good start cannot wait untill the next installment but please make it longer overall a great start to a story thankyou

The author claims it's true, and I don't know for sure how much of it was fabricated, but either way, at least it's realistic.  Most of the stories on this site have NO chance of happening in real life, and I find this irritating.

it is a good story to read and wondering what happens in the next chapter.

The manner of ones speach
Is often a bit of a reach
Too often two words you might say
Are to be spelled in a different way
Homophonics are easy things to teach.

Don't write like you're texting a message
Write slowly and deliberately, like dressage
Spell check and reread
And then you will feed
You muse and your readers head won't need a massage.

wel when do we get more i can hardly wait   ms. foxxx please  write soon as the suspense is killing me  

shawnna

Good begining to what has the makings of a fine story.  However, this piece cries out for some proof reading: missing words, run-on paragraphs, etc.  Maybe Michelle could take advantage of one of the volunteer editors that can be found on the Author's page of Crystal's site.

I look forward to improvement in future episodes.

SS