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Family Time
by Ellie Dauber

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Comment by Aardvark on 10/17/04
Nice tale.

Long enough to make the point, but no longer, and a cute twist at the end.

Aardvark

Comment by anonymousOne on 10/16/04
Ellie Dauber,

You contribute quite a few pieces and take a lot of risks in your writing. I guess I am saying that you seem to have a lot of fun doing different things all of the time. Your story "Teaching Sally" is one of my all time favorites on the net. This story reminds me of Teaching Sally with its nice pace and feel; with characters that never quite figure out what is going on yet think that they are all so clever; and, in the end become good people by learning to feel concerned for others where initially they only thought of themselves. It is nicely crafed, humorous, and suspenseful because it kept me guessing. Thank you for writing this piece and sharing it.

Sincerely,

anonymousOne

Comment by Pippa K. on 10/15/04
Nice little magical-transformation story.  Very well written, with good dialog, and just enough eeriness to keep an edge on it the whole way.  Like an original Twilight Zone episode, with an ending to fit.



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