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Great One
by Jennifer White

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Comment by Lady Nadja on 07/25/07
Yes, I hope Amy gets what She deserves: total, craven obedience!
I can equate with Amy even if many of these others cannot: I think She is a magnificent creation. For me there is nothing better than looking down a thighful of tight black leather at a cringing male slave, or thrusting a beautiful, silk-sheathed leg through the slit in a peignoir and seeing a man sink to his knees at the sight. I love control. So, keep up the great work, Jennifer!
LOL Nadja

Comment by Tiffany on 05/23/07
while i like most of your stories these kind disturb me and just make me pissed off.  It would be a great story if it had a happy ending if after the final Transformation of Julia that Amy's plan backfires and Katie's love for Ken is able to be realized she leaves him and since Katie's commands are able to be received by Julia that it breaks the spell over Julia and ken regains control but Julia is mixed in with him.  Katie and  Ken then could devise a plan to get back at amy and she gets what she finally deserves.

Comment by cindi247 on 06/20/06
How I wish it had been Amy who had shown me the way.  My Joanne  changed my life and now has left me adrift on a sea of memory.

Comment by Sissy Baby Paula on 01/09/06
Wow! A dark tale well written. The only snags I can see is why it was necessary to turn Ken into Julia (discounting the need for a maid and revenge) as a break up could have been orcestrated and the other question is what happens after the honeymoon? Legally Katie and Ken are a married couple and both their families think so. Someone would propably make them see a shrink and Amy's influence might come out. And I also agree with the previous comment that Amy is one sick lady.

Hugs from Sissy Baby Paula and Snowball (my toy puppy)

Comment by Reviewer  #65 on 01/02/06
I'm more a fan of magic transformations, as opposed to the idea of mind control to enforce surgical transformation, but that's personal taste.  

My only real complaint is the Amy character.  Instead of tossing 3 paragraphs of explanation at the end, I think it would have been better if you gave hints of what was really going on throughout.  Possibly have Ken not trust her right from the get-go.  Someone who would do this, especially to her best friend, is obviously mentally disturbed.  And that's fine, but you don't know someone for 4 years and not get the idea that they have issues.  I was having problems believing Amy's character throughout the whole story, and that can be fixed, basically by scattering some information from the last 3 paragraphs through the rest of the story, and saving maybe one sinister line or so for the end.

Comment by Calamariee on 01/01/06
Nicely done, once again, you use an interesting formula for weaving your tales...



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