how my beliefs are consider an occult in your standards really burns me and not all that in there even happens where we allow members to get stone and all especially durring a meeting!  I feel you should have done better homework before ever even thinking about putting something like this up.  It is stuff like this that causes people to fear and want to harm people that believe simliar to the way that I do! This should be edited and resubmitted with some type of disclaimar to it  Cause it is very offensive to suggest That everyone in my religion is a part of an Occult with your standards!