Spell check isn't going to help this one.  First, learn the difference between witch and which, there and their, hole and whole....need I go on?

Bad and disgustng story you wrote!
The sister, the mother, and all the other girls should be dead!
Silvia.

a little raw

If you couldn't read the story please don't blame it on spelling.
Yes, this story was rather 'raw' but it was readable.

It was also one of the 'blackest' stories I've read in quite a while.
I totally agree with a suicide as the outcome here.

And what worst, judging from the characters described no one will feel they did anything wrong after the happening.
A very sad tale.

cheers
Yoron.

6 mth on they find him dead as a door nail. Nice mum sis

This story really needs to be withdrawn, proofread, then resubmitted. The spelling is baad, and it should be more than five paragraphs. You also need to increase the ages of your characters to high school age to make it work.

I hope this isn't an example of what's being taught in schools today. This is definately a case of this one child (the author)was left behind!
I couldn't get past the first few sentences before I lost interest because I couldn't overlook all of the spelling errors.

For God's sake, use a spell checker! And maybe proofread the thing. This level of writing wouldn't even be acceptable in Junior High.

So what happens when Mom or Lisa finds his lifeless body in the bathroom with blood over everything from his slit writs and "Believe me now?" written in blood on the mirror?