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The Fourth Sister
by Jennifer White

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Comment by Jill on 02/15/09
You are a freak!
Stop to write, you don't know how to do it!

Comment by Davenport on 12/11/03
You know, you can argue that this story illustrates perfectly the callowness and amorality and selfishness of women, if I wished to paint a brush using stereotype. Three girls conspired to entrap an innocent man who was in love with one of them --Carina, steal his mind and body, and use him...now her... to lure an ex-boyfriend back to Carina whom the transformed man trusted with his love. And all this was done so Carina could procreate with her ex...and she didn't demonstrate she really was in love with him, anyway. Carina and sibs are the epitome of selfishness, forcing another to sacrifice for their gain.

I could use this behavior to blast the fairer sex, but I know that most women, the vast majority of women aren't like that.

Comment by Elizabeth Rees on 08/03/03
So what do you call it when your personality, your very mind, is destroyed and replaced by something else? Murder. And I find that very unpleasant.

Comment by Paula on 07/26/03
love the way the character protest and how the changes slowly happen

Comment by Sue on 07/25/03
Nice and with a nice slow build up of the mental changes.  Don't see many of these "slow mental change" stories too often.  Thanks for sharing, Jennifer, and hope to see some more of this type.

Comment by NDC on 07/25/03
To bad this turned into just another nice guy mentaly murdered by heartless women story.



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