Poor Alistair! Of course people reading this story would be delighted to be him (secretly or otherwise). But his Mum and sister are pretty mean. Dress him "en femme" at home but make him wear short trouser for school?

I just reread this after 7 years and I stand by my 2003 comments. his actions - or lack of action - are completely at odds with how you set him up at the very beginning as a rough and tumble footballer. No resistance to this bogus punishment, not even any thought of it?  No way.

I think at some piont though that today kids will leave there home if they put up with this, That or as sadley seen today suicide if they had to put up with that much teasing everyday

so hes gone from an a student to failing in one step. as he hasen't pass a grade in 14 yrs,he's 28 still in school,living at home an still dressing it dosent bother him much anymore as he has a bit of money now that he sells a little bit of tar or  white to the football players or anyone with money. he finily got his sister hooked she works for him now.his mother wonders what went wrong but just knows he'll snap out of it any time now..

great story more please part 2 comming i hope

i have reread this story again its brilliant i always when i read this i wish it was me you cannot imagine how i have felt to wear this sort of clothing all the time its not fair that the girls have far better clothing than boys i wish thiss had been me but no luck please write more to this story its brilliant

   This is where I left home only it was at fifteen and I never went home again forty years now and I don,t miss them at all...

this is close to my story ....  Thanks  Rone :)

a great story so far please when will you do the 2 nd part it a long wait so far

Sarah I felt it was a good story with characters I can Identify with.  My mother and I were always at odds over the way I treated my clothes as a boy.  And she tried several embarassing experiments to get me to conform to her standards.  I would like to read more about this young man's further developments.  Please give us a treat.

a great story i felt that this was a good example of how not to cross youur mother or sister what a way to go and at school as well without any warning all the girls will get their revenge i feel alister is in for a lot more stick &hassle pleasec write the next part asap thankyou

Sally Dear,

Let me get this straight. Athletic boy of 14 tears trousers. He is punished by Mom to wear female attire at home and school. Big sister and her friends are more than vocal participants. Boy and mom initially go to Headmaster's office. Boy remains silent and doen.t protest. Mom leaves. He doesn't immediately go to police to report abuse. This is beyond fiction, dear. This little scenario has absolutely no credibility to it whatsoever. Stop this little charade while you still have some credibility.

Pretty much the same observation as everyone else here, but is there really no one else among all his acquaintances, teachers, family members, etc., who isn't completely antagonistic?  It seems to me it's going to be hard to set up a bad-boy-to-good-girl story without any sympathetic characters.

I loved Saturday Girl, but I have to agree with these criticisms, Sally Steph.  It's too cut and dried, too obvious without some extenuating circumstances on which you have yet to elaborate. If he really wants to do this it should be made clear.  Aside from this, I enjoy your stuff a lot.  Boy, could you do a great boss-becomes-secretary number.  Take the comments here in the sincere spirit they're intended.

With no background given except ruining his clothes, the treatment he is getting is out of line except in the writer's fictional world. And as others have pointed out, his lack of resistance is pushing the boundry of belief a bit strongly. More background detail is needed. Otherwise the writing is fairly good.  

the girls beat me to it no resistance would have been more plausible if he was made to wear skirt inside house no 14 yer old footie fan would toerate it.I think in a real situation he would have left the school premises as quickly as possible even to the point of going to see head himself telling him his mother was abusing him (which she is)14 year olds are clued up. have fun writing x linzi....

I agree with Jezzi why isn't he fight or at least plotting to do something? Early in the punishment you have him thinking that if his dad was still at home he'd never let this happen. So why does he just eccept it? What does or what will him mother do to him that has him so frighten that he'd risk the humiliation of dressing as a girl without a fight? The kid is a jock and at his age trying very hard to be a man something his mother and sister  both don't seem to want to see happen. I fear for him because I feel that his bitch of a sister will not be happy untell she has totally humiliated and distroyed him as a boy. I'd like to see him overcome both his mother and sister in this and become stronger person because of it. If that meens being a girl? Then be the best damn girl on his terms.

Mary

This kid is fourteen years old and a football player, and he makes NO resistance at all, doesn';t even think about it???  I would think he would at least be plotting some way to beat this, even if only leaving in the middle of the night.  I would I think some explanation of why he doesn't even think of resistance is necessary.   On the good side, at least he's not whining and crying about it.  Given that there is a reason he doesn't rebel, then I think he should either go for a stoic acceptance - do exactly what he's told by his mom, but never act ashamed or humiliated, as that's what sis, especially, wants, and never smile; let everyone know it's a punishment, he hates it, but he's putting up with it because  ___  - here we need that reason again.  (As an alternative, maybe he should try to be the best girl he can be, and REALLY steal his sister and her friends' friends & boyfriends away!)