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This was amongst the most beautiful stories I've read.  I would have loved to be able to join Pamela in the Club, they were all such nice girls.  Ok, so Pamela met some unpleasant types as well, but fiction would be uninteresting without them.  Personally I wouldn't mind servicing Mr Morris in exchange for some of his generosity!  I'd probably like doing it as well.

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Thought provoking and sure to evoke emotions.As to the criticisms of situations and actions by family and authority figures. Puhlease people, see any headlines in recent years of what parents,teachers, police, and the other kids are doing? And I'm talking about what makes it into the news. Tip of the proverbial iceberg. Imagine what goes unreported and covered up. THe story made Blake/Pamala very sympathetic. And others like Mr.Morris, Pam's father and sister and the other villans make you feel like throttling them.   Great story, I loved it.  Thank you for sharing it with us Pam.

I loved this story.  You are a very gifted writer and I will never forget this touching tale.  I hope one day, people will accept everyone no matter how different they are.  Thank you so much.

Kelly

It was a truly emotional story and it was very amazing

mdCv0P Author, keep doing  in the same way..!!

OMG I LOVED THIS STORY IT TOUCHED ME IN SUCH A SPECIAL WAY I LOVE IT I WISH I HAD THAT LIFE SURE THERE WAS TROUBLE BUT IT WASALL WORTH IT THIS WAS THE BEST STORY I HAVE EVER READ AND I WOULD LOVE TO TALK TO YOU PAMELA SO PLZ OR SOMEONE LIKE ME AND PAMELA "BLAKE" HAHAHAH LOL SO JUST SHOOT ME A MESG ID LOVE TO TALK :) BUT ANYWAYS THIS STORY IS STILL THE BEST THING I HAVE EVER READ EVER!!!!1

Dear Pamela,

I think you are a great writer and I believe you have a lot of talent. I like how the story started but then it got very weird, unrealistic and cruel. I love the character of Blake / Pamela. I thought it was wonderful how the girls club helped Blake being Pamela. However, the blow job he had to give the TV guy and after telling the girls about it they seemed rather curious than outraged by this forced sexual acts. Then Blake being raped by his younger sister and their friends. Blake is 15 years old so how old is his sister when she and her friends raped him? 14, 13 or 12? How did they buy beer and where the heck did they get the dildos from and why did they have them in the first place?

Oh and before that the girls showed Blake in detail how a period works. I feel that the graphic and detailed descriptions about this could have been left out. I also think that no girl would allow anyone else to pull out or push in their tampon.

Then there are women at a lingerie shower who all of a sudden turn into a furious mob shouting: Cut the cocks off of men! which is highly unrealistic.  

Ultimately, I believe that this story could have been much better. It has a lot of potential. I really dislike the cruel part with the rape. I also think that after something like this Blake would have not been mentally stable but in this story he moved on as if nothing really had happened.

This comment belongs to pirates and maidens, but this story is very bad too.
I'm sorry, but this is what I think.
silvia.

How a mother a father and a teacher could do such a thing with a son and a student?
This is insane!
Very bad story.
Silvia.

I WEPT ALOT LOVED IT

great start, looking forward to reading the rest of camp shoni

In addition to my previous comments, I have just finished chapter 8 and I must say that the whole chapter was revolting and cruel.  To think that a sister would not only allow her friends to rape her brother, but would do the same.  This story was rated as "sentimental and sweet".  How can forced "blow job" by a TV reporter and "rape" by a sister and friends be considered "sentimental and sweet."  Rape is a violent crime and act as well as "forced blow jobs." not to mention "blackmail" as another crime.  I truly love many of the stories that are correctly rated as "sentimental" and hold true to its meaning.  The way this story begins and flows demonstrates that you have a good writing ability, I am truly sorry that it is wasted on such cruel, mean acts to such a sweet boy as blake.  Surely, you can do better with your talent.  I would like to read a truly "sentimental" story written by you to see if my understanding of your talents are correct.

I have to agree with many of those who commented on this story.  It started off very well with compassion and understanding by the girls and Mrs. O'Connor. But then the TV reporter was cruel and I think it could have been left out or cleaned up.  It is a shame that someone with your writing ability and who started so well would turn to this rubbish.  I hope for your sake, that you are not revealing what is in your heart with this cruelty.  For a lonely boy, being picked on by bullies, being rescued by a group of girls, and "being turned into a girl" and acceptance by one of their mother's is a good premise for a story.  Then Mrs. Taylor with her cruel comments, TV reported forcing sexual pleasure from "Pamela" for the sake of filling up paper is a shame.  I hesitated on commenting on this story, but after reading what others said, I was compelled to do so.  Hopefully, with your talent, you will write a BETTER story for us who do not like cruelty, especially to an "eighth" grader (14 yr old).  Please write another, but please clean it up.  

I bet you are a cruel person, this could of been a kind story, i read a similar one where the family accepted the boy and helped him, i hope you add something to this and say sorry for writing such a cruel story i have to see how it finishes for my research as a writer.

you are making your story very cruel by having him found out, you should of been more sensitive, you obviously do not understand the pain a boy goes through when his mind and body does not match, this is fiction you could of been kinder, some boys who grow up to be men and want to be girls end up hiding it all their lives, and that causes pain, because they do not feel comfortable in their clothes or gender.

