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Forbidden Delight
by Eliza Claire

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Comment by juliej on 06/11/04
a quick story that has far reaching implications for the freind who had eaten the chocolates instead of the intended victim still it all works out ok in the end good writing and story

Comment by SassySue on 01/24/04
Nice short story with a unique outcome, sort of O'Henryish.  I agree with Jezzi that the boys handled the transformation maturely.

My only quibble is that having someone else proofread before posting might have led to elimination of some minor errors, such as using "compass" instead of "campus."  Otherwise, this was an entertaining story and I look forward to reading more.

SS


Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 01/22/04
Really a new and different story.  Congrats.  I thought the two "men" were pretty mature about how they delt with the change, not ranting and raving at Jill, but asking her help, opting to both become complete women rather than continue half and half.  I can see the three becoming good girlfriends.



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