You have had some positive and negative comments to your story but what must be taken into account is that Nick/Nicole in your story wanted to become a girl. Let her celebrate because at least she had the chance to achieve her dreams( although I was unsure abbout her intentions before enrolling in the feminisation school). If only it was a simple for other boys/teenagers/young men to achieve feminity. Thanks.

What a shock, to be a boy in Junior High and suddenly find out that you're supposed to be a girl - or so says the answers to a Personality Inventory.
Or, for some of us, could it really be a shock? perhaps a relief?
The story kept my attention all the way thru, so it must be a good one.

A good story however improbable. I would have liked you to have continued the story to the point where Nicole  had her first sexual escapade. Thanks.

First off, they obviously weren't as progressive as they said they were. I mean they told them that they could be lesbians, but in reality they had something else in mind. I don't know if you could actually change someone's sexual orientation, I don't believe you can. Scientists have been experimenting with that for years, I even know of several of those cases and just how far they failed. Still, the kewl thing about writing is, is that it doesn't have to be totally factual and it can still be good. I still wanted everyone in that hospital to die though, at least if the kids were truly being forced against their will. If instead it was a place for true TG's not attempted forced ones, then I guess we can let them live. But they still deserve to be punished for the hypnosis stuff they did to the poor children. And the forced straight orientation, they can't even have children so what difference would it make if they were lesbian, bi, or straight?

Good story, as good as Janet Lynn or Tigger. One question though, Can a boy really develop girl parts are is this fantasy?

my last comment stands more could be added to this great story well done

the story has a good theme to it his father behaves roughly to his son but i suppose that only to be expected i feelthat the panties were put in on purpose as if his mother wanted a daughter its a good story and could go further

Jennifer White may not realize it (and then again, she may) but she has tapped into a whole other level of ritual abuse and mind control survivor lore. A great many people (mostly women) who were involved in MKULTRA (and you can read about this on the Mind Control Forum, the CKLC interviews--see Claudia Mullins's interview and Colin Ross's interviews) speak of being abused and brainwashed by a Dr. Green who has been identified as Dr. Wilson Greene from Ft.Detrick, MD. (also Google on the term Greenbaum Speech). The sort of coercion that Jennifer describes would not be far fetched for a MKULTRA facility (Nor would New Outlooks, for that matter). So Jennifer, you may have tapped into a level of realism that few readers are aware exist.
all the best
MKAT

Some of this was very amusing-- particularly the class on dating boys. But the logic pf most of it escapes me. Does he not want to be a girl? If so, why is he envying the nurse on his first visit to the doctor? And what kind of a lesson is the father trying to teach him/her? And what about the final scene, where she meets the girl from her old school and expects her to remember her as Nicole? Has she forgotten about her life as a boy? If so, how is she telling the story? I'm sorry, but I found it all very confusing.

Jennifer, I love your stories, but not this one.  For three reasons.

a. It's too far-fetched to have a glimmer of realism past the first 25%.  

b. It borders on child abuse in some ways with the involuntary transition.

c. The ending is one of the most pat and corny ones in transgender fiction.  Sounds like one of those tired old Janet Stickney themes that you can predict half way through the first sentence of graf one.

To wit: You do magnificent work, and you can do way better than this.

Interesting the doctor insisting he like boys instead of insisting  he doesn't want to go through with it.  The protests were a good touch. I cam glad new she seemed happy in the end.