I ONLY READ THREE PARTS SO FAR BUT THIS IS FICTION COULDN'T YOU MAKE HIS PARENTS MORE UNDERSTANDING AND HIS SISTERS? I SURE YOU ARE GOING TO HAVE HIM GET CAUGHT BY HIS FAMILY THAT IS WRONG, IF I AM  WRONG I AM SORRY, I CAN UNDERSTAND THE CHARACTER OF BLAKE, I WISH I HAD FRIENDS LIKE THAT.

My thanks to Kristi Fitzpatrick and (AJ) Eric for the warnings. I've been duped by similar misclassifications into reading horror stories with extremely graphic rape, castration, and dismemberment scenes, or scenes of other kinds of graphically described abuse, all with no warning provided either by the authors nor their commentators. The severely traumatized and very sensitive among us (and I believe that there are more of those in the TG community than in the general population) have reason enough to avoid stories like that, which can easily enough trigger flashbacks. The ratings, story categories, and summaries are there for a purpose, and I sure don't appreciate authors who do not accurately describe for their readers what sort of story they are about to read.

" it's hard to believe it's actually going to start"

It is harder still to have to find that we are at chapter 9 already and (S)he has only just arrived at the camp.  A well written tale, with soooo much suspense, but more than a few times I felt myself wishing we would hurry up and get there.  At last!  

I wonder now how things will turn out, and how long before (s)he gets found out.  

That was such a touching story!  It is difficult to not cry so as to be able to read it! I feel that you are a very good writer and should never stop!  I felt as though that I was Pamela with her worries and fears. Hmmm! I am her only my name is Vivien!  Keep on writing hon!

            Love

                    Vivien

finally finished the story their isa lot of twists&turns and some very vicious things that have happend to blake it wasc a brilliant story well worth readin the explantions &acceptance were brilliant at the end what a way to go more stories please well done

I have read parts 5-12 and find that this story is amazing all the trials &tribulations that blake is going through it amazes me also how now that the girls &princible of his school know how long before his parents get to know bearing in mind his sisters know one who is vicsious and very nast &one who is helping blake its also amaxing tat his parents donot know or have found out a double life very dangerous but the story is brilliant i will comment further when i have read the rest of it brilliant many twists &turns well done you have a great knack for writing

i have read parts 1-4 the story is very well described &its amzing how the girls are acepting him as one of there own the frank discussions about period etc was very unexpected it seems that he is really enjoying himself with the girls how amazing this would be in true life i will coment further after reading more so far a very good story

Somebody down below already said it, but a story with explicit, highly descriptive sex, rape, molestation and repeated gratuitous humiliation scenes doesn't belong either in the R category or "sweet/sentimental".

Quite an emotional ride, but all told, I'm sorry I blew an entire night reading this.  I just hope the author doesn't plan to take "Camp Shoni" down this path.

Eric

Excellent story, I was concerened that too much trama would harm the new girl's pysche but it only twisted a little (i suspect she will get enough money from moris to pay for surgery) The short time spam of the story was a little rough on me, you got in every horror scene I can think of in a few weeks , exposure in the mall (twice!) beatings, femdom, sucking by threat, slavery and all the good scenes too, finding girlfriends of every age, motherly care, sister helping, understanding boy.  

Thank you for writing, I wish you great things in your life.
It was wonderful to see with my minds eye thru yours.

Every once in a while, a master piece comes along and this is truly one of them.  It's mind blowing and awesome and left me hungry for more.
-sv

Pamela, A really great story, kept me on the edge of my seat all the way. Really want to know how Pam goes on from here.

Dear Pamela:

  Well that was quite a shock in some ways. Rated R? I think X or XXX would be closer. Still I read all I could about Pamela and you did make me very concerned about her. Also some of the horrible things surely could have happened. Though there were too many to believe, I think. Surely she would have broken down, at least, after all she went through?

  There was a sense of impending disaster that made the good parts seem very short lived. Still you conveyed the sweetness of Pamela so very clearly that I was very worried about her. I had to know she made it through all right.

   Your story is very strong on crisis and resolution and certainly has plenty to keep on us the edge of our seats. The X scenes were really hard to take especially for someone so young and innocent and the modeling situation was totally implausible. So all in all there were very enjoyable parts and very unpleasant parts. Still I liked your story and appreciate all your effort.

Hugs,

Kristi

I wish I was Pamela!!!!

Nicely done I kind of liked the characters that you gave to the story. Made an enjoyable reading.

Diane

Generally well written, although a bit self-consciously stiff style, but what happened to sweet and sentimental? Child molestation and explicit sexual activity hardly fits that category.

Amazing work. From the opening chapter to the latest installment i've been enthralled. Clear, precise and well layed out this story is simply a pleasure to read. I look forward to more of this and other stories to appear.

wished I had read this story earlier. I loved it.

I don't know how I missed the 1st 6 parts but i'm on your story line now. Very well written and I will be following the rest of the story. ( I love it)

an absolute delight - a fantasy we all wish we could have lived - I am ready to begin my day.  I have read today's installment.....

great job keep it going this is a good story. outstanding i want to know more

Pamela very good story so far and keep up the good work.

from jill