please write more !

Stephen J

Both parts of the story are very nice and very thought out.  I enjoyed the ability to read em both.  Although you were told that the stories wer just the right size by one person and more on the first one, I do think that they are both a bit short not nearly as short as a lot of stories tend to be but still short in my opinion look foward to part 3

Interesting twist that he would want to stay a girl. Normally the person become a girl to find a girl that like his male self. The person he became obvious a altered reality genie thing like the wizard in SRU does. look forward pt 2. Good story length not too short or long

What happened to the 'real' Hayley? Were everyone's memories of her created by the genie? Seems like a lot of work, particularly when you take into account the headache of creating all the supporting documents like birth certificate, school transcript, her parents' tax returns, and photographs in various friends' and family members' albums. Quite a hassle. Easier to usurp Hayley's body so the narrator can take over her life. So where is the 'real' Hayley? Maybe she wished to be a thirty-year-old man so she could escape the pressures of being sixteen, pretty, and popular. Unlikely, but not impossible.
 That aside, this a very well-written story. Hayley Winters has a pleasing way with words and should continue writing, if only to answer the questions raised by this one.