Not exactly an exciting, action filled story. Most readers would find browsing through a clothing catalogue to be more thrilling.

In part 1 Callie is with his cousins for three weeks.  About a week into the three weeks he gets his ears pierced and is told he must wear the starter earrings for the normal six week healing period.  When he returns to his mother there is no mention of his mother's reaction to his earrings.  Since he was his mother's primary model for boy's clothes, his pierced ears and earrings would be a problem for future "boy mode" modeling assignments. In part 2 his earrings are never mentioned.  I would have preferred to read a lot more about the situations he would have run into as a boy model with pierced ears.

Guess Jeff doesn't like capitalism.

I too became bored with all of the clothing descriptions -- the story was fairly interesting, up until the point when the main character's cousins got a hold of him.

My largest complaint, though, (and this is my number one "pet peeve" when it comes to TG and other types of fiction) is all of the product placement. I don't care who makes the makeup, moisturizing cream, tights, etc. that your characters are using. Likewise, I don't care which chain stores your characters buy their dresses from when they are at the mall -- not when these things are not relevant to the story. Claire's is marginally relevant, only because it sounds to be a little more than just a small accessories shop.

Whenever I see all of this product placement in fiction, I wonder how much the author is being paid to $plug$ these manufacturers' garbage. I don't watch commercial television because I don't want to be exposed to all the commercials, and I don't need to see it in what I read, either. It doesn't add any realism, it just feels like brand consciousness and Madison Ave. brainwashing, gone berserk.

I am curious about the story, first you talk about Callie being used a a girl model for her Mother and "she" is wearing girls clothing then suddenly you are writing as if Callie has never worn such clothing. So which is it? Overall, I did find the story interesting, but a little boring at times when all the explanations were going on. Please continue the story thread so we can see how Callie and her friends manage plu more return visits with her cousins.
Luv, J-Lynn

When I started reading part 2 I was looking forward to the trip out of town and the beach and pool. But again you spent too much time with tedious clothing descriptions and not enough interesting action. You never did say anything about those excursions.

Part 1 was told in first person with Callie relating the story. In part 2 you changed to third person with someone else narrating and Ashley doing most of the talking.

A young boy enjoying himself on a visit with his female relatives is a very realistic story line and has been used a lot. With good narration and description of his adventures it can be a very sweet and enjoyable story.

Excellent and thoroughly enjoyed the story and this happened to me with my two cousin sisters

I too enjoyed the Claire's visit. I my ears pierced there (twice) and have purchased lots of earrings. I enjoy browsing through their racks.

The clothing descriptions were getting tedious. Please write about Callie's visit later in the summer, but since she has now learned all about bieng a girl (clothes, makeup, etc.) spend more time with her going out and doing things with her cousins and less on the clothes. It will make a more interesting story.

A real pleasure to read. The description of getting her ears pierced at Claires brought back the memory of getting my ears pierced there. Thanks.