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Girlfriends
by Vickie Tern

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Comment by Skipper on 05/05/06
Vickie, I started reading your work seriously just a few weeks ago, although I had read some much earlier. I love all that I have read. But your preference to just tell the story of how the guy gets changed, and nothing of life thereafter, leaves me empty sometimes. Girlfriends is one of those. I wanted the un-named hero(ine) to have a greater reward than you allowed. I came to like Tracy, too, so I wanted her to be a part of that reward with our heroine. I have taken it upon myself to write another chapter to reflect where I would like to see the story go.

But I'm no writer, and I wanted to ask if you could send me an email with your thoughts about this request. I'd like to send you what I have written, and ask you to rewrite it in your own style, keeping the same track with what I submit. I would expect you to add more dialog, more detailed events, and the like, but keeping the same general outcome for the heroine. Could you do that? It would carry your story only a bit farther than you did to give the guy a more satisfying reward.

Comment by Broni on 02/13/05
What a story!

Broni

Comment by Bobbie on 02/12/05
Thoroughly enjoyed part I  but as I neared the end of part II,
I began to have a little problem with the mind set
of what had been a happy camper,who slightly
in my mind became a victim.
Sorry just my feelings.
Delightfull reading over all

Comment by D on 02/05/05
I WAS WET THE ENTIRE READ. EXCELLENT. SPACING WAS TIGHT, NOT DRUG OUT WAITNG FOR ACTIVITY BUT PLENTY OF JUICY STORY. I LOVED IT



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